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Comment from Jasmine Girl
Congratulations to #200
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I think you went over board with the foreign language and there are quite a few strange characters. I would use a stick if I feel the hill is too high to climb. So far I don't but I used one when we hopped rocks in a river.
Well doen
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Congratulations to #200
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I think you went over board with the foreign language and there are quite a few strange characters. I would use a stick if I feel the hill is too high to climb. So far I don't but I used one when we hopped rocks in a river.
Well doen
Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your amusing review. I now use a walking stick everytime I walk outside.The grass is all snarly as it was not raining enough to need to be mown after I weed whacked. So now my neighbor is going to mow it all, if we ever get a couple dry days. We're at the other extreme, now.
Comment from Mabaker12
Not bad dear Liz, but a tad loose. Lot's of dialogue with no explanation for the reader who's not been with you throughout. Check those little snags, or your reader is standing scratching their head. Apart from that it's great as usual. Luv Anne
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Not bad dear Liz, but a tad loose. Lot's of dialogue with no explanation for the reader who's not been with you throughout. Check those little snags, or your reader is standing scratching their head. Apart from that it's great as usual. Luv Anne
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your supportive review. It's good to know how it comes across.
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That's what friends is about Liz able to give a hint but never to hurt the writer, and you know I would never do that. Luv Anne
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I know you say everything with love. That is never a problem with us.
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You know, I check and recheck my work before posting, and then one reviewer found four snags ugh! One sentence too long. And so forth. Gave me a 5 because he said "When you take up writing properly, and learn from reviews advice!! Plus, note corrections, you have potienshiel!!! That's spelt wrong, but you get my drift.
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I don't do correcting on people's writing. I did that too much as a teacher. I figure someone else will. I like pointing the positive. Never mind what critics say. Focus on how good you write by reading positive people's reviews. It's weird, we might have 9 people say something positive & if the 10th person is critical, that's all we hear & focus on. Sending love
Comment from Douglas Goff
Wow. Interesting. It was hard to find anything wrong with this.
A couple of minor things:
Foreign language sentences are usually italicized.
gods' sakes."
Say this out loud. No 's' on god.
Very nice work. Keep it going!
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Wow. Interesting. It was hard to find anything wrong with this.
A couple of minor things:
Foreign language sentences are usually italicized.
gods' sakes."
Say this out loud. No 's' on god.
Very nice work. Keep it going!
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Wow, thank you for such a positive review. If you ever wanted to check out previous chapters, you are welcome to do so with no review necessary. Just enjoy. If you want to just begin as they are vortexed into the 16th century, begin on ch.16. The earlier chapters are factual about the powerspots in England.
Comment from country ranch writer
Interesting journey they are taking . Hope they can discover the steps and can climb them without to much of a hassle. Maybe they can climb with a walking stick or some sort of implement the can use. if the
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Interesting journey they are taking . Hope they can discover the steps and can climb them without to much of a hassle. Maybe they can climb with a walking stick or some sort of implement the can use. if the
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I never leave home without a walking stick.
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