One Thousand Cranes
Viewing comments for Chapter 123 "Do You Hear My Tears?"Gypsy's Favorites
22 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
An enchanting presentation, and a fine nonet that is great poetry too.
The longing for someone separated by distance that may be "oceans of time" or miles of distance.
Great job here, and I wish you luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
  |
An enchanting presentation, and a fine nonet that is great poetry too.
The longing for someone separated by distance that may be "oceans of time" or miles of distance.
Great job here, and I wish you luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
-
Gloria,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Think big thoughts but relish small pleasures." -- Jackson Brown Jr.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent nonet poem Gypsy, the syllable count is spot on, and the theme is a good one for this style of poem, beautifully written, Gypsy, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
|
This is an excellent nonet poem Gypsy, the syllable count is spot on, and the theme is a good one for this style of poem, beautifully written, Gypsy, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
-
Thank you very much, roy, for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"Think big thoughts but relish small pleasures." -- Jackson Brown Jr.
-
Most welcome
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Beautiful verse, Gypsy!!!
The mood is sultry...
The love is true...
The longing is deep...
The desire overflows like a mystical waterfall.
Your phraseology is excellent. The carefully chosen words pull the reader in, embraces them and puts them to bed to dream.
I appreciate the presentation as it mirrors the sentiment left.
This is a strong contest entry,
good luck to you!!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
|
Beautiful verse, Gypsy!!!
The mood is sultry...
The love is true...
The longing is deep...
The desire overflows like a mystical waterfall.
Your phraseology is excellent. The carefully chosen words pull the reader in, embraces them and puts them to bed to dream.
I appreciate the presentation as it mirrors the sentiment left.
This is a strong contest entry,
good luck to you!!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
-
Your outstanding beautiful review is appreciated. You have a way with words, I bet you are an excellent writer or poet...perhaps both. Thank you very much for your exceptional review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have presented a diminishing series of beautiful sentiments here. What I liked most about it was that every line or two was capable of standing alone. This gave the reader time to reflect. Very nice. Kate xx
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
|
You have presented a diminishing series of beautiful sentiments here. What I liked most about it was that every line or two was capable of standing alone. This gave the reader time to reflect. Very nice. Kate xx
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
-
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Wow. This is a second love poem you wrote today. You are on a roll. I love the line: Do you hear my tears?
The crying is so loud that he might hear it from far away. It's common in the old days.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
|
Wow. This is a second love poem you wrote today. You are on a roll. I love the line: Do you hear my tears?
The crying is so loud that he might hear it from far away. It's common in the old days.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
-
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from lyenochka
I'm so glad that you are entering the contest because you are gifted to win many different styles of poetry contests! Great way to share the longing of someone missing a loved one. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
|
I'm so glad that you are entering the contest because you are gifted to win many different styles of poetry contests! Great way to share the longing of someone missing a loved one. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
-
I forget to check. I was surprised how many free contest, that i like, were available. I think i have won two or three. It's such a great surprise. I enter way before the deadline so it's an unspected treat. Thank you very much, Helen. I appreciate your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
MariVal ❤️
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from harmony13
I found this poem to be powerful! The author's words are crying out without options! These words were intense and seem to convey there are no answer! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome
and compliments these words.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
|
I found this poem to be powerful! The author's words are crying out without options! These words were intense and seem to convey there are no answer! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome
and compliments these words.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
-
Thank you very much, Harmony. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"A sunset is the sun's fiery kiss to the night." -Crystal Woods
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Gypsy Queen,
your first line sets the mood for a reader to connect emotionally. Your second and third lines paint a visual connection, as my eyes drift to the longing. BTW... love the second line.
As the harvest moon bleeds outside... it's very visual in a mind's eye.
It has that sense of pining for the love one needs, yet is too far to actually grasp... so it adds the feeling of melancholy in that knowing.
The font and presentation are alluring... even the image stares to you eyes-to-eyes.
Beautiful entry for this Nonet Poem Contest Reina Gitana.
Mis mejores deseos para ti hermosa Amiga.
With our thoughts we create...
a bridge of illusion.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
 |
Hi Gypsy Queen,
your first line sets the mood for a reader to connect emotionally. Your second and third lines paint a visual connection, as my eyes drift to the longing. BTW... love the second line.
As the harvest moon bleeds outside... it's very visual in a mind's eye.
It has that sense of pining for the love one needs, yet is too far to actually grasp... so it adds the feeling of melancholy in that knowing.
The font and presentation are alluring... even the image stares to you eyes-to-eyes.
Beautiful entry for this Nonet Poem Contest Reina Gitana.
Mis mejores deseos para ti hermosa Amiga.
With our thoughts we create...
a bridge of illusion.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for the exceptional six stars review. Your words resonate with me, it's like you got inside my head and know exactly what I meant to write. I am happy you can visualize the poem, that is my intention. It's one of the reasons I fell in-love with haiku ... it's so visual... like me.
Gracias, Seņor Jaime, besitos y abrazos
Reina Gitana
"A sunset is the sun's fiery kiss to the night." -Crystal Woods
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Very nice nonet. Syllable count on point and the message is consistent and loud and clear. Nothing sounds forced for syllable's sake and everything works together well. Very nice.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
|
Very nice nonet. Syllable count on point and the message is consistent and loud and clear. Nothing sounds forced for syllable's sake and everything works together well. Very nice.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
-
Thank you very much, Gary. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"A sunset is the sun's fiery kiss to the night." -Crystal Woods
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Nonet poem- very interesting form- good picture presentation- Poem paints a clear picture of lost love - good use of metaphors describing separation and distance between - good job
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
|
I like your Nonet poem- very interesting form- good picture presentation- Poem paints a clear picture of lost love - good use of metaphors describing separation and distance between - good job
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
-
Thank you very much, AP. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"A sunset is the sun's fiery kiss to the night." -Crystal Woods
"A sunset is the sun's fiery kiss to the night." -Crystal Woods