Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Good story. Well written. Good work.
and must had passed out - and must (have) passed out
I believe that what you described is entirely possible.
Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2022

Thank you for your review and comments.