Broken
A veteran's perspective.35 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very well written acrostic poem. It is so heartbreaking and also so true for so many veterans. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This is a very well written acrostic poem. It is so heartbreaking and also so true for so many veterans. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This issue is near and dear to me. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from estory
The rigid construction really seems to mimick that image of the cage. Nice job of form underscoring theme here. I liked the images too; the rage that seems to shake the bars of the cage. We get all that frustration at not being able to break out of the pain. estory
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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The rigid construction really seems to mimick that image of the cage. Nice job of form underscoring theme here. I liked the images too; the rage that seems to shake the bars of the cage. We get all that frustration at not being able to break out of the pain. estory
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks man. I wrote it, but the feelings came from a suffering vet. I appreciate you and your review.
Comment from Laurie Holding
This hits home for so many of us, and I thank you for posting it. I have a nephew who came home a completely different person from his time in the Marines, and my heart aches for him. Good luck to you and to your family member who is suffering. And thank you for your service.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This hits home for so many of us, and I thank you for posting it. I have a nephew who came home a completely different person from his time in the Marines, and my heart aches for him. Good luck to you and to your family member who is suffering. And thank you for your service.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much! My brother came back a different person as well.
God Bless.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very powerful, and necessary reminder that not all wounds are visible.
Well-written poem highlighting an important issue. Great job.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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A very powerful, and necessary reminder that not all wounds are visible.
Well-written poem highlighting an important issue. Great job.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Mary.
Comment from Wendy G
Well done! Yes, the memories of war are indeed a cruel cage, and your informative notes add meaning. My father lost his twin brother in the war. My grandfather also suffered PTSD from his war experiences. Excellent poem, vivid, meaningful, descriptive.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Well done! Yes, the memories of war are indeed a cruel cage, and your informative notes add meaning. My father lost his twin brother in the war. My grandfather also suffered PTSD from his war experiences. Excellent poem, vivid, meaningful, descriptive.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Wendy. Those men should never be forgotten. This issue is near and dear to me.
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Excellent job of capturing the pain and helplessness of mental illness. Particularly liked the poem's last line. The cage metaphor is so appropriate. Saying a prayer for your family member and all the vets that find themselves similarly caged.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Excellent job of capturing the pain and helplessness of mental illness. Particularly liked the poem's last line. The cage metaphor is so appropriate. Saying a prayer for your family member and all the vets that find themselves similarly caged.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This issue is near and dear to me.
Comment from GWHARGIS
My son was a medic in Afghanistan. He still has PTSD. Won't talk about it. It's true that though the body may survive, the mind might not. Your poem was heartwrenching and sad. Beautifullybwritten. Good luck in the contest.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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My son was a medic in Afghanistan. He still has PTSD. Won't talk about it. It's true that though the body may survive, the mind might not. Your poem was heartwrenching and sad. Beautifullybwritten. Good luck in the contest.
Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you and I understand. This issue is near and dear to me. Just be there for your boy when he is ready to share.
Douglas
Comment from Susan Newell
Douglas,
This deserves a six, but I'm fresh out. I have often said that throughout history women have under appreciated the sacrifices men make to go to war and take lives. It is no small price they pay for our, and the Children's, protection and safety. Thank you for writing this.
Sue
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Douglas,
This deserves a six, but I'm fresh out. I have often said that throughout history women have under appreciated the sacrifices men make to go to war and take lives. It is no small price they pay for our, and the Children's, protection and safety. Thank you for writing this.
Sue
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thanks Sue! Appreciate your kind words!
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Comment from Brandon Clark
Great job! You cleverly incorporated those words that that so many veterans feel, even if they sometimes can't exactly define them.
Sometimes it can be difficult to read works involving these topics; however, not as difficult as what the veterans have been through and it is important to continue to read, research and write about these difficult subjects...lest we forget.
My father served in both campaigns as well. Thanks to you and your family member for serving! And thank you for sharing such a personal work!!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Great job! You cleverly incorporated those words that that so many veterans feel, even if they sometimes can't exactly define them.
Sometimes it can be difficult to read works involving these topics; however, not as difficult as what the veterans have been through and it is important to continue to read, research and write about these difficult subjects...lest we forget.
My father served in both campaigns as well. Thanks to you and your family member for serving! And thank you for sharing such a personal work!!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thanks! It is an issue that is near and dear to me!
Comment from RodG
You convey very well the feelings of a war veteran. Indeed, for many of these warriors the horrors of war continue to manifest in nightmares and feelings of isolation. I will never be a fan of AABB. rhyming, but I liked your acrostic.
Rod
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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You convey very well the feelings of a war veteran. Indeed, for many of these warriors the horrors of war continue to manifest in nightmares and feelings of isolation. I will never be a fan of AABB. rhyming, but I liked your acrostic.
Rod
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you Rod!
