One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from zanya
Really ? isn't that an interesting format of the Jisei - -a poem written before their own death - I wonder what Fanstorians might come up with for this format ?
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Really ? isn't that an interesting format of the Jisei - -a poem written before their own death - I wonder what Fanstorians might come up with for this format ?
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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I had a jisei event for my Japanese. Club event and members wrote jisei poems.
Thank you very much for your time and review.
Gypsy
Comment from dragonpoet
Gypsy,
This jisei is a nice love poem that shows you want to be looking into your love's eyes as you die. So, it seems, You want to die first.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Gypsy,
This jisei is a nice love poem that shows you want to be looking into your love's eyes as you die. So, it seems, You want to die first.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Hello, Joan, jiseis are written in the poets dying bed.
thank you for understanding my poem. I always appreciate your insightful and kind reviews. ♡ HUGS
Gypsy
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You?re welcome, Gypsy.
Joan
Comment from royowen
What a nice thing to say or write, there is so much sunlight in the eyes of my grands, I love to see it. Beautifully written dear girl, you are a lucky one, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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What a nice thing to say or write, there is so much sunlight in the eyes of my grands, I love to see it. Beautifully written dear girl, you are a lucky one, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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thank you for understanding my poem. I always appreciate your insightful and kind reviews. ♡ HUGS
Gypsy
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely jisei poem which combines the beauty of the sunset which also symbolizes the death of the day as well as the end of life, with the beauty of the loved one's eyes. It makes it easier to leave this world remembering all the love and beauty experienced.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Lovely jisei poem which combines the beauty of the sunset which also symbolizes the death of the day as well as the end of life, with the beauty of the loved one's eyes. It makes it easier to leave this world remembering all the love and beauty experienced.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Helen, thank you for understanding my poem. I always appreciate your insightful and kind reviews. ♡ HUGS
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Gypsy
Smiles you did so well with your Jisei Poem
The Last Thing I Do
It does have a sad tune, the thing is you express your self in your authors
notes poem written by the poet before their own death.
Gert
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Gypsy
Smiles you did so well with your Jisei Poem
The Last Thing I Do
It does have a sad tune, the thing is you express your self in your authors
notes poem written by the poet before their own death.
Gert
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much, gert, take care.
Gypsy
Comment from aryr
This was a wonderful and remarkable Jisei, Gypsy. It definitely showed that your final wish would be to see the sunset in its beauty through another's eyes. I truly loved this one. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This was a wonderful and remarkable Jisei, Gypsy. It definitely showed that your final wish would be to see the sunset in its beauty through another's eyes. I truly loved this one. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I'm glad you like this one ♡ blessed be.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Most welcome, Gypsy, blessed be n hugs!
Comment from karenina
This is such a strong reflective thought. When pondering one's death I can see these words dawning in the heart and flying up to the lips to be whispered gently! Lovely sentiment beautifully said!
Karenina
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This is such a strong reflective thought. When pondering one's death I can see these words dawning in the heart and flying up to the lips to be whispered gently! Lovely sentiment beautifully said!
Karenina
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much, karenina. I appreciate your kind review. I'm glad you like this one ♡
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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I like all of yours!
Comment from KJ
Very evocative. I wondered what it might be like to switch the 'is' in line 3 to 'be' so it reads "may the last thing...be to watch". Just a suggestion. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Very evocative. I wondered what it might be like to switch the 'is' in line 3 to 'be' so it reads "may the last thing...be to watch". Just a suggestion. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from robyn corum
M.,
What a beautiful, sentimental moment! I can see this being spoken by someone truly in love and who is willing to share the depths of their heart (oh, obviously NOT my hubby.) hahaha
One small note, if I may:
may the last thing
I do in life
is to watch
the sunset in your eyes
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may the last thing
I do in life
(be) to watch
the sunset in your eyes
*
Lovely!
Thanks so much!
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reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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M.,
What a beautiful, sentimental moment! I can see this being spoken by someone truly in love and who is willing to share the depths of their heart (oh, obviously NOT my hubby.) hahaha
One small note, if I may:
may the last thing
I do in life
is to watch
the sunset in your eyes
*
may the last thing
I do in life
(be) to watch
the sunset in your eyes
*
Lovely!
Thanks so much!
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Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much, Robyn. I appreciate your kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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OOOoooohhh... I likey!
Comment from jessizero
This is a beautiful last image. I wish I knew more to say than "beautiful." I don't know what else to say about it. Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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This is a beautiful last image. I wish I knew more to say than "beautiful." I don't know what else to say about it. Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Jessi,
Thank you very much. I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus