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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Gramps"Stories, poems, flashes
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Things aren't always as we think they are, and neither is the man on the park bench or standing in your kitchen doorway. Now, I just wish that wad of dollar bills, were hundreds. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Things aren't always as we think they are, and neither is the man on the park bench or standing in your kitchen doorway. Now, I just wish that wad of dollar bills, were hundreds. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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With egg on my face, I shamefully thank you for finding the time to read my post and to respond. I have taken two days of reading and answering posts and am still 50 away.
Smiles and hugs and greatly appreciated.
Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You are at it again, writing these stories that make me want to cry. At least this one is a happy type of tear-jerker. It even has a beautiful ending this time. It is a lovely story and I enjoyed every word.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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You are at it again, writing these stories that make me want to cry. At least this one is a happy type of tear-jerker. It even has a beautiful ending this time. It is a lovely story and I enjoyed every word.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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With egg on my face, I shamefully thank you for finding the time to read my post and to respond. I have taken two days of reading and answering posts and am still 50 away.
Smiles and hugs and greatly appreciated.
Carol
Comment from royowen
What a lovely story Carol, we should forgive those that have hurt us, spontaneously and with generosity, complete acceptance of them and greet them as the Father would willingly greet us, just plain glad to be re aquatinted, Jesus understood that. Beautifully written dear Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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What a lovely story Carol, we should forgive those that have hurt us, spontaneously and with generosity, complete acceptance of them and greet them as the Father would willingly greet us, just plain glad to be re aquatinted, Jesus understood that. Beautifully written dear Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Roy. Today is the 5th anniversary of my father's death and I think my mind was wandering what would have happened if we had had the opportunity to make amends. I hope we both would have seen how much we had to lose.
Smiles, CArol
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I agree with you, forgetting the past, except for the good things is paramount to being useful.
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a very interesting story. I'm confused about Patti's age. She seems young in most of the story; but she goes to the park by herself, and uses words like "sappy," which make her seem older. I like that Naomi forgave the past and held out her hand to her dad. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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This is a very interesting story. I'm confused about Patti's age. She seems young in most of the story; but she goes to the park by herself, and uses words like "sappy," which make her seem older. I like that Naomi forgave the past and held out her hand to her dad. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I am making her about the same as Annie in the other stories. I guess I don't think of the children of today and what they face..... I am more of a country girl with small town thoughts. LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Thanks for the clarification. I live in a city and our 8-year-old grandson doesn't play out front without an adult on the porch. Crazy world these days.
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Even in the country, I don't trust anyone either....I think my mindset was more the way life use to be
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I used to walk a mile to school, or go to the store for my mom, and never thought anything of it. Not any more! :)
Have a joyous weekend.
Comment from Anne Johnston
What a beautiful story you have written. I don't know whether this is fiction or true but such a wonderful way for a father and daughter to be re-united. It is a great picture of true forgiveness, forgetting the past and embracing the present.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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What a beautiful story you have written. I don't know whether this is fiction or true but such a wonderful way for a father and daughter to be re-united. It is a great picture of true forgiveness, forgetting the past and embracing the present.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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It is fiction but today is the 5 year anniversary of my dad's death and I guess he was on my mind. We didn't have a great relationship because he wanted a boy. I did my best and my mother said he thought I was great, but I never felt it. Maybe I wish he could come back and we could mend fences somehow.
Hugs, Carol
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You are welcome, Carol
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A poignant piece of flash fiction. Heartbreaking but also filled with the spirit of forgiveness. Nice twist to leave the fact that he had abandoned the woman years ago.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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A poignant piece of flash fiction. Heartbreaking but also filled with the spirit of forgiveness. Nice twist to leave the fact that he had abandoned the woman years ago.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Today is the 5th anniversary of my father's death. I wasn't abandoned but I never felt "good enough" or even loved. I guess somewhere in my mind I was thinking about how maybe it would have been different if we had one last chance to make amends.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Oh what a lovely story that pulls at the heart strings, Carol. I'm glad Naomi could see the pain of regret in her father's face and give him a second chance.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Oh what a lovely story that pulls at the heart strings, Carol. I'm glad Naomi could see the pain of regret in her father's face and give him a second chance.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I believe my mind was wondering how my father and I would have connected if we had the chance one last time. It's the 5th anniversary of his death and he was a very stubborn man who left me feeling unwanted. I would hope I could forgive and he could bend.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written story. Good work.
It's a very nice piece, one that leaves the reader with a lot of questions in its wake.
My only wonderment was Patti's age, whether she was old enough to go out alone, yet still speak with obvious youth.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Well written story. Good work.
It's a very nice piece, one that leaves the reader with a lot of questions in its wake.
My only wonderment was Patti's age, whether she was old enough to go out alone, yet still speak with obvious youth.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I am thinking she has a bit of a sheltered life, but lives in a small town in the country... they have more freedom or at least they did once upon a time. Thanks so much for your kindness and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading. It's amazing what can happen in our lives. Thank you for sharing.
His lips quivered as he spoke. "Naomi." (comma needed after 'spoke')
His hand steadied himself with the door jam as Patti jumped up and down, (door jamb I got called on it too. LOL
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading. It's amazing what can happen in our lives. Thank you for sharing.
His lips quivered as he spoke. "Naomi." (comma needed after 'spoke')
His hand steadied himself with the door jam as Patti jumped up and down, (door jamb I got called on it too. LOL
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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With egg on my face, I shamefully thank you for finding the time to read my post and to respond. I have taken two days of reading and answering posts and am still 50 away.
Smiles and hugs and greatly appreciated.
Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, that was so nice. We don't know all the reasons a parent leaves. There could be more to it than we think. This was a lovely story, with a happy ending thanks to a little girl who loved them both. Well done, again, my friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Aw, that was so nice. We don't know all the reasons a parent leaves. There could be more to it than we think. This was a lovely story, with a happy ending thanks to a little girl who loved them both. Well done, again, my friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Today is the 5th anniversary of my dad's death and I woke up thinking of him. I guess I wondered if we had the chance would things be different. I never felt wanted no matter how hard I struggled to please him, but my mother said it was just his stubborn German way. I imagine the dear lady was right because mother's always are. LOL
Hugs, Carol
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Sometimes men can't show their feelings, it embarrasses them. And Germans are especially that way. It's just something they are like. Then you have the French, who show their emotions regardless of who is around. I'm sure he loved you, your mum is right xxx