Belonging
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is so very sad and how a Mother can abandon her child like that is unbelievable. My Mother was not maternal and didn't really want children, she went on to have four! At least we were not abandoned, a very sad write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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This is so very sad and how a Mother can abandon her child like that is unbelievable. My Mother was not maternal and didn't really want children, she went on to have four! At least we were not abandoned, a very sad write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Yeah it was sad hearing about what my mom went through, but 33 years later they were reunited. It?s a long story, but my mom turned out to be pretty amazing. Thank you so much for the review
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem describes the feelings of being adopted well. But, it doesn't follow the format. It needs to be two four line stanzas and one five line stanza.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Dragonpoet
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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This poem describes the feelings of being adopted well. But, it doesn't follow the format. It needs to be two four line stanzas and one five line stanza.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Dragonpoet
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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I have never written this type of poetry before, I separated the lines so that it would be an easier read. But I went ahead and clumped them together in the stanzas. Thank you for letting me know.
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You're welcome. Glad I could help.
Joan
Comment from Versch
This is a very touching poem of a child of three not having a family, never known his mom and dad. It is so sad, although it has a happy ending when someone adopted him. And so sad to happen to your mom. Good luck in the contest! Ver
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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This is a very touching poem of a child of three not having a family, never known his mom and dad. It is so sad, although it has a happy ending when someone adopted him. And so sad to happen to your mom. Good luck in the contest! Ver
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Thank You for your comments and your review. I really appreciate it 😊
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very powerful poem about the pain of growing up adopted. the traumatic childhood memories shine throughout this somewhat dark tribute to finding one's family.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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very powerful poem about the pain of growing up adopted. the traumatic childhood memories shine throughout this somewhat dark tribute to finding one's family.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your review I really appreciate it.
Comment from ESOSTINE
I found the free flow of your poem unforced, making a smooth read. Missing the loving parental care from childhood could be an experience hard to overcome, and a great turning point in one's life. Thanks for sharing your world, and good luck in the contest. Lol.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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I found the free flow of your poem unforced, making a smooth read. Missing the loving parental care from childhood could be an experience hard to overcome, and a great turning point in one's life. Thanks for sharing your world, and good luck in the contest. Lol.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to review this and for your well wishes I really appreciate it 😊
Comment from Aspiring2Write
This is a wonderful poem. Makes me cry with joy, that he has a home now, after the hardships. Wishing you the best in your future writing.
Yours Truly,
Joshua Law
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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This is a wonderful poem. Makes me cry with joy, that he has a home now, after the hardships. Wishing you the best in your future writing.
Yours Truly,
Joshua Law
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank You so much Joshua!
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XOXO
Thank you 😊
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your rondel poem and what a great story you told in your poem. Someone who is adopted into a loving family can really appreciate that love. I was sad to hear about your mother's experience but I'm sure a lot of healing took place when she had her own family.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Great job with your rondel poem and what a great story you told in your poem. Someone who is adopted into a loving family can really appreciate that love. I was sad to hear about your mother's experience but I'm sure a lot of healing took place when she had her own family.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your review, yes my mom ended up being an amazing person. She reconnected with her mom 33 years later. Long story.
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Oh, sounds like you have book to be written!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a heartbreaking thought your mother carried throughout her life, Mystery Author. You did a good job expressing your thoughts and feelings in your contest entry. Your words read smooth though poignant.
Imagine this happens to others more times than not. Your repeated line works well to emphasize the dilemma.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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What a heartbreaking thought your mother carried throughout her life, Mystery Author. You did a good job expressing your thoughts and feelings in your contest entry. Your words read smooth though poignant.
Imagine this happens to others more times than not. Your repeated line works well to emphasize the dilemma.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the review and the kind comments. I appreciate it very much. My mom ended up meeting her mom 33 years later. Long story 😊
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I don't know many adopted people but, I've seen the shows and felt the constant tension just finding out where you belong. I think you did a fantastic job in writing this. It helps the rest of us understand.
xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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I don't know many adopted people but, I've seen the shows and felt the constant tension just finding out where you belong. I think you did a fantastic job in writing this. It helps the rest of us understand.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much Kiwi, I think it?s hard to find a place to belong in general let alone feeling abandoned. Thank you for your awesome review
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a very good poem for this contest, good luck. The way you flow the poem is really good, even with the repeats it just flows from one thought to the other seamlessly. A job well-done.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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This is a very good poem for this contest, good luck. The way you flow the poem is really good, even with the repeats it just flows from one thought to the other seamlessly. A job well-done.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, I?ve never written one or of heard of this type of poem but I thought I would give it a try.
