Little Boy Lost
Inspired by a True Event.29 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
A very touching little story I am glad it ended well. You have effectively recreated the panic of the searching party.All the best for the contest. happy New year!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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A very touching little story I am glad it ended well. You have effectively recreated the panic of the searching party.All the best for the contest. happy New year!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to review my story . Glad you enjoyed it and please take care. All the best for the New Year.
Barry
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It must be every parents nightmare to have a child go missing. It's not that often that they are found alive, so the relief and joy at finding one alive it amazing. That young lad was lucky, and truly was one of God's miracles. Well done, nicely written and a pleasure to read. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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It must be every parents nightmare to have a child go missing. It's not that often that they are found alive, so the relief and joy at finding one alive it amazing. That young lad was lucky, and truly was one of God's miracles. Well done, nicely written and a pleasure to read. :) Sandra
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks Sandra. Glad you liked the story and you are correct- He was a very lucky young lad. Please take care and have a Happy New Year.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have a good story but you need to work on punctuation. Time and time again, "Jason! Jason!" "Suddenly, "He is here! He is alive!" And your spacing is a bit odd but that could be the problem of this site fitting in your picture. Best of luck with this and have a blessed new year.
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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You have a good story but you need to work on punctuation. Time and time again, "Jason! Jason!" "Suddenly, "He is here! He is alive!" And your spacing is a bit odd but that could be the problem of this site fitting in your picture. Best of luck with this and have a blessed new year.
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Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Carol,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story and also I take on board your comments on the punctuation. Points taken on board. Please take care and have a great New Year.
Regards
Barry
Comment from T B Botts
Well done on your story. I found it captivating. Not knowing which way to go to search for the boy would be frustrating and terrifying at the same time. It could have turned out so much different. So glad there was a happy ending to this story.
Have a safe and happy New Year.
Blessings
Tom
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Well done on your story. I found it captivating. Not knowing which way to go to search for the boy would be frustrating and terrifying at the same time. It could have turned out so much different. So glad there was a happy ending to this story.
Have a safe and happy New Year.
Blessings
Tom
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Tom,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story. It is much appreciated and I am glad you liked it. You have a great and safe New Year.
Regards
Barry
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine story here and it is comforting to know that those who were once lost are now found and all is well again, a fine uplifting story Barry, even more poignant because it is inspired by true events, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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A fine story here and it is comforting to know that those who were once lost are now found and all is well again, a fine uplifting story Barry, even more poignant because it is inspired by true events, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Dolly,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story. Yes the end was a very good one for the boy and his parents. Please take care and have a wonderful New Year.
Regards Dolly
Comment from Judy Lawless
Yes, miracles do happen, everyday, in different ways. This is a beautiful story you've written about a miracle, Barry. There isn't much more frightening than a lost child. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Yes, miracles do happen, everyday, in different ways. This is a beautiful story you've written about a miracle, Barry. There isn't much more frightening than a lost child. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Judy thanks for taking time to review my story. Glad you enjoyed and please take care. Have a wonderful New Year.
Regards
Barry Penfold
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You're welcome. Barry. Happy New Year to you!
Comment from Terry Broxson
A very nice entry for this contest, good luck. You only had eighty words to work with, but you were able to deliver a sensitive story to a favorable conclusion. The fact it is based on reality is a plus. Very good work.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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A very nice entry for this contest, good luck. You only had eighty words to work with, but you were able to deliver a sensitive story to a favorable conclusion. The fact it is based on reality is a plus. Very good work.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Terry,
Thanks for taking time to review my story. Glad you enjoyed it and please keep safe. Have a Happy New Year.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this flash fiction story with us. Yes, miracles do happen. We just need to believe. I have heard that the Australian bush is a very dangerous place. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you for sharing this flash fiction story with us. Yes, miracles do happen. We just need to believe. I have heard that the Australian bush is a very dangerous place. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Barbara,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story .You take care and have a Happy New Year.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment from The Journaler
A great short story about the search and rescue of this little boy. I am so happy he was found. You did a wonderful job of telling about him and how he was found. And explaining the dangers of the area he was lost in. Good job!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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A great short story about the search and rescue of this little boy. I am so happy he was found. You did a wonderful job of telling about him and how he was found. And explaining the dangers of the area he was lost in. Good job!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to review my story. It is very much appreciated and I am glad you enjoyed it . Have a wonderful New Year.
Regards
Barry
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You are welcome. I enjoyed it.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Little Jason is alive! All rolled up in an 80-word flash fictionalized story, pardon me if I don't get teary-eyed about this so-called true story. If it was true, then why do you call it flash fiction? It either happened or it didn't and I am hard-pressed to believe that after four days of searching he is still alive!
In your author's note, you say that miracles do happen. This event is proof! Tell me this, are you trying to win a contest under false pretense? I don't think that is allowed. I don't know you from adam, Barry, so I will give you the benefit of the doubt. Please, check your contest rules to see if I am right.
Have a happy 2022!
Jesse
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Little Jason is alive! All rolled up in an 80-word flash fictionalized story, pardon me if I don't get teary-eyed about this so-called true story. If it was true, then why do you call it flash fiction? It either happened or it didn't and I am hard-pressed to believe that after four days of searching he is still alive!
In your author's note, you say that miracles do happen. This event is proof! Tell me this, are you trying to win a contest under false pretense? I don't think that is allowed. I don't know you from adam, Barry, so I will give you the benefit of the doubt. Please, check your contest rules to see if I am right.
Have a happy 2022!
Jesse
Comment Written 31-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Jesse,
Thanks for taking time to review my story. You were not the only one who was doubtful about him surviving that long. The police apparently launched a further investigation which was looking at the possibility of another adult person being involved and abducting the child. They then placed the child in the bush when they got "cold feet". I do not know what was the outcome of that investigation.
Happy New Year to you.
Barry Penfold.