The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "The Chronicles Of Bethica"Abram must defeat a deadly humanoid race of beings
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Comment from forestport12
Really loved those first few paragraphs that made me absorbed into the moment with the descriptive setting. Then the you are one of the best with how you handle dialogue in a way that moves the plot and deepens the characters. As I once said, I'm not a fan of this genre, but I am a fan of your writing!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Really loved those first few paragraphs that made me absorbed into the moment with the descriptive setting. Then the you are one of the best with how you handle dialogue in a way that moves the plot and deepens the characters. As I once said, I'm not a fan of this genre, but I am a fan of your writing!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for your review and for complimenting my writing. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Ulla
Amahra, I'm amazed, as you know fantasy writing is really not my thing, but you keep me captivated. I have to say that you write it so very well. I'm totally taken with the story. Now, Gangus has a new challenge coming his way. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Amahra, I'm amazed, as you know fantasy writing is really not my thing, but you keep me captivated. I have to say that you write it so very well. I'm totally taken with the story. Now, Gangus has a new challenge coming his way. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Ulla for the compliment; I'm so flattered. And thank you for the stars and keeping up with my story. Gangus will be facing tough challenges. There's not that many chapters to go. I'm grateful you're hanging in.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Usually, I don't much care for fantasy but this caught and held my attention from the first paragraph. I did spot one small mistake. I think you meant to write (chess moves) instead of (chest moves) A very small error and easily fixable. This is certainly an interesting story and the dialogue is absolutely terrific. I intend to read more of this story to see where you go with it. Great work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Usually, I don't much care for fantasy but this caught and held my attention from the first paragraph. I did spot one small mistake. I think you meant to write (chess moves) instead of (chest moves) A very small error and easily fixable. This is certainly an interesting story and the dialogue is absolutely terrific. I intend to read more of this story to see where you go with it. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it and want to read more. And thank you for catching that mistake. Your review means a lot to me.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I was surprised to see another chapter, Amahra. I'd thought story had ended when they safely reached Bethica. Now Gangus has a new challenge. Well written. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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I was surprised to see another chapter, Amahra. I'd thought story had ended when they safely reached Bethica. Now Gangus has a new challenge. Well written. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Judy. I wrote the plot in the summary at the bottom of each chapter. Maybe I should have put a reminder at the top.
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No problem.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent story my friend and I love the imagery and the storyline is captivating! It held my attention as the character's integrate perfectly together;-) Well written and thought out!
Thanxxx for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Excellent story my friend and I love the imagery and the storyline is captivating! It held my attention as the character's integrate perfectly together;-) Well written and thought out!
Thanxxx for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your review.
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;-)
Comment from Jay Squires
Wow! And the story continues. I thought it had ended with the last chapter. Such a perfect ending. Now, your warrior army of readers must continue on. I love reading of your gods. Shades of the Iliad.
"I hate to break up this little randevu, [ Amahra, do you mean rendezvous ?]
Great job, Amahra! Here is my last six!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Wow! And the story continues. I thought it had ended with the last chapter. Such a perfect ending. Now, your warrior army of readers must continue on. I love reading of your gods. Shades of the Iliad.
"I hate to break up this little randevu, [ Amahra, do you mean rendezvous ?]
Great job, Amahra! Here is my last six!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Jay. Yes, it is rendezvous; spellcheck was silent on that one. Hm...the Iliad? My professor's required reading was the Odessey, Homer, and the Aeneid, by Virgil. I never read the Iliad. I think I will, though.
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Well, both the Iliad and the Odessey were by Homer. I didn't read the Aeneid, so I should put that on my bucket list.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I didn't think Gangus was going to go along with the plan for a while, but I guess, what choice did he have. Thanks for sharing another great chapter and I'm anxious to see where your story goes from here.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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I didn't think Gangus was going to go along with the plan for a while, but I guess, what choice did he have. Thanks for sharing another great chapter and I'm anxious to see where your story goes from here.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Ric. Raziel sort of made him an offer he couldn't refuse. lol
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Gangus looked up--... "How? I only have seventy-nine soldiers and hundreds of peaceful settlers, mostly women," Gangus said, his voice cracking."You will raise an army among the inhabitants. The Timbaknis, Engamars, Aenwyns, and Qu'Venars, to name a few." oooh! This reminds me strongly of Lord of the Rings and the second part where the army is raised from a scant few and are triumphant! This is such exciting, well written, brilliant writing. I loved every minute of it that is some talent you have there I will look for more of your work. I have been off the site for a while. Love and best wishes and WELL DONE love Meia xx
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Gangus looked up--... "How? I only have seventy-nine soldiers and hundreds of peaceful settlers, mostly women," Gangus said, his voice cracking."You will raise an army among the inhabitants. The Timbaknis, Engamars, Aenwyns, and Qu'Venars, to name a few." oooh! This reminds me strongly of Lord of the Rings and the second part where the army is raised from a scant few and are triumphant! This is such exciting, well written, brilliant writing. I loved every minute of it that is some talent you have there I will look for more of your work. I have been off the site for a while. Love and best wishes and WELL DONE love Meia xx
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Welcome back. Thank you so much, Meia.
Comment from royowen
I love the squabbling of the gods, I found the Greek manifestation of their gods were more human than humans, in fact I thought they were worse than humans, we tend to make gods in our image rather than the other way around. Gangus has been summoned by Raziel, he is given an instruction to destroy the Nordixc who are considered evil because they are using demonic beings. Beautifully written my friend, another good series, well done Amahra, blessings Roy
Typo : Elevating (,) six new priestess(es)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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I love the squabbling of the gods, I found the Greek manifestation of their gods were more human than humans, in fact I thought they were worse than humans, we tend to make gods in our image rather than the other way around. Gangus has been summoned by Raziel, he is given an instruction to destroy the Nordixc who are considered evil because they are using demonic beings. Beautifully written my friend, another good series, well done Amahra, blessings Roy
Typo : Elevating (,) six new priestess(es)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you Roy for your kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
I really enjoy how you this chapter in your novel Visions of the Gods. The conversations are intriguing to read and the imagery are on point. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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I really enjoy how you this chapter in your novel Visions of the Gods. The conversations are intriguing to read and the imagery are on point. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Zhen.