Sing the Body Electric*
We are as two ships -36 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a sensual poem, at once romantic and erotic. Your poem is paced so that the urgency is almost tangible and the imagery is splendid. I love the background picture, too. It's perfect for the poem. This is a great poem. I think I may as well throw in the towel! (:~) Those symbols are supposed to be a smile; two eyes, nose, big grin. Oh well...
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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This is a sensual poem, at once romantic and erotic. Your poem is paced so that the urgency is almost tangible and the imagery is splendid. I love the background picture, too. It's perfect for the poem. This is a great poem. I think I may as well throw in the towel! (:~) Those symbols are supposed to be a smile; two eyes, nose, big grin. Oh well...
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Hello Mary
Thank you, thank you! Your words are so welcome and warm. Your encouragement made my day :))
Take care,
Senyai
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Hello Mary
Thank you, thank you! Your words are so welcome and warm. Your encouragement made my day :))
Take care,
Senyai
Comment from nomi338
Wow! I need a cigarette in the worse way. The only complaint I have now is, I was not actually a part of the excitingly wild ride down passion's lane. You took me there completely, and I must admit, I liked it, a lot.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Wow! I need a cigarette in the worse way. The only complaint I have now is, I was not actually a part of the excitingly wild ride down passion's lane. You took me there completely, and I must admit, I liked it, a lot.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Oh Nomi, LOL. I am spellbound by your message here. Always enjoy your reviews because your whole heart is in it. Loving your work as well, sir.
Thank you,
Senyai
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Oh Nomi, LOL. I am spellbound by your message here. Always enjoy your reviews because your whole heart is in it. Loving your work as well, sir.
Thank you,
Senyai
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Your fine writing entices and excites me.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Thanks for sharing the
artwork, notes, and poem, Senyai.
-This is very well written with
effective imagery and style.
-I like how you establish the
ships theme and follow through
with images about it.
-You also tell a good story
about this couple.
-The ending section is excellent
with "the white gold sparks" and
"blue violet symmetry of St. Elmo's fire."
-An excellent poem.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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-Thanks for sharing the
artwork, notes, and poem, Senyai.
-This is very well written with
effective imagery and style.
-I like how you establish the
ships theme and follow through
with images about it.
-You also tell a good story
about this couple.
-The ending section is excellent
with "the white gold sparks" and
"blue violet symmetry of St. Elmo's fire."
-An excellent poem.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Pam,
Oh thank you so much for your words and so pleased you enjoyed my post. I was afraid to post this kind of poetry then just threw it out there, debating whether to include a warning with it. I decided against it, not sure that was the right call. The fine lines in whether a poem is erotic or not are puzzling somewhat.
I am grateful for your encouraging thoughts and delighted you enjoyed.
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Pam,
Oh thank you so much for your words and so pleased you enjoyed my post. I was afraid to post this kind of poetry then just threw it out there, debating whether to include a warning with it. I decided against it, not sure that was the right call. The fine lines in whether a poem is erotic or not are puzzling somewhat.
I am grateful for your encouraging thoughts and delighted you enjoyed.
Always,
Senyai
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You are very welcome, Senyai. I don't think you need a warning unless something is really explicit. You wrote with lovely images that do not fit that category.
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for responding to my critical question on the warning. Helped me so much. Want to be mindful of the rules on FS :))
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You are welcome, Senyai, and I don't blame you for being "mindful of the rules." I would be, too.
Comment from dragonpoet
Senyai,
This free verse tells of a busy couple finding time to finally get together to make love and rebuild their relationship.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Senyai,
This free verse tells of a busy couple finding time to finally get together to make love and rebuild their relationship.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Joan,
Thanks so much for your review and thoughts?your perception is spot on and I appreciate your understanding of my poem.
You stay happy and healthy, too :))
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Joan,
Thanks so much for your review and thoughts?your perception is spot on and I appreciate your understanding of my poem.
You stay happy and healthy, too :))
Always,
Senyai
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My pleasure
Glad I got you?re intended meaning
Joan
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Hi Joan,
You pegged it :))
Comment from Carlos' girl
I am.out of six stars my poet- friend. But this poem is worthy of them. The tumbling down of clothes and verses to the ending is superb. Nice use of literary references without sacrificing the writer's voice.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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I am.out of six stars my poet- friend. But this poem is worthy of them. The tumbling down of clothes and verses to the ending is superb. Nice use of literary references without sacrificing the writer's voice.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Carlos? Girl,
Oh my, thanks, my friend for this terrific review and thoughts! Made my day as your perception is spot on. The virtual six is more than enough. So glad you felt it worthy :))
Stay happy and healthy CG :))
Always,
Senyai
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Hi Carlos? Girl,
Oh my, thanks, my friend for this terrific review and thoughts! Made my day as your perception is spot on. The virtual six is more than enough. So glad you felt it worthy :))
Stay happy and healthy CG :))
Always,
Senyai
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You are welcome Senyai
Comment from amahra
The entire poem was awesomely written and, of course, the artwork was stunning. The first four stanzas were sexual, sensual, and hot. The last cone-shape stanza, I thought was a little too sophisticated to go with the other four. But that's just little old me. Great job.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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The entire poem was awesomely written and, of course, the artwork was stunning. The first four stanzas were sexual, sensual, and hot. The last cone-shape stanza, I thought was a little too sophisticated to go with the other four. But that's just little old me. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Amahra,
Thank you for your wonderful review and thoughts?yes, but life progresses in a strange way sometimes? I envisioned the events in my mind this way and just put them down. It was like, the people in the room didn?t know that was going to happen to them either?
But I definitely see what you are saying. Very interesting and thank so much for your valued input. Means so much to me.
Always,
Senyai
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Sing the Body Electric*', is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill this talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post. Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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'Sing the Body Electric*', is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill this talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post. Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Duchess,
Thanks my friend for a lovely review and thoughts. ?and for your crossed fingers Lol
Always,
Senyai
Hi Senyai,
You're very welcome :)))) My crossed fingers have given me a cramp !!
Bless you and a hug,
the Duchess
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Haha?no no not that Lol
I'm not so sure about the Hahas !!
Have a great weekend,
the Duchess xo
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You too :))
For both of us :)))
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
This is a well written piece I enjoyed it from the beginning to the end stay writing stay inspired enjoyed reading this have a beautiful day and stay blessed thank you
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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This is a well written piece I enjoyed it from the beginning to the end stay writing stay inspired enjoyed reading this have a beautiful day and stay blessed thank you
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi GiftedOne,
Your words touched me, so thank you very much. I wish you a beautiful night and Friday to you! :))
Senyai
Comment from Raul1
This is a beautiful love poem. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Well written. Well done. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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This is a beautiful love poem. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Well written. Well done. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Raul,
Thanks very much for your encouraging words on my latest offering.
Have a great weekend coming up:))
Always,
Senyai
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Thank you! Same to you too!
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:))
Comment from jenintorre
A very erotic poem. The imagery is superb. Thanks for the great artwork and the video. I wish you lots of luck in the love story competition Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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A very erotic poem. The imagery is superb. Thanks for the great artwork and the video. I wish you lots of luck in the love story competition Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2021
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Hi Jen,
What an encouraging review and thoughts? thank you very much!
Have a lovely weekend coming up. Take care :))
Always,
Senyai