Comment from Nancy s

Excellent

I honestly laughed while reading this poem, so thanks for that! It's funny, yet it's true. We sin and deny that there are repercussions, that is until they come knocking at our door to haunt us. Lovely poem!

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Thanks, Nancy. Patrick will be back./

Comment from Livia Lynch

Excellent

This poem made me go 'HA' in a mean way, so good job! You definitely arose emotions towards your character, I love the way it flows.
Hope you are having a wonderful day!

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Thanks, Livia. Wait 'til you see Patrick's next one.

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Excellent

I don't know who Patrick Mckee is, but I find the sorry you have written very amusingly! This is a very clever write giving imagery of the happenings at the Pearly Gates. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Thank you for your review. Patrick will be back.

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

I do remember Patrick, he was amusing back then and this one is just as amusing. I loved reading it and thought it was very entertaining. The rhyming in this one is so skilful, Giddy

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Thanks, Giddy. I think you will be entertained by Patrick's nexr episode.

Comment from karenina

Exceptional

Loved the last one and laughed even harder at this one! Oh, poor Patrick! God's got HIS number! His wife sleeping with his brother? I nearly spit out my tea! Six Stars. A shameless bribe which I hope entices you to
write a whole series of Patrick McKee tales!

Just terrific!

Karenina

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2021

Thanks, Karenina. There's at least one more chapter.

reply by karenina on 05-Oct-2021

Oh good! Looking forward to it!

Karenina

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Exceptional

There is not one single stanza that did not have me laughing. Even so, the 3rd, 6th and last stanzas had me laughing the hardest. Poor Patrick McKee; not the saint he thought he was.
This is darn good!
Gale

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021

Thanks, Gale. You'll see him again.

reply by C. Gale Burnett on 06-Oct-2021

I certainly hope so :)

Comment from Susan Newell

Exceptional

This is very cleverly written and serves to remind us that we should mind our Ps and Qs when it comes to managing our lives and affairs. I can accept it as humor, but my faith tells me Patrick would be forgiven if he repented.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021

Thanks, Susan. You'll find out what happens to Patrick in a little while.

reply by Susan Newell on 05-Oct-2021

You are welcome.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That was hilarious! I don't think he'll be getting through those golden gates, somehow! LOL. I thought this was so well thought out, definitely not read anything like this before. I really enjoyed this poem, well done. Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2021

Thanks, Sandra. We're not through with Patrick yet.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very cute and very well written poem you have penned. You used very cute descriptive words and very good imagery with your words. I had to giggle as I read it. Thanks for sharing. Teri

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks, Terri. Get ready for more from Patrick in the future.

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

This is brilliantly written Paul, in Australia we'd call this a Bush ballad, and would do really well at the local country music festival, and because it's brilliantly rhythmic and so clever, it would be easy to put to music, coincidently in my past I was a songwriter, beautifully written my friend, excellent job, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021

Thanks, Roy. Those Australian movies are some of my favorites.

reply by royowen on 04-Oct-2021

Thank you