The Walrus and the Starfish
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Comment from BethShelby
This is such a cute poem. It is a perfect poem for children. I like your are work too. I'll bet it would have hard to find the picture you needed without drawing it yourself. I remember another children's poem calle the Walrus and the Carpenter. I think they had a conversation too.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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This is such a cute poem. It is a perfect poem for children. I like your are work too. I'll bet it would have hard to find the picture you needed without drawing it yourself. I remember another children's poem calle the Walrus and the Carpenter. I think they had a conversation too.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Someone else mentioned the Walrus and the Carpenter. I truly didn't have that in mind. I don't know where this idea came from. It sort of wrote itself. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Hitcher
Well friends come in all shapes and sizes and I'm sure the children you read this to will enjoy your picture as much as the poem. I'm sure the children will be answering all the questions too : ) Nice!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Well friends come in all shapes and sizes and I'm sure the children you read this to will enjoy your picture as much as the poem. I'm sure the children will be answering all the questions too : ) Nice!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much.
Comment from aryr
This was absolutely amazing, damommy. I just loved the art work, then I read on and on and discovered you did it. Fantastic. I loved your words, I could just imagine a conversation between the walrus and the starfish. This was greatly enjoyed and very well done.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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This was absolutely amazing, damommy. I just loved the art work, then I read on and on and discovered you did it. Fantastic. I loved your words, I could just imagine a conversation between the walrus and the starfish. This was greatly enjoyed and very well done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you. You're very kind about the artwork. lol.
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You are so welcome, Yvonne, I thought the art work was great.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I am not laughing at all.
-I thought it was drawn
but I didn't look farther
to see it was yours until later.
-I love it and think you should more!!!
-I like the new profile pic, too!!
-After all of that, I like the poem.
-You could call this a win-win-win
situation:)
-I like Walrus and Starfish strolling
on the sand! It made me smile.
-Walrus certainly have a lot of questions,
and I like how he asks "his pointy pal."
-The Starfish doesn't know, but he
is going to find out. That means a
follow up poem to see what he learns!!!
-I really liked this, and it deserved
my final six of the week, my friend.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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-I am not laughing at all.
-I thought it was drawn
but I didn't look farther
to see it was yours until later.
-I love it and think you should more!!!
-I like the new profile pic, too!!
-After all of that, I like the poem.
-You could call this a win-win-win
situation:)
-I like Walrus and Starfish strolling
on the sand! It made me smile.
-Walrus certainly have a lot of questions,
and I like how he asks "his pointy pal."
-The Starfish doesn't know, but he
is going to find out. That means a
follow up poem to see what he learns!!!
-I really liked this, and it deserved
my final six of the week, my friend.
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Oh, wow! Thank you so much for all the compliments. You always make me feel so good about myself. I love you for it. 8-)
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You are very, very welcome and deserving, Yvonne. I love it when someone puts effort into their creativity. I will look forward to those answers by Starfish, too *🐟🐠🐡
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Hope you like my star fish!!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
AWESOME!!!!! LOVE THIS!!! You wrote a superb poem about these two friends, Yvonne. Your art is perfect--really emphasizes the walrus and the starfish without a bunch of fluff. Your lines flow smoothly with super rhymes, great alliteration, a fantastic imagery. I could see everything you wrote as I read. Your poem is great for kids with a great teaching point about true friendship. Even older 'kids' will enjoy this.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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AWESOME!!!!! LOVE THIS!!! You wrote a superb poem about these two friends, Yvonne. Your art is perfect--really emphasizes the walrus and the starfish without a bunch of fluff. Your lines flow smoothly with super rhymes, great alliteration, a fantastic imagery. I could see everything you wrote as I read. Your poem is great for kids with a great teaching point about true friendship. Even older 'kids' will enjoy this.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I appreciate it very much!
Comment from Ben Colder
Love it. I wish I had a six. You are something else, girl. Pretty too. My grandkids would love this poem. I see nothing wrong. Keep it rolling.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Love it. I wish I had a six. You are something else, girl. Pretty too. My grandkids would love this poem. I see nothing wrong. Keep it rolling.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Awww, thank you. If you read it to your grandkids, let me know if they liked it.
Comment from robyn corum
Yvonne,
hahahahaha! I really liked the image - quite a LOT. You should be drawing more of your accompanying art, in my opinion. I think they are adorable!
The poem is cute, too. Just right for a kid to stretch their imagination with. Or an adult! Like this one -- hahaha Thanks!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Yvonne,
hahahahaha! I really liked the image - quite a LOT. You should be drawing more of your accompanying art, in my opinion. I think they are adorable!
The poem is cute, too. Just right for a kid to stretch their imagination with. Or an adult! Like this one -- hahaha Thanks!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you. Everyone's been so kind at my feeble attempt at the artwork. I'm glad you liked the poem.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
So sweet. I love this poem. Very well written with a nice flow and rhyme. Your picture you drew by the way is awesome. A delightful children's poem. ð???
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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So sweet. I love this poem. Very well written with a nice flow and rhyme. Your picture you drew by the way is awesome. A delightful children's poem. ð???
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the great review, and thank you for saying the drawing is awesome. That's hardly how I'd describe it. lol. But I posted it anyway. 8-)
Yvonne
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Your welcome and it is a good drawing I paint and draw also 🙂
Comment from pookietoo
You did a great job writing this poem l. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Good luck. Enjoy the little things that life brings. Smile and have a great day.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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You did a great job writing this poem l. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Good luck. Enjoy the little things that life brings. Smile and have a great day.
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
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I hope you will read and review my contest entries.
Comment from Pantygynt
I loved this update on the Walrus and the Carpenter. That walrus is every bit as much the homespun philosopher as his ancestor was.
'that all the birdies sing.' => What about, 'that every birdie sings' for a full rhyme with 'wings'? I always think claiming a near rhyme with a plural and a singular is a bit of a cop out.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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I loved this update on the Walrus and the Carpenter. That walrus is every bit as much the homespun philosopher as his ancestor was.
'that all the birdies sing.' => What about, 'that every birdie sings' for a full rhyme with 'wings'? I always think claiming a near rhyme with a plural and a singular is a bit of a cop out.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2021
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Good idea. Thanks, Jim.
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I made the change. Thanks again.