Poems from a Pensive Poet
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Enduring Love"Verses from my heart
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Comment from Begin Again
Love lifts our hearts and shows us a whole knew world if only we learn to treat it with care.
If each one puts the other first
and neither needs to be coerced,
when everything is said and done,
then two will have become as one.
Words to live by!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Love lifts our hearts and shows us a whole knew world if only we learn to treat it with care.
If each one puts the other first
and neither needs to be coerced,
when everything is said and done,
then two will have become as one.
Words to live by!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you, I know you don't feel like reviewing our work, but you force yourself to think of others when your own heart is breaking and love your for it.
Beth
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Such an endearing love poem! It is very well written and rhymed. I see it is for a contest and I wish you the best of luck. For such a long poem, you have fashioned it well, and your last verse is exquisite!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Such an endearing love poem! It is very well written and rhymed. I see it is for a contest and I wish you the best of luck. For such a long poem, you have fashioned it well, and your last verse is exquisite!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you Sherry. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
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You are most welcome!!
Comment from Sankey
I loved this. So precious. Too many have the wrong "Matchmaker" I am glad we had the best. No spags and a lovely layout and picture. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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I loved this. So precious. Too many have the wrong "Matchmaker" I am glad we had the best. No spags and a lovely layout and picture. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reviewing this and considering it worthy of six stars. I'm so pleased you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine write about the gift of love and when we feel intense love we also start to love many other things in life, we feel euphoric, a magical write Beth, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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A fine write about the gift of love and when we feel intense love we also start to love many other things in life, we feel euphoric, a magical write Beth, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much Dolly, I appreciate the review and lovly comments.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
A poem about loving from a wise counselor who knows all about longlasting love. You start by saying that love "defies definition" but then you define how to keep love alive past the stage of mutual attraction. I really liked your evaluation of "Unnourished feelings start to wane."
I just learned about another divorce so this poem is really timely and so important for all couples to read.
One suggestion:
All the lines seem to be in iambic tetrameter - 8 syllables except for
"than love continuing to enchant."
So I suggest maybe:
"than love enduring to enchant." (or whatever reduction of one syllable that you prefer.)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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A poem about loving from a wise counselor who knows all about longlasting love. You start by saying that love "defies definition" but then you define how to keep love alive past the stage of mutual attraction. I really liked your evaluation of "Unnourished feelings start to wane."
I just learned about another divorce so this poem is really timely and so important for all couples to read.
One suggestion:
All the lines seem to be in iambic tetrameter - 8 syllables except for
"than love continuing to enchant."
So I suggest maybe:
"than love enduring to enchant." (or whatever reduction of one syllable that you prefer.)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank Helen, I see you pushed up my poem with another one of you certificated. You are so sweet to do that. Also thank you for noticing the extra syllable. I thought I'd counted them. I guess I said the word the lazy southern and thought it had three syllables instead of four.
Beth
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Ah! Well, you could always keep it and put in your notes how you pronounce it. That's perfectly valid, too.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Beth, I didn't know that you write poems. Well I like your rhyming poem. Now I like to tell what part of you excellent poem---
If each one puts the other first
and neither needs to be coerced,
when everything is said and done,
then two will have become as one.
I know such is true I live with a loving husband that our love makes the two as One
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Beth, I didn't know that you write poems. Well I like your rhyming poem. Now I like to tell what part of you excellent poem---
If each one puts the other first
and neither needs to be coerced,
when everything is said and done,
then two will have become as one.
I know such is true I live with a loving husband that our love makes the two as One
Gert
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you Gert. I'm glad you liked my peom and someone else chose that as their favorite verse.
Beth
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Beth you are most welcome
Gertt
Comment from forestport12
Loved the half-rhymes. And no two lines seemed forced with a rhyme. I like what you are saying here and true love is a selfless and enduring effort. Well said.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Loved the half-rhymes. And no two lines seemed forced with a rhyme. I like what you are saying here and true love is a selfless and enduring effort. Well said.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a charming poem which I really enjoyed. It has excellent rhyme and is quite lyrical when read aloud. It's sort of a cautionary poem which would be good read at weddings. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is a charming poem which I really enjoyed. It has excellent rhyme and is quite lyrical when read aloud. It's sort of a cautionary poem which would be good read at weddings. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you Mary. I appreciate the review and the comments.
Beth
Comment from Eternal Muse
A great love poem with an amazing use of rhyming, meter, flow and cadence. I agree, love is chemistry:
When chemistry makes hearts react
with ample ardor to attract,
then there's a melding of two minds
into a potent tie that binds.
Excellent entry in this contest, good luck with it.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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A great love poem with an amazing use of rhyming, meter, flow and cadence. I agree, love is chemistry:
When chemistry makes hearts react
with ample ardor to attract,
then there's a melding of two minds
into a potent tie that binds.
Excellent entry in this contest, good luck with it.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you for a great review. I enjoyed your comments.
Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've beautifully expressed the true meaning of everlasting love in this rhyming poem, Beth. And you shown how we can be fooled into believing it's everlasting when it becomes evident that the chemistry isn't enough. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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You've beautifully expressed the true meaning of everlasting love in this rhyming poem, Beth. And you shown how we can be fooled into believing it's everlasting when it becomes evident that the chemistry isn't enough. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the review and the nice comments. I appareciate the good wishes.
Beth