Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

I truly enjoyed this poem and story. The rhythm of the lines made it flow smoothly and evenly. The first two stanzas grab the reader's interest and compels him to read until the surprising and humorous end. It reminds me of the poem, "The Cremation of Sam McGee," by Robert W. Service.

This poem is a definite contender in the contest, and I wish you the best.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Thanks for the review. Sam McGee is a great one.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I've no sixes left, and this one is a definate six star poem! I loved it!! I loved the rhyme, the story, and the joke! If you don't win the contest, I'll be most surprised. I really loved it! Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Thanks, Sandra. Stay tuned for more from Patrick McKee.

Comment from Senyai

Excellent

Hi Paul,

Oh, this is rich! I love it. I've always enjoyed the catchiness of ballads. Is Patrick McKee really your cousin? LOL. McFarland, McKee ? Well, I know he didn't come back from the dead, but had to ask :))

Enjoyed this poem with perfect meter and rhyme. Clipped off the tongue and down the page nicely, never missing a beat!

Poor old pickled Patrick, but he had a high old time on last time.

Enjoyed immensely!

Always,
Senyai

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Thanks, Senyai. I'm afraid that Patrick is fictitious. When I do the poem at readings, I tell the audience that he is real and lead them to believe that what they are about to hear is a true story. It's always interesting to see the reaction when they figure out that they have been duped.

reply by Senyai on 22-Sep-2021

Hahhahha! Perfect, Paul.
Loved your pickled Patrick McKee joining his own wake :))

Comment from amahra

Excellent

I really enjoyed this poem. It put a smile on my face. Below are my favorite stanzas though all were fantastic.


The undertaker took Pat in,
Embalmed him with his favorite gin,
And to permit his au revoir,
He laid Pat out in Kelly's Bar.

And then a swaying drunken lout
Holds up a brimming glass of stout
And offers up a heartfelt toast
To their deceased and pickled host.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2021

Thanks for the review. This was a fun one to write, and Patrick will be back.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Paul, This is a very cute and well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words. It made me giggle as I read this. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021

I think something happened to my thank you. I appreciate the review, and Patrick will reappear in the future. Thanks also for the blessings.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I think a lot of people would live to go to their own wake. You've told Pat McKee's tale with great rhythm and rhyme and humour, and the scene in Kelly's Bar was easy to visualise. Enjoyed it, cheers

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021

Thanks for the review, Pearl. I'll tell Kelly to set you up if you are ever in there.

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Excellent

I got a wonderful laugh throughout the entire poem. I really enjoyed 'old Patrick's resurrection' and 'was back in his place, a pleasant smile upon his face.' Excellent rhyme; a great contest entry!

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021

Thanks for the review. Patrick will be back in the near future.

reply by C. Gale Burnett on 21-Sep-2021

hahaha ... I hope so!

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

Patrick's death was perfectly situated. The wake setting was appropo. But then you pull as fast one of we might say ole Patty-boy pulled a fast one. I was picturing several falling from their barstools to their deaths. Kind of macabre, I guess. Being it was themed Irish...of course it would be funny.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021

Thanks, Liz. We Irish do some crazy stuff.

reply by Liz O'Neill on 20-Sep-2021

***Chuckle***

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

The Wake of Patrick McKee
by Paul McFarland

LoL. Funny poem, I love it, and the story too. I would love to see the face of shock when Patrick came back to life. ��

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021

Thanks, Gypsy. Look for more from Patrick in the future.

Comment from Mrs. KT

Exceptional

Hello Paul!
Your poem delights me not only in form but in content. What a delightful romp that would have brought my Scottish grandfather to laugh without reservation!
I adore story poems, and yours is exeptionally well-crafted!
Thank you for sharing!

diane

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021

Thanks for the great review, Diane. Patrick will make another appearance sometime soon.