Phone Calls from Caroline
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Mad Enough To Bite Nails"A cousin calls her younger cousin to rant.
28 total reviews
Comment from amahra
Oh, this was good. I really enjoyed it and didn't want the conversation to end. You made me feel kind of sorry for the old woman. She needs someone who is patient. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
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Oh, this was good. I really enjoyed it and didn't want the conversation to end. You made me feel kind of sorry for the old woman. She needs someone who is patient. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. The contest is over. I won second.
Beth
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I'm just glad it was recognized. If not 1st, 2nd is good too!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This dialogue only piece is clearly written with the characters of the two persons involved in the conversation coming through.
The story is well told with only dialogue to paint the picture.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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This dialogue only piece is clearly written with the characters of the two persons involved in the conversation coming through.
The story is well told with only dialogue to paint the picture.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much Sharon, I really appreciate the review and you nice comment and good wishes.
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
This is a wonderfully written poem ! Ah to get old .Something that is inevitable to happen .But meanness gets you now where .Kill em with kindness is my motto ! Thank you for sharing ! Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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This is a wonderfully written poem ! Ah to get old .Something that is inevitable to happen .But meanness gets you now where .Kill em with kindness is my motto ! Thank you for sharing ! Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much Carmen. I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Comment from muffinmama
Oh, my. I pray every day that I will never become a Caroline.
This is very funny. You've perfectly captured the old grouch that annoys everyone. There's a special place in heaven for caretakers who work with the Carolines of the world.
Well done.
Comments:
- "...something you like to do" - missing period after 'do'
- "Okay, Start over." - small 's' for start
- "What did she say when you told that?" - either insert 'her' after told, or changed 'told' to 'said'
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Oh, my. I pray every day that I will never become a Caroline.
This is very funny. You've perfectly captured the old grouch that annoys everyone. There's a special place in heaven for caretakers who work with the Carolines of the world.
Well done.
Comments:
- "...something you like to do" - missing period after 'do'
- "Okay, Start over." - small 's' for start
- "What did she say when you told that?" - either insert 'her' after told, or changed 'told' to 'said'
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for a great review and for pointing out the spots that need help. :<)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
goodness, what a frustrated lady! She is able to stay home; I'm thinking this lady does not want to be bossed around, being she is in her own surroundings.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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goodness, what a frustrated lady! She is able to stay home; I'm thinking this lady does not want to be bossed around, being she is in her own surroundings.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. No she doesn't want to be bossed. It is sad to get old and no longer in control because you are unable to do everything that must be done.
Comment from Bill Schott
This dialogue-only story, Mad Enough to Bite Nails, seems pretty genuine and perhaps is from real-life experience with a fiesty, older woman upset with her seemingly powerless situation.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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This dialogue-only story, Mad Enough to Bite Nails, seems pretty genuine and perhaps is from real-life experience with a fiesty, older woman upset with her seemingly powerless situation.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the review. You are correct in is a real conversation and not a lot was added other than to change some names.
Comment from J.R. Michael
This dialogue felt incredibly realistic. I have people in my life like Caroline. The conversation flowed well and the details in the manner they were related felt believable. There are a few grammar issues; "women" is used instead of "woman" a few times. And the " 's " is missing from some of the words.
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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This dialogue felt incredibly realistic. I have people in my life like Caroline. The conversation flowed well and the details in the manner they were related felt believable. There are a few grammar issues; "women" is used instead of "woman" a few times. And the " 's " is missing from some of the words.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thanks for the review and comments. This lady is my cousin and the conversation is almost word for word. Names were changed. Thanks for seeing errors no one else saw. I read over it and fixed them.
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
Oh, so good, entertaining and true. Good luck (you wont need it) in the contest. Very realistic. There is humor and sadness reflected in the conversation.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Oh, so good, entertaining and true. Good luck (you wont need it) in the contest. Very realistic. There is humor and sadness reflected in the conversation.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Tnank you so much for the review and for your comments. I really appreciate the six stars. :>)
Comment from Wendy G
Oh dear, the sad thing is that this kind of confusion and distress are very real, and not easily solvable. Also different perceptions of what people can and can't do. Your story is very well told, and very realistic, and I hope it does well in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Oh dear, the sad thing is that this kind of confusion and distress are very real, and not easily solvable. Also different perceptions of what people can and can't do. Your story is very well told, and very realistic, and I hope it does well in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2021
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Thank you Wendy. I'm sorry to say, this is very real. It is almost word to word a conversation I had. It is sad and amusing at the same time.
Comment from Patty Palmer
This was an interesting dialogue between two cousins. This happens in real life. The person needing the help doesn't know what she's talking about a lot of the time. They do become eccentric and think everyone is out to get them. Good job!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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This was an interesting dialogue between two cousins. This happens in real life. The person needing the help doesn't know what she's talking about a lot of the time. They do become eccentric and think everyone is out to get them. Good job!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. They don't realize they are only hurting themself to make people not be around them.
:>)