Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Aw, this is very sweet. I love bears... Looking at them and watching them. In Flou, we have the black bear. Darling pic and poem in 5-7-5! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello Sal :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both...
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

This is charming! Unexpected choice of biddable--learned a new word, thanks! Delightful whimsy in jaunty alliteration. Good to see you--it's been a while!

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello Liz :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Excellent

A nice mating of picture with poem. It makes one wonder which came first.
Form is followed well, nice alliteration. Reads well.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is really quite brilliant, Debra, in addition to being visually pleasing. The word play on strollers does double duty work here, and the artwork and entire presentation is pure genius.

Wishing you great luck with the Committee with this gem. :)

Gloria

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello Gloria :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both...
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Eternal Muse

Exceptional

Oh, I loved this! "Synchronized strollers" is a killer line!

Superb imagery, visuals and presentation. Your poem proves the Japanese saying when referring to their poetry - "brevity that excludes extraneous."

Fabulous - and good luck in the contest.

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello Eternal Muse :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous 6 star rating!! I appreciate both, along with the good luck wishes!
Kindest regards, Debra

reply by Eternal Muse on 29-Jul-2021

You poem was adorable!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5, Strolling, has the right set up and teaches me a new word that I already have a use for elsewhere. You create a cute scene here as well..............

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello Bill :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Ha ha ha - fun pun in the closing! Lots of amusing artistic alliteration as well. I love the work biddable! Wonderful entry. Fun presentation too.

Good luck!

Warmly,
rd

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021

Hello rd :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both...
Best wishes as always, Debra

reply by rama devi on 29-Jul-2021

:-))) Best wishes to you too!