Betrayal
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Comment from Cindy Warren
It looks like everything is coming out as it should. I like that Grant is going to take the dog home. I suppose Rapier is going to get what he deserves, but I thought his flight home was a little too comfortable. I would have given him a little water before takeoff and then taped his mouth shut and tied his hands tight.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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It looks like everything is coming out as it should. I like that Grant is going to take the dog home. I suppose Rapier is going to get what he deserves, but I thought his flight home was a little too comfortable. I would have given him a little water before takeoff and then taped his mouth shut and tied his hands tight.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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LOL! Cindy, you are so wonderful! I love your way of thinking, but you know what the Human Rights brigade are like, they'd probably have Grant locked up and Rapier released for all his suffering, poor lamb! Lol. Thank you so much for this lovely, fun review, my friend. You put a huge grin on my face. Warm hugs, and big smiles! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Sandra, with this chapter. I didn't believe Tania was serious about leaving. The details on Rapier were intriguing. The flight back to London was handled well. I find it interesting that the authorities there are in on it and want him as does those on the island. I love the part about the dogs. I hope everything works out for them, too. I wonder if Monica is sad about the possible relationship that was trying to develop between her and one of Grant's team members.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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You did a great job, Sandra, with this chapter. I didn't believe Tania was serious about leaving. The details on Rapier were intriguing. The flight back to London was handled well. I find it interesting that the authorities there are in on it and want him as does those on the island. I love the part about the dogs. I hope everything works out for them, too. I wonder if Monica is sad about the possible relationship that was trying to develop between her and one of Grant's team members.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this lovely review, Jan. You'll learn a bit more about Monica and Jeff, no, she's not in the least sad!! :) Rapier has been in the Scotland Yard's eyes for a long time, but he has always been to clever for them up until now. Rapier can't hide or run anymore. Thanks, my friend. I love your review. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I find your story so good! Are you not in love with your characters? When I was enrolled in classes they always said we should love our characters, it is much easier to write about them and the story. Until next chapter....
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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I find your story so good! Are you not in love with your characters? When I was enrolled in classes they always said we should love our characters, it is much easier to write about them and the story. Until next chapter....
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Lol, yes, I do have a soft spot for Grant and the other men, and I've taken Tania and Monica's personalities from a friend of mine and fiesty and fun. I'm glad you are enjoying my book. Thanks so much for this lovely review, Rosemary. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
One bad guy put away, a dog rescued, Tania's first sexual experience with Graham, I guess is not to bad of a balance for a whole chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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One bad guy put away, a dog rescued, Tania's first sexual experience with Graham, I guess is not to bad of a balance for a whole chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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I had to laugh, you have called Grant, Graham, and that's my hubby's name! I asked him what he thought he was doing going and having a sexual experience with Tania!!! Lol, That's grounds for divorce! Thank you, Iza, for another lovely review, I did have a giggle. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Theodore McDowell
After the steamy last chapter (lol!!!!!!!!!!), this is a nice segway chapter that sets up new problems and issues that need to be addressed. The characters aren't allowed to bask in their love for long before being thrust into new drama. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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After the steamy last chapter (lol!!!!!!!!!!), this is a nice segway chapter that sets up new problems and issues that need to be addressed. The characters aren't allowed to bask in their love for long before being thrust into new drama. Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Theodore, for another lovely review. I'm glad you liked this part. Sending you a warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from JudyE
The ends are now being tied up quite nicely and I picked up very little to comment on although we still don't know how Rapier found out they were on the island. I'm sure all will be revealed in time. :)
A comfortable silence had settled between them leaving both content to sit and watch the sun ease away the last remnants of night, - I would put a comma after 'them'
With a smile she'd tried to hide, she moved over to Tania's open case and seeing it had been riffled through turned to her foster-sister. - commas needed after 'and' and 'through'
I'm glad to see the men have left us something to eat,' she said, looking at the basket of croissants with a giggle. - I might have changed this slightly to '..... she giggled, looking at the basket of croissants.'
'Very well, thank you,' she said with a sudden shyness enveloping her. - comma after 'said'
With best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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The ends are now being tied up quite nicely and I picked up very little to comment on although we still don't know how Rapier found out they were on the island. I'm sure all will be revealed in time. :)
A comfortable silence had settled between them leaving both content to sit and watch the sun ease away the last remnants of night, - I would put a comma after 'them'
With a smile she'd tried to hide, she moved over to Tania's open case and seeing it had been riffled through turned to her foster-sister. - commas needed after 'and' and 'through'
I'm glad to see the men have left us something to eat,' she said, looking at the basket of croissants with a giggle. - I might have changed this slightly to '..... she giggled, looking at the basket of croissants.'
'Very well, thank you,' she said with a sudden shyness enveloping her. - comma after 'said'
With best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Judy, for another really helpful review. I'm made the corrections, and I'm soooo glad you couldn't find many!! Lol. All the answers will be coming in the next final few chapters. Not long now! Thanks so much for all your wonderful support, my friend, I've really appreciated it. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from blondie560
Excellent as always Sandra. I think, though I'm not sure, that you misspelled demons in paragraph five or is it a difference in UK vs US English. He thumped in his number, again another way of saying he dialed his number!:) I wonder how weird it was to have Rapier on board the jet. I'm sure they have him very secure, but knowing this guy was sent to kill Tania and everyone else would not make me feel very calm. Wouldn't it be nice to have your own private jet? One can dream! Have a fabulous week! Take Care, Sally
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Excellent as always Sandra. I think, though I'm not sure, that you misspelled demons in paragraph five or is it a difference in UK vs US English. He thumped in his number, again another way of saying he dialed his number!:) I wonder how weird it was to have Rapier on board the jet. I'm sure they have him very secure, but knowing this guy was sent to kill Tania and everyone else would not make me feel very calm. Wouldn't it be nice to have your own private jet? One can dream! Have a fabulous week! Take Care, Sally
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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No, it was in error, we spell demon the same way as you, but there is another daemon, but that is a mythical evil spirit, and that's not the one I wanted. :)) I would love my own private jet, but if I had one now, I'd be peed off that I'm too old to enjoy it!!! 🤣😂 Thank you so much for this lovely review, and all the shiny stars, my dear friend. Sending you a humongous warm hug. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from lyenochka
I was wondering where Rapier was on the plane and how much tape and rope was used to tie him in place. It's good that Scotland Yard will get him right at the airport. Too bad he can't answer for his other crimes yet but now we must know that the murdered fisherman might have known about Grant's island.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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I was wondering where Rapier was on the plane and how much tape and rope was used to tie him in place. It's good that Scotland Yard will get him right at the airport. Too bad he can't answer for his other crimes yet but now we must know that the murdered fisherman might have known about Grant's island.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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I'm glad you mentioned Rapier on the plane, I forgot to add how they had restrained him, all done now. Phew! The truth about how Rapier learned about Grant's whereabouts will be revealed soon, Helen. :)) I'll be having some fun with these last few chapters. Thank you so much for another lovely review, and the help you didn't realise you were giving me!! Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
This was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I am so glad that Tania and Grant got things worked out. It was a shame that Grant took Rapier out of the country but he was talking to Scotland Yard. You did a great job with this and I really enjoyed it. Blessings, smiles and hugs! Alie.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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This was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I am so glad that Tania and Grant got things worked out. It was a shame that Grant took Rapier out of the country but he was talking to Scotland Yard. You did a great job with this and I really enjoyed it. Blessings, smiles and hugs! Alie.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Grant needed to take Rapier back to confirm the confession he got out of him. Tape recordings can sometimes be refused in a court of law. But, he'll be in prison whichever country the two police chiefs decide on. I can't see Scotland yard giving him up, but we'll see. Tank you, my dear friend, for another lovely review. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying reading it. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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You so welcome, Sandra. Yayyy, Rapier got his come-up-pence, very well done. Now if only Grant could get Colin and his/their mother. Hugs.
Comment from Jay Squires
Once again, Grant makes the heart swell (not romantically, silly!) what with his generosity to the vet. And his keeping the dog.
Only a few picayune spags ... not enough to rob you of a six:
It was then he realised he carried a lot of toxic baggage that needed to be sorted. [But I thought it was Lorna, too! Does that mean I have a lot of toxic baggage to carry, as well? LOL.]
Tania's tummy flipped again, it took every shred of will power not to throw herself into his arms. [You can keep out the grammar police if you exchange the comma for a semicolon or a period ... or conceivably an "and".]
if the vet hasn't found it's owners.' [I'll be preceded by a bunch here but "its" is not possessive, or a contraction. I can't count the number of times I do that. Grammarly catches it for me.]
We'll travel back on Friday, that gives us three days to prepare. [another comma replacement]
it's eyes had that pleading expression that always got to [LOLOLOL... https://tinyurl.com/3s9xtvh9 (For Grammarly Free--Don't get the free trial. Get the free one. I turn it on whenever I create.]
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Once again, Grant makes the heart swell (not romantically, silly!) what with his generosity to the vet. And his keeping the dog.
Only a few picayune spags ... not enough to rob you of a six:
It was then he realised he carried a lot of toxic baggage that needed to be sorted. [But I thought it was Lorna, too! Does that mean I have a lot of toxic baggage to carry, as well? LOL.]
Tania's tummy flipped again, it took every shred of will power not to throw herself into his arms. [You can keep out the grammar police if you exchange the comma for a semicolon or a period ... or conceivably an "and".]
if the vet hasn't found it's owners.' [I'll be preceded by a bunch here but "its" is not possessive, or a contraction. I can't count the number of times I do that. Grammarly catches it for me.]
We'll travel back on Friday, that gives us three days to prepare. [another comma replacement]
it's eyes had that pleading expression that always got to [LOLOLOL... https://tinyurl.com/3s9xtvh9 (For Grammarly Free--Don't get the free trial. Get the free one. I turn it on whenever I create.]
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review, dear Jay, I'd made most of those corrections earlier, but had to laugh at the last one, what a wally I am!!!
Now this one....
It was then he realised he carried a lot of toxic baggage that needed to be sorted. [But I thought it was Lorna, too! Does that mean I have a lot of toxic baggage to carry, as well? LOL.] You weren't the only one to think that! And I am NOT going to answer that question!!! 🤣😂
Thank you so much for the sixth star, my dear friend, I really appreciate all this and the time you take to check through it. Warmest hugs, Sandra. xxx