Shall We Dance
A life's requites37 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your well thought out words. They flow smoothly with great imagery. You give readers much to think about in their own lives. When one looks inward, many confusing ideas may be seen, but they are all part of life. It is important to live each day to the fullest for no one knows when their last day will happen. One can spend their life wondering--not really living in the moment--then it's over, OR s/he can be a part of the living--the ups and downs of life. I believe your last for lines are 'My friends, don't cry for me, Argentina.' That could be applied to anyone anywhere. Your art is beautiful and haunting.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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You did a good job with your well thought out words. They flow smoothly with great imagery. You give readers much to think about in their own lives. When one looks inward, many confusing ideas may be seen, but they are all part of life. It is important to live each day to the fullest for no one knows when their last day will happen. One can spend their life wondering--not really living in the moment--then it's over, OR s/he can be a part of the living--the ups and downs of life. I believe your last for lines are 'My friends, don't cry for me, Argentina.' That could be applied to anyone anywhere. Your art is beautiful and haunting.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Jan.
And, yes, those are my last words
to this poem.
I always appreciate you following
me, and your reviews.
Doug
Comment from mermaids
I like your opening words "hello my ghosts". It draws the reader into your poem. "Wait not to trip the light fantastic" is another great line. It gives good advice to the reader. Excellent free verse form and use of words.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I like your opening words "hello my ghosts". It draws the reader into your poem. "Wait not to trip the light fantastic" is another great line. It gives good advice to the reader. Excellent free verse form and use of words.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Smiling, thank you.
Doug
Comment from amahra
First, let me compliment you on a beautiful painting you chose for the writing: It's like an explosion of fantastic colors. I like the first lines of the poem...greeting your ghost. Sort of like the song, "Good Morning Heartache. Great poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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First, let me compliment you on a beautiful painting you chose for the writing: It's like an explosion of fantastic colors. I like the first lines of the poem...greeting your ghost. Sort of like the song, "Good Morning Heartache. Great poem.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you.
We both have been on
this site for a while,
which only adds to the
feeling i get when reviewed.
Sincerely,
Doug
Comment from royowen
It amazes me how vulnerable we can be, and yet we made to be that way. In an ideal society we are meant to be open and honest, but we tend to the guarded nature, rather than the open stance it should be, great post Doug, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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It amazes me how vulnerable we can be, and yet we made to be that way. In an ideal society we are meant to be open and honest, but we tend to the guarded nature, rather than the open stance it should be, great post Doug, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Roy.
You have become, and probably
always were, an amazing culmination
of life's experiences. So many, fail to
introspect enough to change. To learn.
To bathe in the humbleness of truth.
Once tried, it is not so hard, eh my brother?
Doug
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Good job Doug
Comment from estory
I really liked the intriguing opening, 'hello, my ghosts'. We have this great sense of being haunted by our idiosynchroses, and not being able to outrun these footsteps from our past running after us. I didn't quite get the ending. estory
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I really liked the intriguing opening, 'hello, my ghosts'. We have this great sense of being haunted by our idiosynchroses, and not being able to outrun these footsteps from our past running after us. I didn't quite get the ending. estory
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you.
The ending?
Simply, the classic...Eva Perone.
Don't cry for me, Argentina.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from dragonpoet
Doug,
This is a well done philosophical/psychological poem that reminds us we all have faults, or are, in a way, broken. It is how important we see the brokekness that causes us to let it slide or try to correct it.
Keep writing and stay healhty in body and mind.
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Doug,
This is a well done philosophical/psychological poem that reminds us we all have faults, or are, in a way, broken. It is how important we see the brokekness that causes us to let it slide or try to correct it.
Keep writing and stay healhty in body and mind.
Joan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Joan.
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No problem, Doug.
Joan
Comment from Gert sherwood
victortouche
from from the lines from your poem--
Sometimes,
one must just see
his insignificance.
Question are you referring to man, that we can make mistakes
or our Creator God I have the belief that God does not make mistakes
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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victortouche
from from the lines from your poem--
Sometimes,
one must just see
his insignificance.
Question are you referring to man, that we can make mistakes
or our Creator God I have the belief that God does not make mistakes
Gert
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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I refer to man only.
I do not presume
to judge the Creator.
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victortouche
I would not judge Our Creator.
Gert
Comment from MissMerri
Most interesting and intriguing poem. I loved especially, these lines:
"We live,
aware...
only in the moments
between time.
Is it any wonder
addiction seeks such,
and relentlessly, at that."
You are very clever, I think, as well as creative in the way you set forth ideas to be examined and contemplated, and weave them so neatly into a poem to make the reader think. I will probably have to think about this for a long time. MM
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Most interesting and intriguing poem. I loved especially, these lines:
"We live,
aware...
only in the moments
between time.
Is it any wonder
addiction seeks such,
and relentlessly, at that."
You are very clever, I think, as well as creative in the way you set forth ideas to be examined and contemplated, and weave them so neatly into a poem to make the reader think. I will probably have to think about this for a long time. MM
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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I think, you, perhaps,
give me too much credence.
I had to look up the spelling of
creedence. LOL
But, I am quite appreciative of
your reviews, including this one.
Thank you,
Doug
Comment from Sanku
A riot of brilliant colours -your painting. but the poem has a grimmer theme .the insignificance of us in the totality of the flow of life.he is expecting a reprieve from his past ,but the ghosts are there.Living for the moment and dancing without any care realising that eventually we will be broken..
I hope i am on the right track..
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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A riot of brilliant colours -your painting. but the poem has a grimmer theme .the insignificance of us in the totality of the flow of life.he is expecting a reprieve from his past ,but the ghosts are there.Living for the moment and dancing without any care realising that eventually we will be broken..
I hope i am on the right track..
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Oh yes, you are on the
right track. I thank you for
reading this, and your open-
minded intelligence.
Doug
Comment from Dilettante junior
Dear Doug,
Your way with words is mesmerizing! These are deep thought patterns we look at through own lens, each angle reflecting a million kaleidoscopic infinities.
Your work brings wonder in the way the words are conveyed, uncensored from your soul- pure, raw, delicately concise without the need for any wordy embellishment.
Each line dances on its own and together form a constellation so bright, it burns an unforgettable picture into the retina.
Etiquette comes to mind as a label is put on fate.
We shall dance indeed in the realms of your brilliant mind.
Chapeau dear poet!
Well done!
Cheers,
DJ
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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Dear Doug,
Your way with words is mesmerizing! These are deep thought patterns we look at through own lens, each angle reflecting a million kaleidoscopic infinities.
Your work brings wonder in the way the words are conveyed, uncensored from your soul- pure, raw, delicately concise without the need for any wordy embellishment.
Each line dances on its own and together form a constellation so bright, it burns an unforgettable picture into the retina.
Etiquette comes to mind as a label is put on fate.
We shall dance indeed in the realms of your brilliant mind.
Chapeau dear poet!
Well done!
Cheers,
DJ
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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My, my. I am most humbled by this review. I thank you most sincerely.
Doug