Comment from Zan Zan

Excellent

Aweeeee-

How sweet yet bittersweet.

"The fireflies danced on the summer air as neighborhood children's voices rose and fell as each in turn offered wisdom only the young can know." love this

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hi Zan Zan,

Thank you for such a heart warming review and kind thoughts on my work...both are truly appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Excellent

This is an interesting piece of writing. Foor a non-English speaking guy from a distant land, you painted fine imagery, flowing narrative I was able to follow. Much enjoyed. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Hi Seshadri,

You are brave to try to read another language story. Much braver than I :-)

But thank you so very much for your lovely review and kind thoughts on my short short story. Both are truly appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai

PS...Where do you live, if you don?t mind me asking?

reply by Seshadri_Sreenivasan on 06-Jun-2021

Thank you Senyai. I am an Indian, living in Mumbai (formerly Bombay). What about you?

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

I peered, you peered, the boss peered, we all peered.

A little joke, I'm not really sure what to make of this story, but from one oddball to another, I wish I could pull this off (I look pretty uniquely like me). Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Hi Jack,

Bwahahah! Whatever your joke?s meaning, it struck me as truly funny.

I appreciate your honesty, OddBall :-)

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from RGstar

Exceptional

You write so beautifully though I seldom see you. It was a pleasure reading this. I almost forgot how well you write.
I could pick out many arts of this, within the beautiful narrative you display here...the imagery, the space, the tempo, the being at one with what you write, all there.

This is just beautiful writing.
A pleasure indeed to read.
Good luck with this.
I hope it gets what it deserves.
Bravo.
Best wishes.
RG

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Oh RGStar,

Thank you so very much! Your thoughts mean so much to me... as you are such a gifted artist. Your gift of six stars uplifted me and my head grew two sizes :-)

I truly appreciate your lovely review and gift.

Be well and all the best to you,
Senyai

Comment from estory

Excellent

I thought this was an interesting little piece, kind of weaving in and out between the present and past, with this innocent image of the two young kids dreaming of romance juxtaposed against the more steeled and experienced older people holding each other at arms' length. It has a bittersweet kind of feel to it. Very romantic in that it contains that imperfection of experience that is so central to the romantic philosophy. estory

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hi Estory,

Thank you for such a lovely review and thoughts. They are both truly appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Aren't memories fun? Good luck with the contest.

I looked up to a tall man staring .down at me. (no clue why the period is before 'down')

" No, Rita Johnson." but I smiled up at him and his confusion. (TRY - "No, Rita Johnson." I smiled up at him and his confusion. Also omit the space before 'NO')

I wondered if he'd even understand that I had to preserve my (you can omit 'that' it's an extra word)

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hi Barbara,

Thank you for such a lovely review and thoughts. They are both truly appreciated!

I also have corrected the boo-boos. Thanks for bringing them to my attention.

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

I can very well understand why she prefered not to reveal her identity. Preserving certain sweet memories is essential to our well being. All the best for the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hi Sanku,

Your thoughts and lovely review are so very appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading your true story. I found your descriptions and imagery really atmospheric. I was surprised at the ending. I must say you do sound a bit oddballish. Good luck in the competition. Jen.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hi Jenintorre,

I hope I did not already say thank you for such a lovely review and well wishes but my computer is acting up. But I will thank you again.

Your thoughts are greatly appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from zanya

Exceptional

So evocatively and wistfully written, it engages the reader right through to the unravelling of the mystery of the narrator's identity - the reader too is left to figure it out! Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hello again Zanya,

Thank you so much for such a lovely review and rating. It is very much appreciated! The gift of six is a treasure...

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

That is an interesting story - many of us do prefer to leave the memories intact, and the past must therefore remain just that. Maybe you aren't such an oddball. There are some grammatical quirks, but overall an enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021

Hi Wendy,

Thank you for a lovely review and comments on my work. I tried to iron out some of the grammar issues, but maybe a few still escape me...

Your input is valuable and important to me. It is appreciated!

Have a great weekend!
Senyai