Comment from alexisleech

Exceptional

What an exciting chapter! Just as well Tania has learnt to use a poker face, because it sounds as though everyone else is going to pieces. You managed to rack up the tension beautifully, whilst creating a believable scene to keep your readers on the edge of their seats. Bravo!

Alexis xxx

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

Thank you so very much for this lovely review, Alexis, and the golden star. I really appreciate your continued support and the fact you enjoy reading it. The move is going well, just a few more boxes to open and then we can relax!! Warm hugs and love, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Goodness, where did you move to? When a person moves, if you make the bed, a person can retire for the evening and tomorrow is another day. Then I can start unpacking again.

I think perhaps you're not going to stop the baby from being born.....the baby is going to surprise her mommy and enter this world unannounced.

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

We have moved near the New Forest in Hampshire England. It's a lovely area and I know we are going to be happy here. My two sons and their families live in this area too, so I'll be seeing them all a lot more. It makes the horror of moving that much more bearable.

Thank you so much for reading this part, and the lovely review, Rosemary. Yes, this little girl is in a big hurry to make her entrance, but I'm sure everyone would have preferred she wait until the hurricane was over and they could get her to the hospital.

You take care, I'll watch out for your posts as and when you do so. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra. xx

Comment from blondie560

Exceptional

Sandra, I loved this chapter. I knew the baby would have to make an appearance just because of the barometric pressure from the hurricane. I laughed when I read Grant's thought that Tania would automatically know what to do because she was a women! I had two kids and I'm not sure I'd know what to do if someone else was having a baby! One of mine was a c-section so there's that to worry about. It's funny what we do learn from tv dramas, but they usually have a happy ending. That's not a given in real life. I remember tv shows long ago where they always said they needed someone to boil some water and bring some towels! When you're ten you can't imagine why they always said that! I'll be looking forward to these 4 delivering the baby girl. I'm glad your move went well and I agree that I'm never moving again! I last moved 13 years ago and it was downsizing, but I still have too much junk! I hope your unpacking goes smoothly. Take care and don't work to hard! Sally

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

It is strange, everyone knows about the boiled wated and towels, that's where the knowledge ends for most, me included. Thank you so much for the sixth star, dear Sally, and this really wonderful review. You have always been so supportive of this story, and I'm thrilled that I've managed to keep you interested.
Thirteen years ago? We thought we'd made our last move eight years ago, but we were cruely disappointed. I'm going to write about it soon. Total nightmare, but with the fairytale ending. Sending you a humongous hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Hello, Sandra,
I hope you're well!
This chapter is very suspenseful with so much going on: the looming hurricane, and an impending birth of a child possible in harm's way.
I learned to structure my next story like yours, thank you for your help! (Partly the characters' descriptions at the end because descriptions are necessary evils to me that can bog down a story. Yours don't )
You've written an excellent chapter with well-defined characters.
Good luck with all your writing!
Cindy

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

Thank you so very much for reading this part, Cindy, and for your amazingly lovely comments. You have paid me the greatest compliment in that you are structuring your next book like mine. Thank you, I feel so honoured. Sending you a bit hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 25-May-2021

You?re so welcome, Sandra!
Blessings and hugs,
Cindy

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

Well done Sandra. Looks like they are going to have to deliver that baby. I would hate to be in that predicament. I suppose I could do it, but I have no desire to do such a thing. LOL There was a lot happening here. Glad to know you have lived through the big move. I wouldn't want to do that again either. Not at my age! ๐???๐?งก Nancy:)

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

You know what babies are like, Nancy. Once they have decided to come out into the world, there is nothing on Earth that will stop them. It's the one time they get to be in charge!! Lol.

Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend, and all the lovely stars. I'm really pleased you enjoyed it. More, that you are still managing with one eye. Take it steady, dear friend. Sending you a big hug. :)) Sandra xxx

Yes, thank goodness we have come out at the end of this move still semi-sane!! Never, ever again!! xxxx

Comment from Sanku

Exceptional

You have expertly led us through some tense and thrilling moments in the previous and this chapters. A childbirth in the midst of a hurricane!. You have managed the tension expertly

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

Aw, thank you so very much, my dear friend, for this lovely review and for giving me the six stars. I really do appreciate it a lot. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. How are you with delivering babies? Lol. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx

Comment from Chrissy710

Exceptional

Hi Sandra Have finally caught up today and love how your story just takes twists and turns and every chapter keeps us glued in to see what happens next
One big push and the baby arrives lol
Look forward to next chapter
Enjoying the romances happening ha ha
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 24-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

Aw, thank you so much, Chris, that is such a lovely review. I'm so pleased you are enjoying this story. Yes, I think you could be right about the 'one big push' this baby is in a hurry! LOL. Thank you also for those lovely six stars, my friend, that is so nice of you. Sending you a warm hug. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You're amazing to get this done with all that you've been doing! Great job with this clueing us into the nervousness of father-to-be as well as soon to be midwife Tania! I'm voting for Impatiens but not Storm. Lol.
I'm glad that Grant figured out how to make tea.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

It's been a nightmare, Helen. I'm far to old for this. So is my hubby, but we were forced into it. I'll write about it one day. But, we do love our new home, and we know we'll be happy to spend our last years here. (Knowing my luck, I'll pop my clogs tomorrow and miss out!! Lol)
Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend, and I prefer your vote on the name. I was thinking of that in Spanish, Impacientes. I have several Spanish friends with names of flowers, these are aptly named because of their speed and abundance of flowers. But of course, it will be up to Latifah and Peter, so we'll have to wait and see!!! Lol. Thanks my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx

reply by lyenochka on 24-May-2021

Now I'm wondering what "pop my clogs" means. I think I can guess but what a funny idiom! You're always teaching me fun expressions!

reply by the author on 24-May-2021

Lol, I'm glad you like them. I use this particular one all the time instead of saying 'when I die' it sound so much nicer! :)) xxx

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

Very tightly written with an emphasis on tension. I have a question before I get into my thoughts as I read along: Although it may sound at first racist, to me it's important in order to get a solid image of the characters in my mind, to know if Latifah is black. The name, in America at least, is popular among the African American population. And I can't think of a single person who is white and named Latifah. If you mentioned it earlier in your narrative, I don't remember.

He glanced at his watch, it was time to get back with the others. [A comma splice here with two complete sentences, separated by a comma. You should replace the comma, in this case, with a colon, semi-colon, or a full stop. I'm sure you're kicking yourself over this, but in case you need a fine online source to brush up on it, you can try this: https://tinyurl.com/3w9uahvp.

I want to check how long the contractions are between each one. [Is this worded correctly? Shouldn't it be "How long it is between contractions? I don't think she measures how long the contraction itself is, does she? It might very well be true, since I've only been through it four times (and the only reason I know it's been four times is it corresponds with the number of kids I have. I don't remember much of each birth.

Both heads turned as Tania came in with obvious relief in their eyes. [This sentence gave me pause, because just for a moment I thought the relief was in Tania's eyes and you boo-booed on "their" for "her". (I said "just for a moment"). Anyway, you might want to consider changing the position of "with obvious relief in their eyes" to come just after "turned". Nothing major, though.

Latifah screamed in agony as another contraction speared her body. [Beautiful choice of verb in "speared" here.]

Thank you for one more evening of reading entertainment.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

Aw, I would never think of you as a racist, Jay. I have three black people in this story, Monica, Jeff and Latifah. In one review I had a while back, I was told I shouldn't pointedly say they are black, they knew by the story. Well I didn't quite agree with that and wrote scenes that mentioned their colour without saying it. LOL, did you understand that??? But, you caught me out with Latifah, I don't think I have mentioned her colour. Peter is white so it's a mixed marriage, but it's no big deal these days, so I can't really use that. I'll ponder that one. :))

I am so pleased you picked up on those stupid errors of mine, you are totally correct and I have sorted those sentences out accordingly. (Using your suggestions!!)

Thank you so very much, my friend, for all those lovely stars and the fabulous review. You have made my day. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxxx

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Oh, how exciting! Delivering a baby is quite an experience, especially the first time. Tania and Grant are about to hold their first newborn. I can imagine how scary it would be, in a storm cellar and no idea what to do. Tania will learn that it's not all that hard, as long as there are no complications. The mother does all the work. I think they're smart enough to figure out what to do.

 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 24-May-2021

You are right about Tania and Grant holding a baby for the first time, I wonder how it will make them feel!! Broody?? Hmm, Lol.
Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend, I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading it. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx