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Comment from Sherry Asbury
I feel I have had my mental exercise for a year! Oh, I envy your intellect and storytelling ability. You so submerge the reader in days long gone - that live again through your words. I could not offer a suggestion on this fine piece and I have edited for years. Thank you for sharing this time out of time experience...
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I feel I have had my mental exercise for a year! Oh, I envy your intellect and storytelling ability. You so submerge the reader in days long gone - that live again through your words. I could not offer a suggestion on this fine piece and I have edited for years. Thank you for sharing this time out of time experience...
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you for this amazingly congratulatory review. Needless to say, I am overwhelmed. Thanks again and for the six stars too.
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You earned every accolade and star, kind sir!!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
They didn't have much of a choice, they had to surrender.. There was no way they could fight off the British Home Guard with two pistols.
Beside the fact his officer needed medical attention or he would lose his arm. Well done Jim. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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They didn't have much of a choice, they had to surrender.. There was no way they could fight off the British Home Guard with two pistols.
Beside the fact his officer needed medical attention or he would lose his arm. Well done Jim. Nancy:)
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you so much for this but the pilot is something of a fanatic, a death or glory merchant as we might say.
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I'm sure the home guard would gladly accommodate him if that is what he choses to do. LOL
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Looking back over history, it is a pity that the Germans concentrated their efforts on war instead of prospering from their clever organisation and work ethic. The remnants of the first world war left them bitter and unhappy. I can understand how the Nazi machine gained such momentum and if you were from the privileged classes you were protected, if not you died in a concentration camp. You captured the bumbling home guard perfectly, yet they must not be underrated as any man carrying a lethal weapon is to be feared. The contrast between German and British at this time is captured perfectly here. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Looking back over history, it is a pity that the Germans concentrated their efforts on war instead of prospering from their clever organisation and work ethic. The remnants of the first world war left them bitter and unhappy. I can understand how the Nazi machine gained such momentum and if you were from the privileged classes you were protected, if not you died in a concentration camp. You captured the bumbling home guard perfectly, yet they must not be underrated as any man carrying a lethal weapon is to be feared. The contrast between German and British at this time is captured perfectly here. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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At least no one has yet said that this resembled an episode from 'Dad's Army'!
Many thanks for this six-star review.
Comment from JudyE
Without actually stating the fact, you've pointed out that not all Germans fighting during WWII should be tarred with the same brush.
I picked up a few points:
It was his commitment to the Nazi ideal that, Brücker had come to believe, carried with it, the seeds of its own destruction. - delete comma after 'it'
The unquestioning loyalty, required of the doctrine appealed to Von Kühlenberg as a being similar in many ways to the order and loyalty required within the service. - delete comma after 'loyalty'
Months ago, the pilot had, placed his rear gunner in that category. - delete comma after 'had'
Until he got to read the papers left for him by his mother, Mutti as he had known her. - this does not stand well alone but should/could be connected to the sentence before or after, depending on your intent.
More recently he had rationalised his personal war as being purely a defensive task, - comma after 'recently'
There was not even a full width gate into the field beyond, only a style. - spelling - stile
The rear gunner drew did likewise, - should be 'drew his likewise'
'There bist nobody here colonel sir!' a voice reported. - why is he saying 'bist'?
It would be an easy shot, but ultimately would achieve nothing beyond the death of one English soldier, except that it would doubtless generate rage amongst his surviving comrades. - I might have replaced 'except that it would' with 'and'
'Gott im Himmel!' exclaimed Von Kühlenberg even as he forced his shattered wrist to his mouth. - comma after 'Kühlenberg'
Handy hock, Fritz! Handy Hock! - I don't understand 'handy hock' but that's fine but should the second 'Hock' be capitalised?
It was almost farcical thought Brücker, climbing to his feet with his hands up. - comma after 'farcical'
A peaked cap appeared in the trap, with an impressive military-looking gentleman below it sporting the red collar-tabs of a full colonel. - comma after 'it'
Eventually this man stood exposed, highly polished riding boots, expensively cut twill breeches and service-dress jacket, seemingly all held together by a gleaming sam browne belt. - comma after 'Eventually'. And should 'sam browne' have capitals?
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Without actually stating the fact, you've pointed out that not all Germans fighting during WWII should be tarred with the same brush.
I picked up a few points:
It was his commitment to the Nazi ideal that, Brücker had come to believe, carried with it, the seeds of its own destruction. - delete comma after 'it'
The unquestioning loyalty, required of the doctrine appealed to Von Kühlenberg as a being similar in many ways to the order and loyalty required within the service. - delete comma after 'loyalty'
Months ago, the pilot had, placed his rear gunner in that category. - delete comma after 'had'
Until he got to read the papers left for him by his mother, Mutti as he had known her. - this does not stand well alone but should/could be connected to the sentence before or after, depending on your intent.
More recently he had rationalised his personal war as being purely a defensive task, - comma after 'recently'
There was not even a full width gate into the field beyond, only a style. - spelling - stile
The rear gunner drew did likewise, - should be 'drew his likewise'
'There bist nobody here colonel sir!' a voice reported. - why is he saying 'bist'?
It would be an easy shot, but ultimately would achieve nothing beyond the death of one English soldier, except that it would doubtless generate rage amongst his surviving comrades. - I might have replaced 'except that it would' with 'and'
'Gott im Himmel!' exclaimed Von Kühlenberg even as he forced his shattered wrist to his mouth. - comma after 'Kühlenberg'
Handy hock, Fritz! Handy Hock! - I don't understand 'handy hock' but that's fine but should the second 'Hock' be capitalised?
It was almost farcical thought Brücker, climbing to his feet with his hands up. - comma after 'farcical'
A peaked cap appeared in the trap, with an impressive military-looking gentleman below it sporting the red collar-tabs of a full colonel. - comma after 'it'
Eventually this man stood exposed, highly polished riding boots, expensively cut twill breeches and service-dress jacket, seemingly all held together by a gleaming sam browne belt. - comma after 'Eventually'. And should 'sam browne' have capitals?
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Another brilliant review. 'Handy, hock' is the yokel's attempt at the German for 'Hands up!' (Hände hoch) Literally, 'Hands high!'. Since it is a new month it should let me give you the usual approval.
Comment from Jay Squires
An exciting chapter, this.
The rear gunner drew did likewise, knowing that he was more likely to use it on the Nazi next to him than on the Tommy below. [Something with the syntax of the first part of this.]
a gleaming sam browne belt. [Wouldn't Sam Browne be capitalized?]
I'm sure we haven't seen the last of the two German soldiers. They should have some impact on the Bache's, I'd think.
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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An exciting chapter, this.
The rear gunner drew did likewise, knowing that he was more likely to use it on the Nazi next to him than on the Tommy below. [Something with the syntax of the first part of this.]
a gleaming sam browne belt. [Wouldn't Sam Browne be capitalized?]
I'm sure we haven't seen the last of the two German soldiers. They should have some impact on the Bache's, I'd think.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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I think my fingers ran away with me I was so excited lol. Thanks for pointing that out. It has been addressed. I also need to capitalise Sam's belt it seems. Many thanks for picking up these points as well as enjoying the thrill of it all.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This chapter reveals the personalities of the two German soldiers that have ended up in the Water Mill. One needing a doctor, yet foolishly firing at the British. What did he think this would accomplish? He is fortunate (although I'm sure he doesn't think so) to be captured for now he will get the treatment needed.
Ralf
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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This chapter reveals the personalities of the two German soldiers that have ended up in the Water Mill. One needing a doctor, yet foolishly firing at the British. What did he think this would accomplish? He is fortunate (although I'm sure he doesn't think so) to be captured for now he will get the treatment needed.
Ralf
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Many thanks for this supportive review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
Happy May to you!
The pilot may have more education and more rank than the rearguard, but it seems the rearguard has the most common sense between the two. No doubt the rearguard envisions food and water after being captured by the Brits. I look forward to next Sunday's post.
Jan
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
Happy May to you!
The pilot may have more education and more rank than the rearguard, but it seems the rearguard has the most common sense between the two. No doubt the rearguard envisions food and water after being captured by the Brits. I look forward to next Sunday's post.
Jan
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Intelligence and common sense do not always go hand in hand as you point out. Many thanks for reviewing.
Comment from royowen
An excellent episode, and you've highlighted perfectly there were different Germans fighting in the Second World War, the sold out Master race version, and those that could actually think beyond their pride, but you're right, the seeds of The Second World War were sown in the Versailles treaty. A shocker of unreason and cruelty. Well done, great episode, blessings Roy
Typo : The rear gunner drew (his gun and) did likewise.
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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An excellent episode, and you've highlighted perfectly there were different Germans fighting in the Second World War, the sold out Master race version, and those that could actually think beyond their pride, but you're right, the seeds of The Second World War were sown in the Versailles treaty. A shocker of unreason and cruelty. Well done, great episode, blessings Roy
Typo : The rear gunner drew (his gun and) did likewise.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you for the great review and the spag alert. I am glad you enjoyed the conflict between the two Germans
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Well done
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another very interesting chapter. You've created some tension, and I particularly like this piece of imagery: "Eventually this man stood exposed, highly polished riding boots, expensively cut twill breeches and service-dress jacket, seemingly all held together by a gleaming sam browne belt."
One spag:
"The rear gunner (drew) did likewise."
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Another very interesting chapter. You've created some tension, and I particularly like this piece of imagery: "Eventually this man stood exposed, highly polished riding boots, expensively cut twill breeches and service-dress jacket, seemingly all held together by a gleaming sam browne belt."
One spag:
"The rear gunner (drew) did likewise."
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you for this review and for pointing out the spag, which has been addressed.
Comment from tfawcus
You do a good job of humanising these two Germans. It seems that Brücker may have an interesting role to play as the story progresses. His actions here suggest that he might even become one of those prisoners who is entrusted with farmwork to support the war effort. If so, I wonder where that might lead.
There was not even a full(-)width gate into the field beyond, only a style (stile)
The rear gunner [drew] did likewise
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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You do a good job of humanising these two Germans. It seems that Brücker may have an interesting role to play as the story progresses. His actions here suggest that he might even become one of those prisoners who is entrusted with farmwork to support the war effort. If so, I wonder where that might lead.
There was not even a full(-)width gate into the field beyond, only a style (stile)
The rear gunner [drew] did likewise
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review and spag alerts. These have been addressed. You are guessing ahead well. Brunner will play a major role later in the story.many thanks for the six shining stars and the spar alert, which has been addressed.