Betrayal
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, well, well, better check the heat, something might be on fire. I can almost hear the sizzle. LOL. My cheeks are flushed and pink as embarrass easily. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Well, well, well, better check the heat, something might be on fire. I can almost hear the sizzle. LOL. My cheeks are flushed and pink as embarrass easily. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hmm, do you really think I believe that, Ric? LOL! You are so funny. Thank you so much, my dear friend, for the lovely sixth star, and more for your fun comments, I loved them. Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Another excellent chapter for the book with the attraction between Tania and Grant developing nicely.
I think the clash of forces is about to begin.
One thing to think about: If you want this book to be a strictly a romance,
I don't think an editor would accept the rapier scene:
"He'd used his sword on them, marking their faces and cutting off two fingers on each of their hands."
If you want a Clancy-type drama like Jack Ryan, then you can mix the violence-romance genres.
Note: I'm not an expert on romance novels. LOL
Either way, an excellent chapter.
I think dogs do have an extra sense. Perhaps that will become clear later. :)
Best wishes, my friend. Hope all is well.
Robert
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hello Sandra,
Another excellent chapter for the book with the attraction between Tania and Grant developing nicely.
I think the clash of forces is about to begin.
One thing to think about: If you want this book to be a strictly a romance,
I don't think an editor would accept the rapier scene:
"He'd used his sword on them, marking their faces and cutting off two fingers on each of their hands."
If you want a Clancy-type drama like Jack Ryan, then you can mix the violence-romance genres.
Note: I'm not an expert on romance novels. LOL
Either way, an excellent chapter.
I think dogs do have an extra sense. Perhaps that will become clear later. :)
Best wishes, my friend. Hope all is well.
Robert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Robert, for this lovely review, and the sixth golden star. I've read a lot of Tom Clancy's books, and Jack Ryan is one of my favourite characters of his. Perhaps I'd better go down his road. Lol. No, this isn't going to be strictly romance now. Thank you again, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from robyn corum
Sandra,
Finally. YAY! I like this part in a novel very much - that first kiss. And when the gentleman draws back is really cool, too. This story is progressing nicely. You're doing great!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Sandra,
Finally. YAY! I like this part in a novel very much - that first kiss. And when the gentleman draws back is really cool, too. This story is progressing nicely. You're doing great!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you, my dear Robyn! I'm so pleased you liked the smoochy part. Lol! More of that coming soon. Warm hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from JudyE
Tania and Grant are getting more and more involved. I guess there will be more problems for them though in the near future.
Just a couple of comments:
Do you remember me telling you about a scumbag the police have named, the Rapier?' - delete comma after 'named'
Peter remembered him, alright. - delete comma
Grant moved his hand, dropping it down and slid it around her waist. - I would have said 'dropping it down and sliding it around her waist.'
'Oh, Tania, my dear, sweet, Tania,' his voice was little more than a whisper. - delete comma after 'sweet'
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Tania and Grant are getting more and more involved. I guess there will be more problems for them though in the near future.
Just a couple of comments:
Do you remember me telling you about a scumbag the police have named, the Rapier?' - delete comma after 'named'
Peter remembered him, alright. - delete comma
Grant moved his hand, dropping it down and slid it around her waist. - I would have said 'dropping it down and sliding it around her waist.'
'Oh, Tania, my dear, sweet, Tania,' his voice was little more than a whisper. - delete comma after 'sweet'
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you, dear Judy! I must be improving!! Lol. I've made the changes, and I'm very grateful to you for pointing them out.
Yes, they have some work coming up, none of it nice, but unavoidable. At least they both know something nice is happening between them. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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I had to search hard this time, didn't I? lol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha a little bit of romantic involvement between the future boss and the brilliant architect. I know she is in good hands, but only when Colin is out of the picture.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Ha, ha a little bit of romantic involvement between the future boss and the brilliant architect. I know she is in good hands, but only when Colin is out of the picture.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Iza. Yes, we must have some romance, in this book you get a double whammy! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
The not-so-calm before the next storm--Hurricane Colin and Co.--the plot is complex--kudos for keeping track--can't wait to see it all come together--have you written the entire book? How many chapters left. Tasteful love scene is testament to your talent! Thanks for keeping it clean.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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The not-so-calm before the next storm--Hurricane Colin and Co.--the plot is complex--kudos for keeping track--can't wait to see it all come together--have you written the entire book? How many chapters left. Tasteful love scene is testament to your talent! Thanks for keeping it clean.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Have you been looking in my head?? Lol. Thank you, Liz, for your really nice review.
I get told that sex sells, but I just can't write it ... or read it. If that means my books won't sell, so be it. My hubby said I should only write what I'm comfortable with and enjoy it. We watch and read a lot of dramas, and some fabulous films, none of which have sex in and they are all highly rated. So why would people think that to sell a book you have to have it littered with sex and no plot?
I'm two chapters ahead of myself, and already have the last chapter written in its draft form.
Thanks, my friend, I just so pleased you like the way I write. Sending you a humongous hug! :)) Sandra xxx
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I think sex scenes should be an exception to show-don't-tell (i.e. tell if you must, preferably don't do either.)
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I totally agree with you. You will not be invited into Grant's bedroom, I can assure you!! Lol. xx
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sandra:
Our bodies will betray us every time - right? It is good that Grant is such a gentleman. He is absolutely right to want Tania to be sure of why she wants to be with Grant and that it is not just the result of her gratitude to him for rescuing her - and his sexy bod! Looking forward to your next chapter.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Sandra:
Our bodies will betray us every time - right? It is good that Grant is such a gentleman. He is absolutely right to want Tania to be sure of why she wants to be with Grant and that it is not just the result of her gratitude to him for rescuing her - and his sexy bod! Looking forward to your next chapter.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Yes, they do. Lol, poor Tania. You really made my day with this review about the way Grant acted. To me, he isn't that type that would rush a girl into the bedroom. Thank you so very much for this great review, my friend. It meant a lot. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from tfawcus
You've certainly ignited a fire between Tania and Grant in this chapter and done so with finesse. There's plenty looming in the background to shatter this tranquil tryst in the Bahamas! A particularly good chapter, I thought.
I'm not sure if you have introduced Rapier in a previous chapter. I found the first mention of him in this one a bit of a surprise. I wondered when and how Grant had found out about his involvement. You go on to fill in his background a little later on and all becomes clear. He certainly sounds like a nasty piece of work!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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You've certainly ignited a fire between Tania and Grant in this chapter and done so with finesse. There's plenty looming in the background to shatter this tranquil tryst in the Bahamas! A particularly good chapter, I thought.
I'm not sure if you have introduced Rapier in a previous chapter. I found the first mention of him in this one a bit of a surprise. I wondered when and how Grant had found out about his involvement. You go on to fill in his background a little later on and all becomes clear. He certainly sounds like a nasty piece of work!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Aw, thank you so much, Tony! I'm glad you liked the way I wrote the romantic bit. And you're right, there is a lot coming up, it's brewing like a big urn of tea.
And a big thank you for the lovely sixth star, my friend, and wonderful review. :))
Shadow spotted Rapier going into Colin's mother's house while he was keeping watch on it. He then phoned in and told Jeff. He was first mentioned at the end of part 27....
Monica took the phone and studied the man?s face. ?Who is he? What?s he got to do with me??
?Nothing ... but, possibly everything. If he?s been hired by Grant?s mother, then he might be after you to get to Tania. He?s the worst kind of bastard I know and will do anything for the right price. I think it?s time for me to have a private conversation with your boss. He either gives you time off or lets me stay inside. It scares the hell out of me knowing he could get to you while I?m sitting here guzzling coffee. I?m not having you put at risk by that psycho family anymore ? and that?s final!?
Just in case you'd forgotten, lol. Thanks again, Tony. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jay Squires
Ahhhhhh, they finally hooked up. I liked the love scene, the slow build-up, the explosive onrush, and finally, Grant's pulling back ... an act that will solidify their relationship more than if he had followed the depth of his and (though he didn't fully know it), the depths of her desire. They can wait. Not sure I can, but they can wait. Some really good writing, Sandra. So deserving of my six ... and I'm running out of them.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Ahhhhhh, they finally hooked up. I liked the love scene, the slow build-up, the explosive onrush, and finally, Grant's pulling back ... an act that will solidify their relationship more than if he had followed the depth of his and (though he didn't fully know it), the depths of her desire. They can wait. Not sure I can, but they can wait. Some really good writing, Sandra. So deserving of my six ... and I'm running out of them.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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LOL, it was a long time coming, wasn't it? But, that's what it's like in real life. I hate reading books that have them jumping into bed five minutes after they've met. I like it slow and easy. It's much more romantic.
Thank you so much for that golden nugget, dear Jay, and the wonderful review. You put a great big smile on my face. Sending you a humongous hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, Tania has finally yielded to her feelings! And Grant has done a good job putting her first before his emotions. Glad that he's calling for Reg and is on high alert with what may be plotted by Colin and his mother.
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"it was just someone walking across my grave," (is this a British expression? What does it mean?)
Out of curiosity are there crickets in the Bahamas? I grew up in Hawaii and while there are some native species in the volcanic areas, I've never encountered any. They say that after so many generations, the Australian crickets that landed there lost their ability to make noise.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Oh, Tania has finally yielded to her feelings! And Grant has done a good job putting her first before his emotions. Glad that he's calling for Reg and is on high alert with what may be plotted by Colin and his mother.
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"it was just someone walking across my grave," (is this a British expression? What does it mean?)
Out of curiosity are there crickets in the Bahamas? I grew up in Hawaii and while there are some native species in the volcanic areas, I've never encountered any. They say that after so many generations, the Australian crickets that landed there lost their ability to make noise.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Helen, for reading this part, I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
I just assumed there would be crickets in the Bahamas, as we had loads in Spain, another hot country. So, I've just been Googling it. They are rare, and so are the cicadas, but they are there. I thought to take it out but couldn't think of another reason for Grant's hand to linger on Tania's shoulder. This has taught me to check everything before writing it. Lol.
That expression is a UK one, believed to have been started in Ireland in the 17th century. If you feel on a sudden a shivering sensation in your back, there is somebody walking over your future grave. You will often hear it said in the UK, and the Dutch also hold that belief. Why? I have no idea. Lol. Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
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Thank you for the fascinating expression! I wonder what other languages have that.
Sorry to send you on a wild goose chase on the cricket topic. I grew up in urban Oahu and never encountered crickets but I looked up some and there are native ones in the more rural Big Island near the lava. So there are tropical ones.
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I don't know. Perhaps you can start it up in America?? xxx
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I will have to try that phrase on my Dutch neighbor. 💖
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Let me know what she said. :))