Heart Crafted Poems -2021
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine uplifting faithful write where the process is renewing and and the bright light brings hope and solace to those suffering from grief, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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A fine uplifting faithful write where the process is renewing and and the bright light brings hope and solace to those suffering from grief, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Wendy G
This is a lovely poem of faith, beginning at the Cross. It is based on a beautiful photo, and does a great job in contrasting the old way of life with the new. Well done. Good wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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This is a lovely poem of faith, beginning at the Cross. It is based on a beautiful photo, and does a great job in contrasting the old way of life with the new. Well done. Good wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Wendy, thank you! Enjoy the Week..😀
Comment from Boogienights
This is a very well written and humbling expression of faith, I applaud your open and honest take on religion. I have questions but do think that God is there... just not always when I want Him. I enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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This is a very well written and humbling expression of faith, I applaud your open and honest take on religion. I have questions but do think that God is there... just not always when I want Him. I enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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You are most certainly welcomed..
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
My faith stands firm
Then and Now
by JLR
Great entry for the My Faith contest. You expressed what your faith means to you very well.
Your poem flows okay. The structure makes sense. It somewhat draws on emotions. it presents good images..
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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My faith stands firm
Then and Now
by JLR
Great entry for the My Faith contest. You expressed what your faith means to you very well.
Your poem flows okay. The structure makes sense. It somewhat draws on emotions. it presents good images..
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Gypsy Blue Rose, I do thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from lyenochka
I really like how you take us from "grumbling" and complaint to the transformation after encountering the Light of Jesus. My favorite lines was:
"'Twas then the sun crested, shining so bright on my life."
My only suggestion would be to change the first line to give it more impact. "I think, this is much grumbling." It wasn't clear to me what "this" was. And "I think" (something I use too much) weakens your first line.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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I really like how you take us from "grumbling" and complaint to the transformation after encountering the Light of Jesus. My favorite lines was:
"'Twas then the sun crested, shining so bright on my life."
My only suggestion would be to change the first line to give it more impact. "I think, this is much grumbling." It wasn't clear to me what "this" was. And "I think" (something I use too much) weakens your first line.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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A bit of tweak --I hope pleases you so....
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I like it! Great edit!
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🙏 thank yoh
Comment from Susan Larson
What a lovely testament to your faith and how is has expanded and grown in different ways over the years. How poignant your final line 'Not one thing can cause me that prior strife ...I'm a travelin' a different road!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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What a lovely testament to your faith and how is has expanded and grown in different ways over the years. How poignant your final line 'Not one thing can cause me that prior strife ...I'm a travelin' a different road!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much Susan 🙏
Comment from RGstar
I love this take JLR, it brought in a different dimension. I was not sure who you spoke f in the beginning until into the second stanza, and that was good, it had a modern but old take to it. Fresh, it vitalized the very subject and gave new openings for new old eyes. Bravo.
Not enough sixes to go around, but you continue to write well with every offer you give...and at this time of year, you gave a most beautiful and original one. It deserves to do well.
My best wishes.
Well done.
RG
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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I love this take JLR, it brought in a different dimension. I was not sure who you spoke f in the beginning until into the second stanza, and that was good, it had a modern but old take to it. Fresh, it vitalized the very subject and gave new openings for new old eyes. Bravo.
Not enough sixes to go around, but you continue to write well with every offer you give...and at this time of year, you gave a most beautiful and original one. It deserves to do well.
My best wishes.
Well done.
RG
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Thank you kind sir!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The testament that you depict in this poem is profound. How good it is when we know how we feel and why we feel that way. Life becomes a rainbow of colors that are easy to see. Your message comes through.
Ralf
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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The testament that you depict in this poem is profound. How good it is when we know how we feel and why we feel that way. Life becomes a rainbow of colors that are easy to see. Your message comes through.
Ralf
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much Ralf! To celebrate Palm Sunday with verse seems quite appropriate.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem of faith in God speaks the difference in states - what was then and what is now, you pray with your firm faith to see the same glow of light; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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This poem of faith in God speaks the difference in states - what was then and what is now, you pray with your firm faith to see the same glow of light; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, friend!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like this poem. People must have faith...
Life has ups and downs... We all need faith to help us go through tough times. We need the light to guide us.
As you say in your poem:
"My Savior still shines his light."
"The light, so bright..."
"The light of a new morn..."
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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I like this poem. People must have faith...
Life has ups and downs... We all need faith to help us go through tough times. We need the light to guide us.
As you say in your poem:
"My Savior still shines his light."
"The light, so bright..."
"The light of a new morn..."
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
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Chan. thank you for your review and comments. Faith is the docking point to tie ones life boat onto.