More Grist to the Mill
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Blueprint for the Future - 1933"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
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Comment from JudyE
Well, I had to search hard this time! lol
It seems that Julia really does have the interest to eventually take over the farm and hopefully, Jack can be found some 'gainful employment'.
A few suggestions:
This bain't no toy all. - Is this natural dialogue or is there a word missing 'bain't no toy at all'??
She had known her daughter was farm orientated - should 'farm orientated' by hyphenated?
she had not had any idea that Julia's interest and understanding was as comprehensive or as deep as this. - should be 'were as comprehensive..'
At twelve years old Julia had as much, if not a better, idea of what was going on in their business than they did. - comma after 'old' and should it be '.. in their business as they did'?
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Well, I had to search hard this time! lol
It seems that Julia really does have the interest to eventually take over the farm and hopefully, Jack can be found some 'gainful employment'.
A few suggestions:
This bain't no toy all. - Is this natural dialogue or is there a word missing 'bain't no toy at all'??
She had known her daughter was farm orientated - should 'farm orientated' by hyphenated?
she had not had any idea that Julia's interest and understanding was as comprehensive or as deep as this. - should be 'were as comprehensive..'
At twelve years old Julia had as much, if not a better, idea of what was going on in their business than they did. - comma after 'old' and should it be '.. in their business as they did'?
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for this review. Are you slipping or am I getting better? Lol.
'This bain't no toy all' is colloquial and translates as 'This isn't a toy at all.'
The other points you raise are all perfectly valid, as usual, and have been addressed. Thank you very much.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jay Squires
Time to start planning for the new generation. Julia appears to have more than a passing interest in, not just farming, but the future of their own farm. Jack, on the other hand, is rooted in the here and now, as long as he has things to occupy his mechanical mind. His distant future plans are chimerical and immature, compared to Julia's. Jack wants to race things and draw. Tommy and Heather are going to have their hands full guiding and directing their passions.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Time to start planning for the new generation. Julia appears to have more than a passing interest in, not just farming, but the future of their own farm. Jack, on the other hand, is rooted in the here and now, as long as he has things to occupy his mechanical mind. His distant future plans are chimerical and immature, compared to Julia's. Jack wants to race things and draw. Tommy and Heather are going to have their hands full guiding and directing their passions.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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One of the things that impressed me about the plays of George Bernard Shaw is the way many of his plays feature powerful an manipulative women (Major Barbara, Mrs Warren and, of course, St Joan). I have to admit that I do attempt to emulate him in this with what I hope are strong, female characters, Derwen in my first novel, A Reluyctant Star, and Hettie, Felicity, and Heather in this trilogy. I intend Julia to be the next such.
Comment from tfawcus
You've done a great job of introducing these two new characters to your history of the farm and foreshadowing their future part in it. One of the things I like about your writing is how you handle the way one generation succeeds another, bringing fresh ideas and perspectives.
Given the title of your book, I imagine we haven't heard the last of the mill yet.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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You've done a great job of introducing these two new characters to your history of the farm and foreshadowing their future part in it. One of the things I like about your writing is how you handle the way one generation succeeds another, bringing fresh ideas and perspectives.
Given the title of your book, I imagine we haven't heard the last of the mill yet.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the six lovely stars and for the reviews into the bargain. I am pleased with the way you like what I am doing with the generational issue.
I can assure you the mill will continue to be the focal point for the story even though it appears to be dying on its feet.
Comment from Cass Carlton
This chapter is told in flashback form.It concerns Heather and Tommy's loving concern for their children's future.Julia has shown where her heart and head lie with the model of Jericho Farm her mother found in the nursery when Julia was twelve.But, her twin brother Jack is more interested in machines.Motor cars, and aeroplanes mainly, although he loves to tinker and repair any broken tool or contraption on
the farm.
There is one correction I would suggest. In the list that Julia
compiled, the word Barley appears to be out of place.
Also,do you really like your picture upside down? Now if this answers some deep psychological need, forget I've mentioned it please.Otherwise, can you do something about it??
This episode ends with a very relevant question from Tommy
.He and Heather had just finished looking at Julia's model of the farm and Tommy asked "Where be Jack's stuff then?"
Where indeed? Keep tuned,keep listening.Same spot on the dial
CheersCass
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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This chapter is told in flashback form.It concerns Heather and Tommy's loving concern for their children's future.Julia has shown where her heart and head lie with the model of Jericho Farm her mother found in the nursery when Julia was twelve.But, her twin brother Jack is more interested in machines.Motor cars, and aeroplanes mainly, although he loves to tinker and repair any broken tool or contraption on
the farm.
There is one correction I would suggest. In the list that Julia
compiled, the word Barley appears to be out of place.
Also,do you really like your picture upside down? Now if this answers some deep psychological need, forget I've mentioned it please.Otherwise, can you do something about it??
This episode ends with a very relevant question from Tommy
.He and Heather had just finished looking at Julia's model of the farm and Tommy asked "Where be Jack's stuff then?"
Where indeed? Keep tuned,keep listening.Same spot on the dial
CheersCass
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for this six star review, which is much appreciated. I am sorry you are seeing me upside down, though there are those who say it is my best angle. It is strange though because it appears right way up to me and no one else has complained. So perhaps it is something at your end.
As for the misalignment problem I get this as well when I view the post on my tablet but not when I view it on my lap top, so I am loth to do anything about it as if I correct it for the tablet it will be incorrect on the laptop.
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I really did think I was the only one who had computer glitches.It is a sop to my morale
to discover those more proficient than I can be beset with problems too Cheers Cass
Comment from Pearl Edwards
In this chapter you've given us an insight to Julia's degree of interest in the family farm through this conversation between Tommy and Heather. I do like the ordinariness of this couple, true to life for me. Enjoyed this chapter Jim
cheers
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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In this chapter you've given us an insight to Julia's degree of interest in the family farm through this conversation between Tommy and Heather. I do like the ordinariness of this couple, true to life for me. Enjoyed this chapter Jim
cheers
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for telling me that I have produced characters with whom you find yourself in empathy. That makes me very happy indeed.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
Now you have raised all kinds of questions about Jack - is he sleeping at the mill, sleeping in one of the upstairs rooms, or is he simply not living there at night? I have a few other thoughts but I am going to keep them to myself for a bit until you reveal a bit more.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
Now you have raised all kinds of questions about Jack - is he sleeping at the mill, sleeping in one of the upstairs rooms, or is he simply not living there at night? I have a few other thoughts but I am going to keep them to myself for a bit until you reveal a bit more.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I think you will find your questions answered on Wednesday, when I post the next chapter. Meanwhile, thanks so much for this review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear jim, it goes without saying that you're writing is excellent, and you have inserted some interesting information about Julia, discovered by Heather.
The thing that will keep. us reading, is the question posed by Tommy himself. "Where be Jack's stuff then?"
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Dear jim, it goes without saying that you're writing is excellent, and you have inserted some interesting information about Julia, discovered by Heather.
The thing that will keep. us reading, is the question posed by Tommy himself. "Where be Jack's stuff then?"
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I think you will find that question answered on Wednesday, when I post the next chapter. Meanwhile, thanks so much for this review. After that i shall have to find another way of keeping you on board, won't I? Lol.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I'm really enjoying this new section of the book, seeing more details of the development of this next generation and their interests. So far they are doing their parents proud.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I'm really enjoying this new section of the book, seeing more details of the development of this next generation and their interests. So far they are doing their parents proud.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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You probably don't realise how much that and these six stars mean to me. This is one of the 'quieter' sections of the story, and I was worried that without sex, suicide or war, this might prove boring - but not at least for you. Thank you.
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Your welcome. Life isn?t always just about sex, death and war. Why should our stories be? I enjoy getting to know the characters too.
Comment from BethShelby
It is interesting how children grow into to the things that interests them. For that reason, I hate it when parents try to force their children to settle for there ideas of what is right for them. It seems Julia had decided where her passion lies and Jack knows what he wants as well but will in be to stay or to go. I believe you earlier suggested there would be some sort of accident involving Jack.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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It is interesting how children grow into to the things that interests them. For that reason, I hate it when parents try to force their children to settle for there ideas of what is right for them. It seems Julia had decided where her passion lies and Jack knows what he wants as well but will in be to stay or to go. I believe you earlier suggested there would be some sort of accident involving Jack.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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The 'accident' to which you refer that would dash jack's hopes for the future, was the breakage of the shaft in the mill and Tommy's reluctance to repair it. Jack can hardly become the wealthy miller without a mill.
I think I mistimed that remark somewhat and will need to revisit it before publishing.
Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
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It didn't sound as though he could have become a wealthy miller anyway when the big mills were taking the need for the better grain.
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No indeed. It was a lad's pipe dream I'm afraid.
Comment from Sugarray77
How very interesting, Jim. I liked the set up of how the house was organized when there was staff, but your insightful description of the business workings of the farm and especially the point of perceptions that Julia had of the workings of a farm is very intelligently written. Great descriptive writing!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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How very interesting, Jim. I liked the set up of how the house was organized when there was staff, but your insightful description of the business workings of the farm and especially the point of perceptions that Julia had of the workings of a farm is very intelligently written. Great descriptive writing!!
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for yet another complimentary review.