Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "His Destiny"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
That is a wonderful form. Repetition stresses the meaning of the message being rendered in a very artful way. Meantime, I'm book casing this for future reference. Nicely done.
Ralf
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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That is a wonderful form. Repetition stresses the meaning of the message being rendered in a very artful way. Meantime, I'm book casing this for future reference. Nicely done.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you Ralf.
Comment from Susan Larson
Wow! I had a hard enough time reading through all the rules for an Atrina poem. I certainly admire anyone who has the patience and skill to write one. I do love your picturesque words and phrases.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Wow! I had a hard enough time reading through all the rules for an Atrina poem. I certainly admire anyone who has the patience and skill to write one. I do love your picturesque words and phrases.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Susan, thank you
Comment from Jesse James Doty
If only I had a sixth star to give! This is quite exceptional in every way. You've mastered the Atrina so well! I hesitated to read, not knowing what an Atrina poetry format was like but, boy! I'm glad I went on to read this! I shall attempt to fan you so that I can be alerted to your future posts!
Jesse
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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If only I had a sixth star to give! This is quite exceptional in every way. You've mastered the Atrina so well! I hesitated to read, not knowing what an Atrina poetry format was like but, boy! I'm glad I went on to read this! I shall attempt to fan you so that I can be alerted to your future posts!
Jesse
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Jesse thank you, at first I was uncertain about trying this but as I did get into it the challenge arose. Thanks I will address this. Somewhere in the instructions I missed this requirement.
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No! It is no fault of yours! I just ran out of six stars, so that I wasn't able to reward you with one. I also became your fan, so that I will know now when you post. No Worries, my friend!
Jesse
Comment from lyenochka
I enjoyed the theme of your atrina as it shows the enchantment of being in nature. The atrina form requires that each line should be 8 syllables and sometimes your lines were 7 and 9 as well.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed the theme of your atrina as it shows the enchantment of being in nature. The atrina form requires that each line should be 8 syllables and sometimes your lines were 7 and 9 as well.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thanks
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, I will not hold it against you that you were assigned this particular poetic dance. Actually you did a very fine job of constructing it. But that's what it is, just an exercise for a poet to sharpen his skills on.
But for the reader, this particular form, is like listening to a pianist practicing his scales.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Dear JLR, I will not hold it against you that you were assigned this particular poetic dance. Actually you did a very fine job of constructing it. But that's what it is, just an exercise for a poet to sharpen his skills on.
But for the reader, this particular form, is like listening to a pianist practicing his scales.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Roger that.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I've never heard of this form of poetry before and it is good to see you trying it. Not sure you did justice to the flow here and you also used feminine endings too, but your poem is inventive, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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I've never heard of this form of poetry before and it is good to see you trying it. Not sure you did justice to the flow here and you also used feminine endings too, but your poem is inventive, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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I agree not too much to my liking, but I try them all.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned using the Atrina form for the Potlatch Poetry club. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned using the Atrina form for the Potlatch Poetry club. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Teri thanks
Comment from Boogienights
This is wonderful, I love the cadance of your poem. Was he on his way to heaven...it seems like a beautiful, peaceful way to go, a lovely path to follow. Thank you for sharing this beautifully written poem.:)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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This is wonderful, I love the cadance of your poem. Was he on his way to heaven...it seems like a beautiful, peaceful way to go, a lovely path to follow. Thank you for sharing this beautifully written poem.:)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written and the sentences flow with clarity. I like your poem. Excellent work! No mistakes. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written and the sentences flow with clarity. I like your poem. Excellent work! No mistakes. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you
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You're welcome!
Comment from QC Poet
A very interesting poem and I read the the note on your preference, it did make the form a better wrinkle, I not being familiar with this concept very much thoroughly enjoyed reading through you poem. Thanks for Sharing your poem. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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A very interesting poem and I read the the note on your preference, it did make the form a better wrinkle, I not being familiar with this concept very much thoroughly enjoyed reading through you poem. Thanks for Sharing your poem. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you