Blinded By Darkness
Depression causes inability to see light that is all around16 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the title, theme, and the line above the title. Blinded by depression is a great analogy to use in this Cinquain poem.
I merely ask the author for clarification of one word. Since the Cinquain poem has a strict syllable count of 2-4-6-8-2, I was wondering...is the word, "toward" pronounced as one syllable or two? When I say it, it has two syllables, where it is written, it appears to account for one syllable. Just a clarification will suffice, thank you. This is a wonderfully written, timely piece. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes for the contest.
Jesse
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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I love the title, theme, and the line above the title. Blinded by depression is a great analogy to use in this Cinquain poem.
I merely ask the author for clarification of one word. Since the Cinquain poem has a strict syllable count of 2-4-6-8-2, I was wondering...is the word, "toward" pronounced as one syllable or two? When I say it, it has two syllables, where it is written, it appears to account for one syllable. Just a clarification will suffice, thank you. This is a wonderfully written, timely piece. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes for the contest.
Jesse
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for your complementary review. I looked up the word "toward "and you are correct. It is two syllables. Where I live, we only say it with one syllable, so I guess I will need to change that. Thank you for pointing it out.
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It was a pleasure, and I am glad I could help.
Jesse
Comment from LisaMay
This is a very good description of depression - the poem's title is a wonderful way to put it. Redemption can be found when others reach out.
However, you'll probably have to ditch 'lost' from the second-last line as it is supposed to have only 8 syllables and with 'lost' it comes to 9.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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This is a very good description of depression - the poem's title is a wonderful way to put it. Redemption can be found when others reach out.
However, you'll probably have to ditch 'lost' from the second-last line as it is supposed to have only 8 syllables and with 'lost' it comes to 9.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your rating and review. I'm going to have to fix that syllable error. I appreciate that you pointed it out to me. Hugs.
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I had another look and the way you've fixed it works really well.
Comment from DonandVicki
The muted artwork is a perfect match for your poem;" Redemptive hands reaching Toward lost, blinded souls who can't find the sun." I get the image of hands searching in the dense fog.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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The muted artwork is a perfect match for your poem;" Redemptive hands reaching Toward lost, blinded souls who can't find the sun." I get the image of hands searching in the dense fog.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your reading and comments. They are humbly appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from donette1914
depression is so hard to deal with when ones cant see the light. we need to help ones and show them we do care with maybe just some kind words
so creative and simply brilliant!
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with the photo in your well penned poem
I hope for the best in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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depression is so hard to deal with when ones cant see the light. we need to help ones and show them we do care with maybe just some kind words
so creative and simply brilliant!
you brought this to life with well chosen words with the story line
very believable with the photo in your well penned poem
I hope for the best in the contest
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much. Your kind comments and review our humbly appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written cinquain. Nice overall presentation font and background colour. Love your descriptive wording. Moonbeams illuminate. Beautiful photo to compliment your words. Very well done.
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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This is a beautifully written cinquain. Nice overall presentation font and background colour. Love your descriptive wording. Moonbeams illuminate. Beautiful photo to compliment your words. Very well done.
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate all the support and encouragement. Hugs.
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Your welcome
Comment from kahpot
This is a very well written and very deep read, as depression does block out hope and any light, a wonderful entry for the cinquain prompt, best wishes *****kahpot
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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This is a very well written and very deep read, as depression does block out hope and any light, a wonderful entry for the cinquain prompt, best wishes *****kahpot
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much. Your kind and thoughtful comments are much appreciated. Hugs.