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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant backstory revelation continues. I'm pleased to be catching up.
'All I could see was this silhouette against the light see. (Is the second "see" a typo or intended as in colloquial speecj, in which case, perhaps precede "see" by a comma and close with a question mark)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Brilliant backstory revelation continues. I'm pleased to be catching up.
'All I could see was this silhouette against the light see. (Is the second "see" a typo or intended as in colloquial speecj, in which case, perhaps precede "see" by a comma and close with a question mark)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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This was intended to be colloquial but looking again it still seems uncomfortable even with the punctuation altered. Best left out I think, so it has gone. Many thanks for picking up on this point.
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is a fine chapter and a pleasure to read. After the drawing rooms of the rectory and Allen's hotel, it's lovely to hear the story continue in the vernacular of Heather and Tom. And I can almost taste that fruit cake. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This is a fine chapter and a pleasure to read. After the drawing rooms of the rectory and Allen's hotel, it's lovely to hear the story continue in the vernacular of Heather and Tom. And I can almost taste that fruit cake. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this supportive review. I hope you enjoyed the fruit cake.
Comment from lyenochka
Finally, we get to hear that conversation between Heather and Hettie so many years afterward. What I appreciated most is the unusual character you give these ladies. Heather could recognize the "abject despair" in Hettie, because of her compassionate care of her mother. Hettie cares more about her father and his business more than her own broken heart.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Finally, we get to hear that conversation between Heather and Hettie so many years afterward. What I appreciated most is the unusual character you give these ladies. Heather could recognize the "abject despair" in Hettie, because of her compassionate care of her mother. Hettie cares more about her father and his business more than her own broken heart.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this six-star review. Tony Fawcus in one of his reviews of Maid of the Mill commented on the powerful female characters also and I am so pleased you have mentioned it. I am following the example of George Bernard Shaw in that that respect.
Comment from Sugarray77
I applaud you on creating the timeline. I have not read anywhere that you have used a true story... I thought it is all fictional..., but the timeline makes me think you are telling a true story. Are you? Great job in this detailed offering along with good writing, Jim. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I applaud you on creating the timeline. I have not read anywhere that you have used a true story... I thought it is all fictional..., but the timeline makes me think you are telling a true story. Are you? Great job in this detailed offering along with good writing, Jim. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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The story is entirely fictional but set in an historical setting so real characters and events may encroach from time to time. I created the time line to keep me on course originally. This is a simplified version. The original has a column for every important character that shows their age at every point mentioned in the narrative.
Thank you for your interest questions.
Comment from Jay Squires
What I like about your novel is the way it develops over time. My dad used to be a photographer and developed his own prints. When a negative was put in the developer solution it was fascinating to see how the background comes out slowly and becomes recognizable. That's the feeling I get with your novel, over time.
But the reader knows differently.
Beautifully done, compadre!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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What I like about your novel is the way it develops over time. My dad used to be a photographer and developed his own prints. When a negative was put in the developer solution it was fascinating to see how the background comes out slowly and becomes recognizable. That's the feeling I get with your novel, over time.
Beautifully done, compadre!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This review made me want to shout hooray. It is exactly the reaction I am hoping for. All that and six stars too. Thank you very much indeed.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
So, the plot thickens...Every time I think I'm getting the big picture here, you take me on just enough of a turn to make me rethink some things. I think I'm going to just start enjoying the ride and see where it goes.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
So, the plot thickens...Every time I think I'm getting the big picture here, you take me on just enough of a turn to make me rethink some things. I think I'm going to just start enjoying the ride and see where it goes.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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One of my favourite playwrights is Anton Chekov, I hope i am following in his footsteps. Many thanks for this review.
Comment from damommy
I've gleaned a lot from today's conversation. I think Hettie was murdered, but I can't figure out who did it or what reason they could have. Love the conversation these three had. It really portrayed the characters even stronger, for me at least.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I've gleaned a lot from today's conversation. I think Hettie was murdered, but I can't figure out who did it or what reason they could have. Love the conversation these three had. It really portrayed the characters even stronger, for me at least.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this six-star review. Motive will be considered next time.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Peter is getting the scoop on Hettie and why she might have committed suicide. I don't think she did. She loved life too much. I think it was an accident. Of course we know Tom W. had nothing to do with her pregnancy. Well done, Jim. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Peter is getting the scoop on Hettie and why she might have committed suicide. I don't think she did. She loved life too much. I think it was an accident. Of course we know Tom W. had nothing to do with her pregnancy. Well done, Jim. Nancy:)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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The possibility of accident is due to be considered in a chapter up shortly. tommy doesn't think it likely but maybe there are other views. Many thanks for this kind review.
Comment from nomi338
Finally. Now perhaps Peter Allen can put the pieces together to see that Hettie's concern was much more for the welfare of her father's business and the harm her own actions had put him in. Loving her father that much was clearly enough for her to feel all sorts of remorse over her reckless choices.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Finally. Now perhaps Peter Allen can put the pieces together to see that Hettie's concern was much more for the welfare of her father's business and the harm her own actions had put him in. Loving her father that much was clearly enough for her to feel all sorts of remorse over her reckless choices.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this six-star review. you are one of the few who are prepared to think outside the box on this one.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Jim, with the posting of this chapter, the Question is now open, Who killed Hettie Mansfield and Why?
Are there other characters not yet introduced who would have done it? Because it seems the cast of characters you have introduced so far, would not have had a motive.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Dear Jim, with the posting of this chapter, the Question is now open, Who killed Hettie Mansfield and Why?
Are there other characters not yet introduced who would have done it? Because it seems the cast of characters you have introduced so far, would not have had a motive.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you for this review. Strange you should mention motive. Allen steers the conversation in that direction in the next chapter. Can you wait till Wednesday?