Dignity
to get your life back23 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Yes, God promises that none of His children will see want, but we can't trust our eyes or ears, nut we can trust in God, this is beautifully written dear girl, blessings great story, good luck, blessings Roy,
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Yes, God promises that none of His children will see want, but we can't trust our eyes or ears, nut we can trust in God, this is beautifully written dear girl, blessings great story, good luck, blessings Roy,
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review:) have a blessed day
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Welcome Iza,
Comment from Susan Newell
You have a really poignant story, but I think you unknowingly do it harm. Sorry, but I'm an old-timey writer that's not a fan of lots of exclamation marks. Were it me, I'd skip the italics and exclamation and just say, "it thunders." I also find "bullshit" out of character and the "in" after sank is redundant, besides being grammatically incorrect. I think you could fix both and still save your word count. I also would remove the exclamation point from after "forget." I think you'll find that those little adjustments would add dignity to work?
Great little 100-word story. I absolutely loved "invisible stones."
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You have a really poignant story, but I think you unknowingly do it harm. Sorry, but I'm an old-timey writer that's not a fan of lots of exclamation marks. Were it me, I'd skip the italics and exclamation and just say, "it thunders." I also find "bullshit" out of character and the "in" after sank is redundant, besides being grammatically incorrect. I think you could fix both and still save your word count. I also would remove the exclamation point from after "forget." I think you'll find that those little adjustments would add dignity to work?
Great little 100-word story. I absolutely loved "invisible stones."
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Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
Comment from estory
Its a little short, but it does illustrate how much a job can be in instilling dignity in our lives. It is nice to have some way to contribute, we all feel that need to be needed. estory
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Its a little short, but it does illustrate how much a job can be in instilling dignity in our lives. It is nice to have some way to contribute, we all feel that need to be needed. estory
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your insightful review.
Comment from Raul1
This story meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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This story meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for this stellar review.
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You're welcome, anytime!
Comment from LJbutterfly
A one-hundred word flash fiction story is difficult, but you pulled it of perfectly. You've given the reader a complete picture of Veronica's "thunderous" situation. She's jobless and homeless, praying for restoration of dignity with a job. I love her strength and willingness to help others by "preaching." Well done, and well thought out.
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A one-hundred word flash fiction story is difficult, but you pulled it of perfectly. You've given the reader a complete picture of Veronica's "thunderous" situation. She's jobless and homeless, praying for restoration of dignity with a job. I love her strength and willingness to help others by "preaching." Well done, and well thought out.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
Comment from Mastery
Hi Iza. Although I do really like this entry in the contest, I don't think it
follows the contest rules persay. It is supposed to be fiction ? This doesn't feel like a fictional story unfortunately. Good luck.. bob
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Hi Iza. Although I do really like this entry in the contest, I don't think it
follows the contest rules persay. It is supposed to be fiction ? This doesn't feel like a fictional story unfortunately. Good luck.. bob
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Hi Bob, thank you for the heads up:) lately I am having trouble to write real fictions:)
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Just lie and you've got fiction. :) Bob
Comment from Carlos' girl
veronica is a lovely person; her faith is outstanding. Great idea that you conceived of, well developed concept with a wonderful message. Veronica is outstanding
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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veronica is a lovely person; her faith is outstanding. Great idea that you conceived of, well developed concept with a wonderful message. Veronica is outstanding
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for yourr stellar review:)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This excellent rlash fiction is very interesting. It all hangs on one word, PREACH that I would not have expected to find there. I would have expected you to use PRAY and the story would have a very different connotation. Not a criticism, just a bit of philosophy to add to the mix.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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This excellent rlash fiction is very interesting. It all hangs on one word, PREACH that I would not have expected to find there. I would have expected you to use PRAY and the story would have a very different connotation. Not a criticism, just a bit of philosophy to add to the mix.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your stellar review:) I choose preach deliberatly, because I wanted for her to spread hope
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the story. It is short and within the contest guideline. It reflects what is happening under the current pandemic.
it is a moving story but sad and real. I like the ending.
May God bless America and we get get back our dignity.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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I like the story. It is short and within the contest guideline. It reflects what is happening under the current pandemic.
it is a moving story but sad and real. I like the ending.
May God bless America and we get get back our dignity.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your stellar review:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Iza. I believe this speaks to many in the same situation of losing their job. Hopefully, they will turn to prayer for comfort and realize He is always there to help.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Iza. I believe this speaks to many in the same situation of losing their job. Hopefully, they will turn to prayer for comfort and realize He is always there to help.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for your stellar review:)