The Wall
brick by brick37 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Cam has a bad case of writer's block, but at least his imagination is working perfectly fine. Good visualizations and showing us his emotional state without telling us. This also shows that one can craft a story about not crafting a story.
Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Cam has a bad case of writer's block, but at least his imagination is working perfectly fine. Good visualizations and showing us his emotional state without telling us. This also shows that one can craft a story about not crafting a story.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for the great response. G
Comment from papa55mike
I've used walls in several of my stories. They are fun and thought-provoking to write about. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I've used walls in several of my stories. They are fun and thought-provoking to write about. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks, Mike. G
Comment from estory
I really liked this little example of writer's block. I think you had a great opening when the man confronts this wall, stares at it, immoveable and unscalable, yet with a determination to overcome it. I think its a great image of confronting the obstacles of life. The end also had a great twist to it, with the scene of the wall fading into this image of the man staring at the little blinking cursor on the computer screen as he confronts the blank page, equally as daunting as the wall. But there is always 'tomorrow,' another crack at it. estory
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I really liked this little example of writer's block. I think you had a great opening when the man confronts this wall, stares at it, immoveable and unscalable, yet with a determination to overcome it. I think its a great image of confronting the obstacles of life. The end also had a great twist to it, with the scene of the wall fading into this image of the man staring at the little blinking cursor on the computer screen as he confronts the blank page, equally as daunting as the wall. But there is always 'tomorrow,' another crack at it. estory
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for popping by and checking this one out. I had fun extending this metaphor out. lol Much appreciated as always. G
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written piece and I liked the way the tension built up until the end. I enjoyed reading it and, although I am not quite sure what the wall was supposed to represent, it did keep me on the edge of my seat. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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This is a very well written piece and I liked the way the tension built up until the end. I enjoyed reading it and, although I am not quite sure what the wall was supposed to represent, it did keep me on the edge of my seat. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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The wall can represent any obstacle we need to overcome. Much appreciated. G
Comment from Doug Jacquier
Beautifully crafted and excellent imagery. I particularly liked ' ... so high you can't get over it, so low, you can't get under it. Different subject matter but the problem remained the same.' Also 'Blood pebbled on the fingertips of his right hand.'
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Beautifully crafted and excellent imagery. I particularly liked ' ... so high you can't get over it, so low, you can't get under it. Different subject matter but the problem remained the same.' Also 'Blood pebbled on the fingertips of his right hand.'
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Much appreciated. GMG
Comment from Jenny Kartchner
I like this very clever story of Cameron. He seems to be up against 2 walls. I like your use of personification. The ending is hopeful as he says, 'Maybe tomorrow.'
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I like this very clever story of Cameron. He seems to be up against 2 walls. I like your use of personification. The ending is hopeful as he says, 'Maybe tomorrow.'
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Can't beat a good bit of personification. helps with thee old metaphors. Many thanks GMG
Comment from robyn corum
Gareth,
What a fabulous metaphor for our writing habits and frustrations. The piece was well-written and never gave away the message until the very end. Definitely a six-worthy post. Thanks for the smile and good luck with that wall.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Gareth,
What a fabulous metaphor for our writing habits and frustrations. The piece was well-written and never gave away the message until the very end. Definitely a six-worthy post. Thanks for the smile and good luck with that wall.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks, Robyn. I tend not to suffer from writer's block, it's more apathy on my part. A lot of the time I can't be bothered. Too much real life these days. All the best, G.
Comment from Ben Colder
yes, seems to be plenty brick walls . Some just stand and look back not saying a word. Look out for the one that does.
Good write I find no fault.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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yes, seems to be plenty brick walls . Some just stand and look back not saying a word. Look out for the one that does.
Good write I find no fault.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Man can I relate!! I think we all can. I was draw in by the deception you expertly created. I envisioned a prisoner behind jail walls, or even an immigrant outside Texas, but the surprise reality of your ending took my breath away.
Well done, my friend!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Man can I relate!! I think we all can. I was draw in by the deception you expertly created. I envisioned a prisoner behind jail walls, or even an immigrant outside Texas, but the surprise reality of your ending took my breath away.
Well done, my friend!
Rhonda
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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It's always good if you can squeeze in an extended metaphor that's unobtrusive until the end. lol many thanks Rhonda. G
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Very good point!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written prose about the wall that sometimes stand in our way physically or mentally it prevents a break through that we need to reach our goals.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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A very well-written prose about the wall that sometimes stand in our way physically or mentally it prevents a break through that we need to reach our goals.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Much appreciated, as always, Sandra. G