Comment from alexisleech

Exceptional

Bravo, Sandra. And congratulations with the placement of a bin - it somehow made it all a little less humiliating for Tania not to have to pee on the floor! So, what is Colin's plan with the laptop? Has he got a camera trained on her to see what password she put in? I remember my Richard doing that when I restricted his access to the internet and I had to put in a password when he was outside the door - I was so impressed with his ingenuity, I forgot to be cross and gave up!

Alexis xxx

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021

Some people are so sneaky, aren't they, Alexis. LOL, I wonder who he takes after?? :))
Thank you so much for another lovely review and the six star award, that was so nice of you. Warmest hugs my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

I am so sorry to hear you have shingles. I know it is very painful and I hope it is only a light dose. My husband and I have been vaccinated against it so hopefully I won't need to deal with it. Sending you best wishes for a very speedy recovery.

I have a few suggestions, as usual: :))

'Anything?' he asked as he dropped down beside Carl. - comma after 'asked'

He noted, ruefully, it was the same spot Monica had unsuccessfully hidden behind, and her blanket they were laying on. - you can't really hide behind a 'spot'. Should it be tree/bush/?? or maybe '...it was the same spot where Monica had unsuccessfully hidden, and her blanket they were laying on.'

Looking up at the small skylight window she could tell the sun was setting by the redness of the sky. - commas after 'small' and 'window'

She shouted again, louder this time, still no response. - period after 'time'

He's got the plans, it could be he's changed his mind about the others. - period after 'plans'

No. he still couldn't, - capital for 'he'

Take a chance with the laptop, that should take my mind off other pressing things. - replace comma with a period

A groan slipped from her mouth. - I might have said 'A groan escaped her'

What I need is a weapon to defend myself. - I think this should be 'What I need is a weapon to defend myself with' which isn't correct grammar but I don't think Tania would say '... with which to defend myself.'

She was in luck, she heard a crack and pushed harder - period after 'luck'

'Yes!' She punched the air, so excited at her little bit of success. - I think this needs to be 'so excited was she at her little bit of success'

Great work and I hope you're not too ill to continue with it.
Judy

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021

Thank you so much again, Judy, for another really helpful review. I'm so glad you are still enjoying my story.

I'm finding it hard to sit and read for more than a few minutes, but I'm going to try and mix a bit of standing, sitting, and then have a move around for a while. It might take my mind off the pain. I'll be having the injection once this bout is finished. This is the second time I've had it. I thought you could only have it once! Thanks for your kind words, my friend, and thanks again for the lovely review. Warm hugs, Sandra xx

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Rats! I am terrorized just reading this. You really grabbed me into the scene--let me out, Sandra/Colin--I'll give up the password!

the blanket they were laying=>lying on

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021

Thank you, Liz! If I was in a room with rats, I'd think I'd give him every plan I had and more. I've made the correction, my friend. Thank you for this great review. Warm hugs. Sandra. xxx

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Sandra,

Oh, no! Shingles is some bad, bad news. I'm sending hugs for you.

This was a really well-composed chapter and I enjoyed. No nits and I look forward to more.

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021

Just a gentle hug, please, Robyn! Lol. Graham isn't allowed anywhere near me at the moment! I'm going to try and do some reviewing today, to take my mind off it, if possible.

Thank you for your lovely comments, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx

Comment from Chrissy710

Exceptional

Hi Sandra.
A six for putting up with shingles a painful condition I hope ypu are taking acylovir to help get rid of them Also Lyrica for nerve pain. Now back to your story also worth a six for captivation and cant wait to find out what happens next Rest up and stress less is the answer. Get well soon Tania can wait LOL Cheers Chrisxx

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021

Aww, thank you, Chris. That feels so much better!! :)) I've asked Graham to go to the pharmacist and see if he can get what you've suggested. I'll try anything to get rid of this.

Thank you so much for the six stars, and wonderful review, my friend. You've put a smile on my face. Warmest hugs and another big thank you for being so kind. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Hello Sandra.

I don't think we know yet if Grant and his "troops" are surrounding the right building but they are using the stealth tactics that they've clearly used many times before.
Quintanilla decided she was dealing with rodents and fleas is an event that would just make matters worse if that were possible.
The one reflection that occurred to me was this is become high stakes crime by Colin. This has reached a point where they're not only is no return but I don't believe there's any redemption for him.
The idea of stealing designs now has become virtually irrelevant because he has taken a hostage and is guilty of much more than theft.

Robert

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021

No, Grant isn't there yet. And yes, you're right, what started out as petty theft, has now turned into something extremely serious. Thank you so much for another lovely review, Robert. I really appreciate your support. Warm hugs :)) Sandra xx

I'm writing a story for my 6 year old granddaughter, Scout, all in your cube 16 format. I had her read the first stanza and she loved it. I'll be posting it on here when the story is finished, it's going to be illustrated and published and I'll be adding you to the credits for the format. It will be longer than my Flossie Flitch poem. :)) It's perfect for children's story poems. xx

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 11-Jan-2021

Hello Sandra.

You're very welcome.

I am honored that you would use my cube16 style for a complete story. I am thrilled and anxious to read it when it's ready. I've been writing several more poems using it. I haven't posted any of them here. I've been using it for serious and thoughtful poems as well as silly ones. I have one that I just wrote that has several four syllable words. That was fun.

Robert

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I do so like the way you spilt the chapter from Grant, Monica and his men to Tania's needs. Grant will succeed with defeating Colin and his arrest. Tania now has needs to attend to, first to 'spend a penny' which she takes care of and then to have herself a weapon, which she now has. Great job. Oh my, shingles are indeed very painful, I do hope they have you on medication to help. Hugs, smiles and blessings.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021

Thank you so much, Alie. I'm so pleased you like the way I'm writing this. Grant and his mates are getting ready. Lots of fun ahead. :)) Warm hugs, dear friend. Warm hugs. :) Sandra xxx
The shingles are acting up and for some reason it's worse at night, especially when I'm going to bed. I can't bear the covers on me. I keep popping the pain killers. :(

reply by aryr on 12-Jan-2021

You are so welcome Sandra, I really am enjoying it. Darn, shingles do seem worst at night because you are in the dark and nothing else to think of. I can only imagine what the covers do, hey at least they gave you medication. Some countries just tell you to live with it and it will eventually go away, how horrible. Blessings.

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Another great chapter. Tania needs to find a way out of that room. I don't know that she will be able to over power Colin. I hope she can surprise him. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021

Thank you, Rox, for another lovely review. I'm glad you're still enjoying my story! :)) hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I like the idea of Tania clobbering Colin and saving herself. How nice to think us girls could take care of someone like that. I can't wait to see how it works for her.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021

Thank you, Cindy. I would like to think most of us would at least try to overpower our captor. Even if we made things worse, at least we could have the satisfaction of trying, and hopefully, hurting the monster. I'm grateful for your continued support, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xx

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

Another fine chapter with the tension sustained throughout. You get inside the head of the captive in a most believable way. The combination of Tania's internal dialogue and her actions is well handled.

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021

Thank you, Tony. That is such a compliment. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part, and a big thank you for the golden star.

I'm having problems with my shingles, at the moment. They are so painful, making it difficult to sit or stand for too long. It's hard to read and review properly. But I'll be onto your post very soon. Take care and stay safe, my friend. Sandra xx