Good Deed Gone Bad
Things don't always go as planned.46 total reviews
Comment from papa55mike
It sure does seem that way sometimes. What a wonderfully written piece of flash, and I love the twist at the end. Congrats on the win! Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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It sure does seem that way sometimes. What a wonderfully written piece of flash, and I love the twist at the end. Congrats on the win! Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review
Comment from oliver818
This is a funny story, I can see why it won. It flows well and I like your use of characterization. The twist at the end is well done and I didn't see it coming. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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This is a funny story, I can see why it won. It flows well and I like your use of characterization. The twist at the end is well done and I didn't see it coming. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review
Comment from tfawcus
Sometimes, you just can't win when it comes to doing good turns. Congratulations, however, on your win in this contest. There have to be some compensations.
The story was developed well and the punchline completed the humour of the situation.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Sometimes, you just can't win when it comes to doing good turns. Congratulations, however, on your win in this contest. There have to be some compensations.
The story was developed well and the punchline completed the humour of the situation.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, I enjoyed your entry. Congratulations on your win. Your story is believable and well=written. You painted a great picture of this incident and the aftermath.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Haha, I enjoyed your entry. Congratulations on your win. Your story is believable and well=written. You painted a great picture of this incident and the aftermath.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review
Comment from DonandVicki
Ha HA, This reminded me of when I helped a paraplegic to get out of the passenger seat of his van. We struggled and afterward he said thanks "but I was trying to get into the Van!!!" Intentions were good, eh?
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Ha HA, This reminded me of when I helped a paraplegic to get out of the passenger seat of his van. We struggled and afterward he said thanks "but I was trying to get into the Van!!!" Intentions were good, eh?
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
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Comment from BethShelby
You told this story well. I can see this happening. It has a very funny ending. I think it is an excellent entry for the Good Deed That Goes Wrong contest. I see you won. Congratualtions.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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You told this story well. I can see this happening. It has a very funny ending. I think it is an excellent entry for the Good Deed That Goes Wrong contest. I see you won. Congratualtions.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Comment from Sanku
ha so sad the sincere effort to help a helpless person has gone wrong. But still it is the intention that counts .he would have learnt a lesson that day
A very good story and congratulations.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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ha so sad the sincere effort to help a helpless person has gone wrong. But still it is the intention that counts .he would have learnt a lesson that day
A very good story and congratulations.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from DSchlosser
I've seen things like this happen before from people eager to do church work. You definitely hit it on the nose for how focused a person can be, yet not figuring out the entire situation first before lending a hand.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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I've seen things like this happen before from people eager to do church work. You definitely hit it on the nose for how focused a person can be, yet not figuring out the entire situation first before lending a hand.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your message and review
Comment from Susan Larson
You really caught me off guard with your ending. Very cute. Very clever. I find just complimenting someone on their outfit always brings a smile. I don't think we can go wrong with that. At least we won't cause them to miss the bus!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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You really caught me off guard with your ending. Very cute. Very clever. I find just complimenting someone on their outfit always brings a smile. I don't think we can go wrong with that. At least we won't cause them to miss the bus!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review. By the way, nice outfit! hehehe
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Thank you.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Cute story and it is indeed a good deed gone bad.
The dialogue is crisp and the ending clever. A bit long in the first paragraph, the introduction to action, but overall great story. I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Cute story and it is indeed a good deed gone bad.
The dialogue is crisp and the ending clever. A bit long in the first paragraph, the introduction to action, but overall great story. I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021
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Thanks for your comments. It was intentional. I was trying to build up the characters energy and determination with short sentence bursts and get the good deed wagon rolling down hill. Thank you for your review.