Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Dangerous Enemies"multi-author book number two
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
As with all viruses, they are unseen and some viruses live inside all of us all the time. Our bodies sometimes combat them and other times we just live with them. This virus is particularly nasty and I think it is killing the host by mistake. The virus wants to live and once it has mutated so that it can spread without being attacked by us, it will live among us like the flu. It will just take time. Fine well though out words here that sent a shiver down my spine Katherine, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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As with all viruses, they are unseen and some viruses live inside all of us all the time. Our bodies sometimes combat them and other times we just live with them. This virus is particularly nasty and I think it is killing the host by mistake. The virus wants to live and once it has mutated so that it can spread without being attacked by us, it will live among us like the flu. It will just take time. Fine well though out words here that sent a shiver down my spine Katherine, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you Dolly for this fine review. You are of course right. The virus can be considered successful only once it has subverted the host to its own will.
Comment from royowen
Depending on the haiku previous to this, but I'm sure it is a wonderful 7/7 you've written Katherine in this renga, yes this is is a very sneaky enemy of mankind, beautifully written, blessings
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Depending on the haiku previous to this, but I'm sure it is a wonderful 7/7 you've written Katherine in this renga, yes this is is a very sneaky enemy of mankind, beautifully written, blessings
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you Roy for your great reception of this 7/7 that follows on from Gypsy's 5/7/5 'Invisible Foe'
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Well done
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear. On one hand, I read this poem as a philosophical one with "mights" and "maybes" being dangerous speculations. But with your picture, you might be referring to a biological dangerous enemy!
Great job with your 7/7 poem!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Oh dear. On one hand, I read this poem as a philosophical one with "mights" and "maybes" being dangerous speculations. But with your picture, you might be referring to a biological dangerous enemy!
Great job with your 7/7 poem!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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You read it as I wrote it, but Covid was mixed in - hence the picture. But there was also the question of mites as an enemy, so first reviewers want to see the word mite in there instead of might... off to juggle.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Too bad you didn't write MITES--of course, had you done so, you'd be cited for misspelling by those who don't read notes. And of course, mites, as you say, aren't deadly. Let's hope the sobering theme of this poem will be rendered obsolete, at least, as regards Corona, given the vaccine pending. Mites, alas, are likely collectively immortal.
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Too bad you didn't write MITES--of course, had you done so, you'd be cited for misspelling by those who don't read notes. And of course, mites, as you say, aren't deadly. Let's hope the sobering theme of this poem will be rendered obsolete, at least, as regards Corona, given the vaccine pending. Mites, alas, are likely collectively immortal.
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thanks for this fine review. I 've changed mites (or will when the internet calms down) as Lucy says the same.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Powerful presentation in green and black. "Mites" would be a good alternate word choice for Line 2. Lovely addition to Renga book, Katherine!
Hope all is well in your world tonite! How did your Mom's b-day go?
Lucy
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Powerful presentation in green and black. "Mites" would be a good alternate word choice for Line 2. Lovely addition to Renga book, Katherine!
Hope all is well in your world tonite! How did your Mom's b-day go?
Lucy
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2020
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Thanks for this fine review. I've changed mites as Liz thought the same, but not sure it's the best solution.
Mum's birthday was awful as we still haven't got there (the borders are closed and she doesn't understand that), and she knows nothing about the book or it wont be a surprise - but it looks lovely.We're just keeping our fingers closed for January.