Betrayal
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Comment from DeboraDyess
What a creep! And I got so caught up in the story that I forgot to look for edits. lol. And none stood out, so that's excellent.
I did find this
up some plans, was beyond lucky >> no comma needed here.
Oh, he's so BAD! I'm glad Tania is on to him, though. I just hope she remembered to turn the recorder on! You don't specify that, so I'm hoping it's just understood that it happened and not a blunder on her part.
Great read!
I'm going to be out of pocket for a while. I'm going to Alabama, to my son's cabin. He has no computer and no wi-fi, so I'll be in the woods with the bears and my boy and husband. (Who are both sometimes bears!) I'm looking forward to reading for you in mid-December.
Have a great rest of the month! Hugs and blessings,
Debs
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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What a creep! And I got so caught up in the story that I forgot to look for edits. lol. And none stood out, so that's excellent.
I did find this
up some plans, was beyond lucky >> no comma needed here.
Oh, he's so BAD! I'm glad Tania is on to him, though. I just hope she remembered to turn the recorder on! You don't specify that, so I'm hoping it's just understood that it happened and not a blunder on her part.
Great read!
I'm going to be out of pocket for a while. I'm going to Alabama, to my son's cabin. He has no computer and no wi-fi, so I'll be in the woods with the bears and my boy and husband. (Who are both sometimes bears!) I'm looking forward to reading for you in mid-December.
Have a great rest of the month! Hugs and blessings,
Debs
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Oh, have a wonderful break, Debs! Now, are they cuddly bears, or grouchy bears???? Lol.
You can catch up when you come back!!! Lol. So much is going to happen over the next few parts, not all nice!
Thank you for reading this, and I'll remove the comma. Take care, my friend, mind the bears, (the real ones, too!) and come home safe and sound. Enjoy! Loads of hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
Ps. The recorder is voice activated. I've never had one like that, so I could imagine it might pick up other voices. I'll have to look into that. xxx
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Colin is a very bad man! Tania is playing it cool, but he thinks he is smarter than she is. =] Well done as always. I saw no nits and thought it very well written. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Colin is a very bad man! Tania is playing it cool, but he thinks he is smarter than she is. =] Well done as always. I saw no nits and thought it very well written. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Rox, for another lovely review. I appreciate your support, my friend. Warm hugs, have a lovely Thanksgiving. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Colin sounds like a man that likes to take credit for work that he has not done. I sure hope Tania catches onto his vicious plan before its too late. The suspense will perhaps continue in the next chapter....and the other chapters after that.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Colin sounds like a man that likes to take credit for work that he has not done. I sure hope Tania catches onto his vicious plan before its too late. The suspense will perhaps continue in the next chapter....and the other chapters after that.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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That is Colin alright, he's definitely a rogue. He's trying to worm his way back into her life, but Tania's having none of it. Will he get the plans, though? Thank you so much, Rosemary, for this lovely review. Warm hugs, my friend. Have a lovely Thanksgiving. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from F. William Lester
And the story moves forward. I missed a couple of chapters, but picked up the story very quickly. So Colin is the devious rat I thought he was. Will the cur outsmart her and tie her to the tracks as the train approaches? (strictly an American analogy) Well structured, paced, and written. I have nary a suggestion. I hope everyone is well. We celebrate Thanksgiving this Thursday and will keep you and your family in our thoughts. Stay warm and safe. Frank
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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And the story moves forward. I missed a couple of chapters, but picked up the story very quickly. So Colin is the devious rat I thought he was. Will the cur outsmart her and tie her to the tracks as the train approaches? (strictly an American analogy) Well structured, paced, and written. I have nary a suggestion. I hope everyone is well. We celebrate Thanksgiving this Thursday and will keep you and your family in our thoughts. Stay warm and safe. Frank
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hmm, tie her to the railway tracks?? Lol, you have a wicked mind, Frank, but I like it!! Thank you so much for this lovely, fun review, Pop in on Sunday and find out how Tania is getting on. Warm hugs, my friend, have a lovely Thanksgiving day. :)) Sandra xx
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Thanks and I'll be looking for the next chapter. Stay well.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Nice job. I remember reading an earlier installment or two of your story and this chapter is in keeping with the others in tone and quality.
I like that it starts with the two girls and their close and solid relationship and then switches to a conversation with this idiot who doesn't understand what either close or relationship are. It was a nice contrast. I await the next installment.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Nice job. I remember reading an earlier installment or two of your story and this chapter is in keeping with the others in tone and quality.
I like that it starts with the two girls and their close and solid relationship and then switches to a conversation with this idiot who doesn't understand what either close or relationship are. It was a nice contrast. I await the next installment.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for coming by and reading this part, Cynthia, I do so appreciate that. Next part coming Sunday, and things start to change. Warm hugs, my friend. Have a lovely Thanksgiving day. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is an interesting where Tania's ex and the brother's a billionaire wanted to hire her as a contract architect. She didn't trust him but told him about her design for his land. Colin was going to steal it.
You did a good job switch between points of views as a third-person omniscient point of view.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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This is an interesting where Tania's ex and the brother's a billionaire wanted to hire her as a contract architect. She didn't trust him but told him about her design for his land. Colin was going to steal it.
You did a good job switch between points of views as a third-person omniscient point of view.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Lisa, for this lovely review. Tania is hoping Colin will fall into her trap and give her the evidence to give to Colin's half-brother to prove her innocence. Will it work? We shall see. I'm glad you thought the switch between the POVs were done well. That is what I was hoping for. Thanks again, and have a lovely Thanksgiving! :)) Sandra.
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I think this version is even better:
He is a fun companion for our trips.
His winning basketball games give us thrill.
He fences his way to many championships.
He skis downhill on snowy mountain hills.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Colin thinks the gods are with him, but really I think they are with Tania.
"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we ponder to deceive"
I am sure she will get the recording that she hopes for.
An interesting story you are building.
Ralf
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Colin thinks the gods are with him, but really I think they are with Tania.
"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we ponder to deceive"
I am sure she will get the recording that she hopes for.
An interesting story you are building.
Ralf
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Absolutely! Thank you so much for these lovely comments, Ralf, I really appreciate them and you. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Man, I hope she's not falling for this idiot again:) or maybe she will outfox him:) Mmm let's see what next chapter brings maybe some joy in the revenge department and a new start for her. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Man, I hope she's not falling for this idiot again:) or maybe she will outfox him:) Mmm let's see what next chapter brings maybe some joy in the revenge department and a new start for her. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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You'll have a better idea in the next part, Iza. Something has to give. :)) Thank you so much for reading my story, and for the lovely comments. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
Well, she was right, he wants he latest drawings, and will try to get, but I think she still knows he's dangerous, will he stumble, will he get past and make her look like a fool, I'm betting no, because she smarter, despite the fact he's a crook, gee you can write a plot, with great characters dear girl, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Well, she was right, he wants he latest drawings, and will try to get, but I think she still knows he's dangerous, will he stumble, will he get past and make her look like a fool, I'm betting no, because she smarter, despite the fact he's a crook, gee you can write a plot, with great characters dear girl, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Bless your heart, Roy, you know how to warm a girls heart! The trouble is, Colin is devious and knows he has to get these plans not only for the money, but to stop Grant becoming suspicious. Can Tania trap him? Thank you so much, my dear friend, for your lovely review. Your comments brought a smile to my face. :)) Warm hugs and love. Sandra xxx
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Well done
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Always a pleasure Sandra
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, it sure looks like Colin has tipped his hand, but could it be that an excellent writer like Sandra Mitchell might be throwing us a curve. I think she might be. Thanks, Sandra, for entertaining me on Sunday Eve.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Well, it sure looks like Colin has tipped his hand, but could it be that an excellent writer like Sandra Mitchell might be throwing us a curve. I think she might be. Thanks, Sandra, for entertaining me on Sunday Eve.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for coming along and reading this part, Jay, I have always valued your comments. Things never are what they seem, are they? :)) Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx