Betrayal
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sandramitchell,
Nice piece of General Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and transparently depicting the theme with its minutest details.
The last sentence in the last paragraph is working as a HOOK - A good quality of any writing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hello Sandramitchell,
Nice piece of General Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and transparently depicting the theme with its minutest details.
The last sentence in the last paragraph is working as a HOOK - A good quality of any writing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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What a lovely reviewe, RP, thank you so very much. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part, and look forward to reading your thoughts on the meeting. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Hi Sandra xx, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, I knew it...I knew it... knew you would stop before the meeting...when I was reading it...I kept saying to myself of course...she better not STOP...
ask your muse if he/she has a short memory...always stops at the wrong times...I have a few ideas my amazing friend...but just not sure which one will pan out...
my idea would have been for Grant to invite his half brother...see who was the fraud...hummmm...
but I feel love is in the air here...very well written sweet girl...your pulling the readers in...making them want more...but them is your style...your signature...that is you...and you do it well...this is going to be a great book you...I love reading it...lets see how this meeting goes...going to bed beautiful you...tired...love you in big bunches...Linda xxoo
say Hi to Ian for me...and Graham...I'll PM you....xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hi Sandra, I knew it...I knew it... knew you would stop before the meeting...when I was reading it...I kept saying to myself of course...she better not STOP...
ask your muse if he/she has a short memory...always stops at the wrong times...I have a few ideas my amazing friend...but just not sure which one will pan out...
my idea would have been for Grant to invite his half brother...see who was the fraud...hummmm...
but I feel love is in the air here...very well written sweet girl...your pulling the readers in...making them want more...but them is your style...your signature...that is you...and you do it well...this is going to be a great book you...I love reading it...lets see how this meeting goes...going to bed beautiful you...tired...love you in big bunches...Linda xxoo
say Hi to Ian for me...and Graham...I'll PM you....xxoo
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hi Linda, it doens't matter how you're feeling, you still keep that lovely sense of humour. I love you for that. Of course I had to stop there! Goodness me, I'm only thinking of you, can you imagine the shock had I continued when you knew I wouldn't!!!! LOL. LOL. I think you will like the next few chapters, well, some of them, you might have a few niggles at me, but I'll suffer without moaning. LOL
Thank you so much for another of your fabulous reviews, my dear, and the shiny six stars. You are the best! Sending you another hug to go with the others I sent you earlier. Take care, my friend, you have me worried. Love you lots. xxxxxxx Sandra xxx
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not to worry sweet angel...I will be fine...
I'll pm you...
I know I will love the next chapters...this is a great story told...I can see Graham now...yeaaaaa another book...I'm on my way to lumber city...
your so welcome my amazing friend...love you bunches...xxoo
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra
A romantic, comedy waiting to be put on the screen. Now who should play Tania, and who Grant? I see Tania with dark hair (unlike the picture) and Grant, well Hugh Grant is a bit old, even though the names match.
The conflict is developing well, but Grant is a sucker for those soft, liquid orbs. lol
Tea room is a good choice, soothing, relaxing, of course, one could "spice up" the tea a bit.
Well done.
I think I'll go have a spot of tea myself.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hello Sandra
A romantic, comedy waiting to be put on the screen. Now who should play Tania, and who Grant? I see Tania with dark hair (unlike the picture) and Grant, well Hugh Grant is a bit old, even though the names match.
The conflict is developing well, but Grant is a sucker for those soft, liquid orbs. lol
Tea room is a good choice, soothing, relaxing, of course, one could "spice up" the tea a bit.
Well done.
I think I'll go have a spot of tea myself.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Who could play Tania? Now, there's a question. Hugh Grant as Grant? Yes, too old ... does he have a son?? Lol. I loved the,
.... Who Grant, Hugh Grant! Lol.
Thank you so much for the six stars, Robert, and for another of your brilliantly fun reviews. Now, I hope you had some cucumber sandwiches, cut into triangles with the crusts cut off, with your cup of tea? That is the only way to have afternoon tea, unless you are with Mildred down in Cornwall, then it would be scones, clotted cream with strawberry jam on top. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from L. Kalere
Ah, the plot thickens...will she, or won't she? Did she, or didn't she? Will he, or won't he? There's a lot going on here that will keep readers reading. Keep up the great work, Sandra.
One surprise for me: no chamomile?
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Ah, the plot thickens...will she, or won't she? Did she, or didn't she? Will he, or won't he? There's a lot going on here that will keep readers reading. Keep up the great work, Sandra.
One surprise for me: no chamomile?
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Hi Linda, thank you for another lovely review. Chamomile? A nice cup of chamomile tea, in the tea-room? Of course, I should have thought of that. I had a neighbour who lived to be 101, he had a cup every afternoon at 4pm, with a cucumber sandwich with the crusts cut off. Very upper-class gentleman! :))
Thanks for you continued support, my friend. I really appreciate it. Warm hugs! Sandra xxx
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I will definitely continue reading this novel; it's about a possible love design triangle. Not sure if the company is a good thing or a good match for Tania but she will find out soon enough.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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I will definitely continue reading this novel; it's about a possible love design triangle. Not sure if the company is a good thing or a good match for Tania but she will find out soon enough.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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All caught up! Thank you again, Rosemary. You've been great, and I'm so pleased to know you are coming back. Thank you! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from DeboraDyess
Oh, I've been watchingfor this! I skipped several announcements in my inbox to get to this one. lol (Don't tell!)
And, as my dear hubby says, the 'pthot plickens'!
Hi! I actually skipped down in my inbox to get to this -- don't tell anyone! lol
I love it. As my hubby says, 'the thot plickens!!'
Just a couple of thoughts:
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those venomous looks with those same eyes >> Is the repetition of 'those' in this sentence intentional? Perfectly okay if it was, but I wanted to bring it to your attention, just in case. :)
A moan slipped from somewhere deep inside and(,) pulling the cover over >> First of all, I love the image this line evokes. Great! And we can all identify with it. But you need a comma. :) You did put the comma at the end of the clause, just forgot the initial one.
She scrolled through her messages, there were over sixty but most were of no interest. But one did catch her >> The punctuation here could use some work in order to clarify the sentence. (And THAT didn't make much sense, did it! lol) You might consider something like this: She scrolled through her messages; there were over sixty, most of no interest. But one did catch her >> THat makes for an easier read and eliminates the double, back-to-back buts. (Now THERE'S a visual for you! ð???)
'What are you up to, Mr Grant Blake? And why am I talking to myself?' >> LOVE THIS LINE! PERFECTION!
support crutch >> Here in the US, that would be redundant. Is it a Brit term?
Did she want to sound cool in here response to Grant? I'd think she'd be shooting for authoratitative or professional.
A little disloyal fluttering in her stomach caught her short >> another great line! And, oh, do I know that feeling! Felt it when I first saw my now-husband.
He worked for my grandparents, my grandmomma had been trying to get me to meet him and there was NO WAY I was going to date a guy that worked up in the shop. And then...Yep. Married him within six months. lol
I am so enjoying this, Sandra! Thank you for a lovely evening read.
Blessings,
Debs
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Oh, I've been watchingfor this! I skipped several announcements in my inbox to get to this one. lol (Don't tell!)
And, as my dear hubby says, the 'pthot plickens'!
Hi! I actually skipped down in my inbox to get to this -- don't tell anyone! lol
I love it. As my hubby says, 'the thot plickens!!'
Just a couple of thoughts:
...............................................
those venomous looks with those same eyes >> Is the repetition of 'those' in this sentence intentional? Perfectly okay if it was, but I wanted to bring it to your attention, just in case. :)
A moan slipped from somewhere deep inside and(,) pulling the cover over >> First of all, I love the image this line evokes. Great! And we can all identify with it. But you need a comma. :) You did put the comma at the end of the clause, just forgot the initial one.
She scrolled through her messages, there were over sixty but most were of no interest. But one did catch her >> The punctuation here could use some work in order to clarify the sentence. (And THAT didn't make much sense, did it! lol) You might consider something like this: She scrolled through her messages; there were over sixty, most of no interest. But one did catch her >> THat makes for an easier read and eliminates the double, back-to-back buts. (Now THERE'S a visual for you! ð???)
'What are you up to, Mr Grant Blake? And why am I talking to myself?' >> LOVE THIS LINE! PERFECTION!
support crutch >> Here in the US, that would be redundant. Is it a Brit term?
Did she want to sound cool in here response to Grant? I'd think she'd be shooting for authoratitative or professional.
A little disloyal fluttering in her stomach caught her short >> another great line! And, oh, do I know that feeling! Felt it when I first saw my now-husband.
He worked for my grandparents, my grandmomma had been trying to get me to meet him and there was NO WAY I was going to date a guy that worked up in the shop. And then...Yep. Married him within six months. lol
I am so enjoying this, Sandra! Thank you for a lovely evening read.
Blessings,
Debs
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thank you so very much for this helpful review, Debs, I've sorted those out, and had a few giggles reading some of your remarks... back-to-back buts. (Now THERE'S a visual for you!???)... LOL!!!
Yes, a person coming along as a back up, is also called a support crutch.
I'm so pleased you are enjoying this story, my friend, I know there are a few nits I have to sort out at the end, but it's nice to know the story is enjoyed.
I love your story on how you ended up marrying a man who your grandparents knew was the right person for you before you did. Just goes to show, us oldies know what's best for our grandchildren. I've already approved of my granddaughter's boyfriend. I'm sure they will go all the way and get married soon.
Thank you so much, my friend. Have a lovely day! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
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My grands are a bit young for serious boy/girl friends, but I'm hoping they'll value my opinion about that as much as I did my grandparents. (That was very tongue-in-cheek, of course! lol)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I can't help but want her to tell him to take a hike. But knowing that wouldn't be the smartest thing to do, I hope she keeps a stiff upper lip and hear him out. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Well, I can't help but want her to tell him to take a hike. But knowing that wouldn't be the smartest thing to do, I hope she keeps a stiff upper lip and hear him out. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Yes, she has to be sensible over this. I think you might like the way the meeting goes. :))
Thank you so much for the lovely review, Ric, and for the six star award; you know how to put a smile on my face!! Have a wonderful day, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from royowen
It looks like Grant Blake is quite disturbed by Tania's apparent annoyance at him, and something keeps stirring in his soul, and he thinks there's something rotten in Denmark, but he there is a seed of doubt in his mind, he knows how charming his half brother can be. He contacts her through her website to meet, and she reluctantly consents. Well done Sandra, another brilliant post, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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It looks like Grant Blake is quite disturbed by Tania's apparent annoyance at him, and something keeps stirring in his soul, and he thinks there's something rotten in Denmark, but he there is a seed of doubt in his mind, he knows how charming his half brother can be. He contacts her through her website to meet, and she reluctantly consents. Well done Sandra, another brilliant post, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, Roy, for another of your lovely reviews. You always say such nice things and I really appreciate you for it. Well, they will be meeting up soon, so that will be fun. Keep safe and well, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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I?m looking forward Sandra,
Comment from RShipp
Wow. Stuck between 'It's the cunning woman who did it.' Or 'It's the manipulating half-brother who did it.' Not much hope?
'Use their wiles to get under your skin, and then wham!' I'm not sure SHE can be guilty of using her wiles when he is one that goggled her picture?
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Wow. Stuck between 'It's the cunning woman who did it.' Or 'It's the manipulating half-brother who did it.' Not much hope?
'Use their wiles to get under your skin, and then wham!' I'm not sure SHE can be guilty of using her wiles when he is one that goggled her picture?
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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LOL, no, Grant will have to reassess his thoughts on women. Some of us are quite nice!! Thank you so much for another lovely review, my friend. I really appreciated you nice comments. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from blondie560
I'm not liking this one chapter at a time thing lol! I would like to keep reading it all. But you definitely leave me wanting to read more. Keep 'em coming!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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I'm not liking this one chapter at a time thing lol! I would like to keep reading it all. But you definitely leave me wanting to read more. Keep 'em coming!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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What a lovely review, Blondie! Thank you so much, and an extra hug for the six stars. You have made my day with your lovely comments, and I've a big smile on my face. Thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xx