Old Decrepit Woman Revised.
Written about a painting I saw.177 total reviews
Comment from conorzzy
Great, powerful poem! Congratulations on a good read. It was interesting you picked a painting to use as a prompt, or inspiration. When you mentioned her being Mexican, I was surprised as i thought you might be going for the universal appeal.
Either way, lovely poem, well written
Thanks for sharing this,
Conor.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Great, powerful poem! Congratulations on a good read. It was interesting you picked a painting to use as a prompt, or inspiration. When you mentioned her being Mexican, I was surprised as i thought you might be going for the universal appeal.
Either way, lovely poem, well written
Thanks for sharing this,
Conor.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you Conor.
Comment from chita
Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your write-I love your poem-I love the repetition of 'decrepit woman' gives your poem power in every line--a well penned write-great job.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your write-I love your poem-I love the repetition of 'decrepit woman' gives your poem power in every line--a well penned write-great job.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you Chita.
Comment from WilliamDeen
That poor old decrepit woman! Why did anyone want to kill that poor woman?
Your poem has good rhyme in it and the cadence is very smooth.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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That poor old decrepit woman! Why did anyone want to kill that poor woman?
Your poem has good rhyme in it and the cadence is very smooth.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you Will.
Comment from robyn corum
OK Boz,
You sweet young thing. The fact is that the lady in the picture is probably not anywhere near as old as she looks and probably has many more good years ahead of her. She looks old to you because you are so stinking young. I was that was once. I remember it well.
I didn't understand all of the poem - like how she was the woes of all YOUR prayers and grieving, how she was so old and still had a baby, and how they had stolen her home and lands - by planning it. I was left with more q's than answers.
BUT the one line "Like a raisin losing its breath," made me give you a five in spite of all that. I loved it and thought it was inspired.
It saved your hiney from a four today. *smile* Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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OK Boz,
You sweet young thing. The fact is that the lady in the picture is probably not anywhere near as old as she looks and probably has many more good years ahead of her. She looks old to you because you are so stinking young. I was that was once. I remember it well.
I didn't understand all of the poem - like how she was the woes of all YOUR prayers and grieving, how she was so old and still had a baby, and how they had stolen her home and lands - by planning it. I was left with more q's than answers.
BUT the one line "Like a raisin losing its breath," made me give you a five in spite of all that. I loved it and thought it was inspired.
It saved your hiney from a four today. *smile* Great job.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you Rob.
Comment from jaded831
Actually when I first read your poem I didn't like it. I read your author's notes and I had a change of heart. Your poem was well written and took on a different meaning with me second read.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Actually when I first read your poem I didn't like it. I read your author's notes and I had a change of heart. Your poem was well written and took on a different meaning with me second read.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you Jaded.
Comment from fastdigits
An emotional journey into the
depths of despair, highlighted
by your choice of art, in which
your words paint a picture of
abject hopelessness, a woman whose
face etches all that is wrong with
the world.
Well done
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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An emotional journey into the
depths of despair, highlighted
by your choice of art, in which
your words paint a picture of
abject hopelessness, a woman whose
face etches all that is wrong with
the world.
Well done
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you digits.
Comment from TammyGail
Great work on the is poem......
Wow the imagery is great .... your poem was really well written.....
I enjoyed the read ..... thanks for sharing .....
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Great work on the is poem......
Wow the imagery is great .... your poem was really well written.....
I enjoyed the read ..... thanks for sharing .....
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Thank you Tammy.