All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Sticky-notes"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from paulinedr
I like the rollicking rhythm of the first verse. The rambling discussion of identifying the vectors of love is appealing; the cynical attitude of who needs it that melts into sorrow and loneliness and pain tugs at the heart. A strong person who can deal with loss while feeling the pain, shines through this work. The last lines in their hesitant one at a time placement vividly portrays the dropping of post-it notes, the last vestiges of the departed lover is poignant and appealing. I found nothing I did not like in this poem. It beautifully avoids sentimentality and the over exaggeration of the wonders of love seen in many renditions of "love" poetry.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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I like the rollicking rhythm of the first verse. The rambling discussion of identifying the vectors of love is appealing; the cynical attitude of who needs it that melts into sorrow and loneliness and pain tugs at the heart. A strong person who can deal with loss while feeling the pain, shines through this work. The last lines in their hesitant one at a time placement vividly portrays the dropping of post-it notes, the last vestiges of the departed lover is poignant and appealing. I found nothing I did not like in this poem. It beautifully avoids sentimentality and the over exaggeration of the wonders of love seen in many renditions of "love" poetry.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for your detailed reading here Pauline. I, too, hate 'mushy' love poetry - so glad this one resonated with you and you totally understood the progression of the piece.
Blessings & appreciation,
Sharyn
Comment from A Matter Of Words
Going through the motions of life while feeling the pain and anger and loneliness of love gone wrong or lost. I love the way the energy of pain and anger propel the poem forward, and then slowly dissolve into the expression of loneliness like a single leaf wafting to the ground after a violent wind storm. Excellent.
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Going through the motions of life while feeling the pain and anger and loneliness of love gone wrong or lost. I love the way the energy of pain and anger propel the poem forward, and then slowly dissolve into the expression of loneliness like a single leaf wafting to the ground after a violent wind storm. Excellent.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Thx so much for your detailed reading & understanding here Words! :)Sharyn
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You are most welcome.
Comment from emjaihammond
This is oh so sad, yet, sometimes I see friends who go through this, and to my surprise they are great right out of the door. I thought it was very well written and a good poem to keep interest in hand. Well done.
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This is oh so sad, yet, sometimes I see friends who go through this, and to my surprise they are great right out of the door. I thought it was very well written and a good poem to keep interest in hand. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Yes, I see the same thing MJ. Often a break-up is definitely a solution because it's an end to the pain and new beginnings are possible, whereas before, they seemed out of reach. We're amazingly resilient, aren't we?
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from zeldasmith
I loved your poem. I could feel the tender love you once had for the one you lost. I could imagine myself in the room looking at the wall and wishing whoever was still here. Great Job.
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I loved your poem. I could feel the tender love you once had for the one you lost. I could imagine myself in the room looking at the wall and wishing whoever was still here. Great Job.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Bless you Zelda - thank you so much for your wonderful six on this one!!!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Sharon,
You describe your lonlinees...or cynicism:) by the canges made to your living space...mostly by what is not there. This was a very effective way to send your message. Great job--Ted
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Dear Sharon,
You describe your lonlinees...or cynicism:) by the canges made to your living space...mostly by what is not there. This was a very effective way to send your message. Great job--Ted
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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thx Ted! :))Sharyn
Comment from Curly Girly
Alone and in love. Dilligent in housework and in tending all that needs tending. But you wait alone. A silent home with bare cream coloured walls. Well written, Sharyn.
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Alone and in love. Dilligent in housework and in tending all that needs tending. But you wait alone. A silent home with bare cream coloured walls. Well written, Sharyn.
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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thx Nicole! :)S