Zerubbabel Baxter
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5148 total reviews
Comment from Pili Pubul
Your ability to find amazing names is unique LOL...
This is a very entertaining poem -story , children will love.
And is a very good moral to the story too. The picture of Miranda
is precious. Smiles . Pili
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Your ability to find amazing names is unique LOL...
This is a very entertaining poem -story , children will love.
And is a very good moral to the story too. The picture of Miranda
is precious. Smiles . Pili
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome . Pili
Comment from Connie C
You've made very good use of Zerubbabel's name, Brooke. What a darling story/poem this is; and, of course, the cute picture just adds to the delight of the story. I believe you've written another well-rhymed poem that would be fun to put in a children's book.
As always, a joy to read.
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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You've made very good use of Zerubbabel's name, Brooke. What a darling story/poem this is; and, of course, the cute picture just adds to the delight of the story. I believe you've written another well-rhymed poem that would be fun to put in a children's book.
As always, a joy to read.
Connie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Connie, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
Those kids are so lucky at Vacation Bible School, Brooke! Before I read your notes, I was shaking my head trying to figure out where you came up with this name. I don't suppose his last name was really Baxter, was it? The nicknames fit well, also.
Your poem is a lot of fun. Your enjambment is really well done to continue the flow of one stanza to another. Your rhyming is also perfect.
Thank you for sharing another well written poem, Brooke. Take care. Alana
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Those kids are so lucky at Vacation Bible School, Brooke! Before I read your notes, I was shaking my head trying to figure out where you came up with this name. I don't suppose his last name was really Baxter, was it? The nicknames fit well, also.
Your poem is a lot of fun. Your enjambment is really well done to continue the flow of one stanza to another. Your rhyming is also perfect.
Thank you for sharing another well written poem, Brooke. Take care. Alana
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Alana, thank you so much :-) Nope, no Baxters back then as far as I know. LOL Brooke :-)
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You are welcome! :) Alana
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Great poem, Brooke and that is quite the tongue-twister. Sounds a lot like the world, no one wants to give in and nothing constructive gets done. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Great poem, Brooke and that is quite the tongue-twister. Sounds a lot like the world, no one wants to give in and nothing constructive gets done. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Brooke:)
This is surely a six star poetic tale, but alas I have none left.
I loved this poetic tale of two sailors so stubborn that their ship never left port and just rotted away. Their disagreement over which way to sail doomed any action at all. Sounds a bit like our present congress, don't you think?
I liked the rhyme, cadence and flow. This is wonderful story in a poem for children and should be a winner in the contest, Love and Irish Hugs for great entertainment.
Roger
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke:)
This is surely a six star poetic tale, but alas I have none left.
I loved this poetic tale of two sailors so stubborn that their ship never left port and just rotted away. Their disagreement over which way to sail doomed any action at all. Sounds a bit like our present congress, don't you think?
I liked the rhyme, cadence and flow. This is wonderful story in a poem for children and should be a winner in the contest, Love and Irish Hugs for great entertainment.
Roger
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Yep, Roger, it sound sadly just like our Congress. Thanks so much for your insights :-) Brooke
Comment from Lastamen
An enchanting take on this biblical namesake. The flight of fantasy of thiese two stubborn sailors is the plight of all who don't share the spirit of compromise - you eventually see your dreams go up in smoke or sink to the depths of despair. Well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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An enchanting take on this biblical namesake. The flight of fantasy of thiese two stubborn sailors is the plight of all who don't share the spirit of compromise - you eventually see your dreams go up in smoke or sink to the depths of despair. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Lastamen, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Brooke - as many years as I've been in Sunday school and bible study I have never come across Zerubbabel - and I shall bring up that name next week at my bible study meeting.
Am surprised I've not yet met a child with that name - please tell me that is not Sawyer's middle name???
This is a wonderfully creative take on both the kids and the characters. Longfellow should watch out Mistress of the Words!
Charming and sweetly flows Brooke. Another well-done tome. Jean
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Brooke - as many years as I've been in Sunday school and bible study I have never come across Zerubbabel - and I shall bring up that name next week at my bible study meeting.
Am surprised I've not yet met a child with that name - please tell me that is not Sawyer's middle name???
This is a wonderfully creative take on both the kids and the characters. Longfellow should watch out Mistress of the Words!
Charming and sweetly flows Brooke. Another well-done tome. Jean
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Jean, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
The story appears to be a little bit over the heads of young children, but you have more knowledge of your targets abilities. This is well written. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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The story appears to be a little bit over the heads of young children, but you have more knowledge of your targets abilities. This is well written. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from boxergirl
I was just going to ask you where you come up with your awesome names, so thanks for the author notes. I need to hone up on my bible stories. 8-)
Great story in a poem. ABCB rhyme scheme works well. And as always a nice little message wrapped up in the end. 8-)
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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I was just going to ask you where you come up with your awesome names, so thanks for the author notes. I need to hone up on my bible stories. 8-)
Great story in a poem. ABCB rhyme scheme works well. And as always a nice little message wrapped up in the end. 8-)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
Very good lesson this poem teaches. Nothing happens when no one will give in or compromise. I love the names you use in your poems. I know Sawyer is glad to have yopu as grandma. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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Very good lesson this poem teaches. Nothing happens when no one will give in or compromise. I love the names you use in your poems. I know Sawyer is glad to have yopu as grandma. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke