How This Critter Crits
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Comment from AK
Hi Jay,
You've made some great points, especially about being aware of our own biases and also about critiquing stories in progress when you catch then in the middle!
As to your style, I find that I am getting hooked. I have always loved humor more than tragedy, but it is much, much harder to write.
I really would love to read the finished works you have written.
sincerely,
ami
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Hi Jay,
You've made some great points, especially about being aware of our own biases and also about critiquing stories in progress when you catch then in the middle!
As to your style, I find that I am getting hooked. I have always loved humor more than tragedy, but it is much, much harder to write.
I really would love to read the finished works you have written.
sincerely,
ami
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Thanks one more time, ami. I really do appreciate your kindness. It makes me want to launch into the next chapter (though it hasn't jelled in my mind yet). Stay tuned, though. You're always welcome to crit my work any time.
Jay
Comment from jamesa2
I think you've summed up all the people of FanStory. I've asked those very questions of myself and answered them the same way.
Very clever, tying in the house hunting. I could have substituted garage sales.
The wonderful thing about this critting and being critted is I've learned so much from these awesome people. I feel my writing has vastly improved and I'm a better critter now because of my critiquers.
As you can probably tell, some authors don't appreciate the comments. But, if they want to improve, and even the best writers can improve, they must listen to everyone.
Most of us want to be published one day. I was overjoyed when PublishAmerica emailed me and said that my manuscript was accepted. (That sentence sucked. Me before FanStory). The new me......PublishAmerica accepted my manuscript and I'm initially overjoyed. But, after reading the contract, I'd be selling my soul to them.
Anyway, critting and being critted will make me a better writer.
Thanks. You have a great knack for writing and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
By the way your line.....and a heater that keeps our feet toasty during the winters. Should read....and a heater keeping our feet toastly during the winters. Now, where's my money and did I win a Pump? (Just kidding)
jamesa2
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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I think you've summed up all the people of FanStory. I've asked those very questions of myself and answered them the same way.
Very clever, tying in the house hunting. I could have substituted garage sales.
The wonderful thing about this critting and being critted is I've learned so much from these awesome people. I feel my writing has vastly improved and I'm a better critter now because of my critiquers.
As you can probably tell, some authors don't appreciate the comments. But, if they want to improve, and even the best writers can improve, they must listen to everyone.
Most of us want to be published one day. I was overjoyed when PublishAmerica emailed me and said that my manuscript was accepted. (That sentence sucked. Me before FanStory). The new me......PublishAmerica accepted my manuscript and I'm initially overjoyed. But, after reading the contract, I'd be selling my soul to them.
Anyway, critting and being critted will make me a better writer.
Thanks. You have a great knack for writing and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
By the way your line.....and a heater that keeps our feet toasty during the winters. Should read....and a heater keeping our feet toastly during the winters. Now, where's my money and did I win a Pump? (Just kidding)
jamesa2
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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I, too, was overjoyed when PublishAmerica accepted my Novel. Unfortunately, they could have written the contract on sewn-together banana peels and I would have signed it -- and did. I wanted to be a published author that much! I wish I had heard of FanStory back then (2 years ago.) Just be grateful for what we have here. Keep critting and keep writing. And, keep the faith. Thanks again...
Jay
Comment from LittleEmpress
hehe. I really like this piece. And the thing about the chapters, I guess I have to go back and read your first two. :P This piece is really interesting. And yes, I say piece, as it is not a story or poem, but just a piece of writing. Anyways, I really liked it.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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hehe. I really like this piece. And the thing about the chapters, I guess I have to go back and read your first two. :P This piece is really interesting. And yes, I say piece, as it is not a story or poem, but just a piece of writing. Anyways, I really liked it.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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I love your username LittleEmpress. Thank you for your cofidence in what I've done so far. And, it's nice to know that it's driving you (in reverse) to read the other two. I love it. Hang in there and see what comes in the next segment.
Jay
Comment from E. W. Crowe
Funny stuff, and all too true. Good job with everything here, the storytelling, the SPAG's and all the grammatical hooey-gooey. I really didn't see anything that caught my eye as wrong, but have you seen my stuff lately, everything's getting by.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Funny stuff, and all too true. Good job with everything here, the storytelling, the SPAG's and all the grammatical hooey-gooey. I really didn't see anything that caught my eye as wrong, but have you seen my stuff lately, everything's getting by.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Thank you, E. W. for your very kind and hooey-gooey commentary. I really do appreciate the fact that you're first of all enjoying it. I hope you'll also get something out of it. Please stay aboard and read the chapters that are to follow.
Jay
Comment from Bellydanser
Are you tired of people slopping all over your work here? It's, it's, well, fabulous, darling. You write with such aplomb that it hardly feels like a lesson in proper behavior for us minions here on FanStory. You make your points candidly, eloquently and yet kindly. This applies to many more aspects of life than "critting" other writers.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Are you tired of people slopping all over your work here? It's, it's, well, fabulous, darling. You write with such aplomb that it hardly feels like a lesson in proper behavior for us minions here on FanStory. You make your points candidly, eloquently and yet kindly. This applies to many more aspects of life than "critting" other writers.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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You are TOO kind, Bellydanser (keep gushing). You give me all kinds of confidence to complete this thing. Thank y ou, thank you, thank you...
Jay
Comment from rhymer1
I love attempts at humorous writing and this is close to a success. The beginning is a bit off in the - good prose - department but the remainder is relatively clean and concise. I give below my reasons for saying a bit off, and how I would correct the passages were this my draft.
prejudice(, though). superfluous word -
But, (then) I have to - superfluous word -
Still and all, the - tired cliche -
house (, itself,) has good - superfluous word
finish (has been) is painted a - simple declarative best whenever possible
not enought to dock you a star, but close.
However, the prose + the fact that the content didn't give me a giggle tells me this isn't ready for submission. it's hard to say what will make something funny or witty so I can't offer advice except to say - keep on writing and, as with every one else who doesn't quit, you will get there I am confident. Cheers, rhymer1
Cheers, rhymer1
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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I love attempts at humorous writing and this is close to a success. The beginning is a bit off in the - good prose - department but the remainder is relatively clean and concise. I give below my reasons for saying a bit off, and how I would correct the passages were this my draft.
prejudice(, though). superfluous word -
But, (then) I have to - superfluous word -
Still and all, the - tired cliche -
house (, itself,) has good - superfluous word
finish (has been) is painted a - simple declarative best whenever possible
not enought to dock you a star, but close.
However, the prose + the fact that the content didn't give me a giggle tells me this isn't ready for submission. it's hard to say what will make something funny or witty so I can't offer advice except to say - keep on writing and, as with every one else who doesn't quit, you will get there I am confident. Cheers, rhymer1
Cheers, rhymer1
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Thank you rhymer1 for your candid crit. You made some valid points for helping me pare down my prose by eliminating superfluity. Hope you will stay aboard for future editions.
Jay
Comment from Adora Bayles
She'll find you, Jay. Very clever article on the ins and outs, ups and downs, arounds and arounds of critiquieg. You take critting to a new level.
Adora
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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She'll find you, Jay. Very clever article on the ins and outs, ups and downs, arounds and arounds of critiquieg. You take critting to a new level.
Adora
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Thank you Adora. Your confidence in my prose means so very much to me. I am a slow writer, as you're probably aware, and it will be a while before the next one comes out, but I hope you'll visit it as well. Again, thanks.
Jay
Comment from Lois Delaney
What can I say? You've stated exactly the truth of the matter and I've just begun a couple of weeks ago. But I love it! You are tremendously intelligent and a bit humorous to say the least. I was glued to the screen. So there! You have the gift of the gab and that could either be your downfall or your success. Great luck with this. Extremely well done!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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What can I say? You've stated exactly the truth of the matter and I've just begun a couple of weeks ago. But I love it! You are tremendously intelligent and a bit humorous to say the least. I was glued to the screen. So there! You have the gift of the gab and that could either be your downfall or your success. Great luck with this. Extremely well done!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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My goodness, a sixer. I'm so very grateful. Thank you! Roseana would tell you my gift of gab could be my downfall -- if gift of gab means I don't often know when to close my mouth and let what has been said resonate for a while. I just keep talking, as, right now, I just keep writing.
Thanks Again, Housemaid,
Jay
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hey there Master Jay!! I just love your series on critting...your honesty and humor is a delight. One thing I've learned from this chapter - how many house hunting addicts there are on FanStory!! LMAO it's like seeing a Better Homes and Gardens or House of Hell Hill in person!! Smiles...Indy :>)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Hey there Master Jay!! I just love your series on critting...your honesty and humor is a delight. One thing I've learned from this chapter - how many house hunting addicts there are on FanStory!! LMAO it's like seeing a Better Homes and Gardens or House of Hell Hill in person!! Smiles...Indy :>)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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Thank you once again, Indy, for your kind comments. Yes, I was amazed as well about the house hunters. I thought we were kinda in a minority. I'm going to try in the next chapter to carry the analogy farther (or further). Hope you're there.
Jay
Comment from GrandmaSharon
You have an uphill battle with the age-old (as old as fanstory anyway) about what is fair reviewing. I don't know about you, but as a novel writer I post my work hoping for improvement, because I do hope to publish somewhere someday. I would like a few people to read the novel from start to finish. I don't really want a review from chapter 17 from someone who has no clue about the story. But what do you do? I am eager to see what solution you produce.
keep writing
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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You have an uphill battle with the age-old (as old as fanstory anyway) about what is fair reviewing. I don't know about you, but as a novel writer I post my work hoping for improvement, because I do hope to publish somewhere someday. I would like a few people to read the novel from start to finish. I don't really want a review from chapter 17 from someone who has no clue about the story. But what do you do? I am eager to see what solution you produce.
keep writing
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2006
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I do have a solution -- probably not one you'd like, but a solution none the less. Stick around, Sharon, and let me know what you think. And, meanwhile, thank you so much for your interest in what's gone on so far.
Jay