All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Beginnings and Endings"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, sharyn, you did an excellent job writing this abab poem about the way life is all about the time spent between birth and death. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, sharyn, you did an excellent job writing this abab poem about the way life is all about the time spent between birth and death. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much sweets! :))Sharyn
Comment from MizKat
Hi Sharyn,
This is another outstanding poem. I really enjoyed reading it and also your author notes. I'm out of six stars or I'd have given them to you for this.
Blessings, Kat
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
This is another outstanding poem. I really enjoyed reading it and also your author notes. I'm out of six stars or I'd have given them to you for this.
Blessings, Kat
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Bless you, Kat - thank you so much dear! :)S
Comment from JB Lynn
"The grass was all tickly..." - Terrific word as it's a very innocent, childlike word and keeps me rooted in the mindset of the child. You clearly have mastered this technique, because just as your narrator "ages", so too does your language and word choice (for example, "gyred and whorling" etc).
Thanks for the helpful comment about the intent for this piece to be spoken out loud like a waltz. It helped me zero in on the rhythm right away and the pacing flowed and worked for me. Lovely image, also. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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"The grass was all tickly..." - Terrific word as it's a very innocent, childlike word and keeps me rooted in the mindset of the child. You clearly have mastered this technique, because just as your narrator "ages", so too does your language and word choice (for example, "gyred and whorling" etc).
Thanks for the helpful comment about the intent for this piece to be spoken out loud like a waltz. It helped me zero in on the rhythm right away and the pacing flowed and worked for me. Lovely image, also. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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thx so much JB! :)Sharyn
Comment from Rondeno
Pondering the big questions here, Sharyn, in verse which is masterful and elegant. Great contrast between children, who use concrete concepts, and mature adults, who need to understand phenomena.
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Pondering the big questions here, Sharyn, in verse which is masterful and elegant. Great contrast between children, who use concrete concepts, and mature adults, who need to understand phenomena.
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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thx Michael! :)S
Comment from Curly Girly
The author poses many questions regarding the true purpose of life on earth. Why are we here? And what is our purpose? Is it all just about love and lust? Or is there more?
Why?
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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The author poses many questions regarding the true purpose of life on earth. Why are we here? And what is our purpose? Is it all just about love and lust? Or is there more?
Why?
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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thx so much Nicole! :)S