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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Revival of the Red"5/7/5 poems
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Comment from Nuad1
Very nicely done with minimal words and o-so-appropriate art work! Vampires ARE fascinating creatures and I, for one, believe there is a warm heart in SOME of them. Good poem, created nice mind images.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
Very nicely done with minimal words and o-so-appropriate art work! Vampires ARE fascinating creatures and I, for one, believe there is a warm heart in SOME of them. Good poem, created nice mind images.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from mickbey
A nice 5-7-5, the picture is interesting and seems to fit the imagery of the poem, the alliterations were nice, and I like the expression: "Life-liquor," a rich image, nice effect to the poem as a whole.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
A nice 5-7-5, the picture is interesting and seems to fit the imagery of the poem, the alliterations were nice, and I like the expression: "Life-liquor," a rich image, nice effect to the poem as a whole.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I found this an interesting piece Anupam Shama which captured the character of the vampire well, the use of just one stanza was a interesting approach as well and I like how you made Vampires seem almost desirable as well by giving people a new life.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
I found this an interesting piece Anupam Shama which captured the character of the vampire well, the use of just one stanza was a interesting approach as well and I like how you made Vampires seem almost desirable as well by giving people a new life.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from justatuna
You certainly have a unique style. It hasn't disappointed so far. Like the use of alliteration. Although I find it sometimes overdone, yours works. Creates a certain mood that fits the write. Well done with so few words.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
You certainly have a unique style. It hasn't disappointed so far. Like the use of alliteration. Although I find it sometimes overdone, yours works. Creates a certain mood that fits the write. Well done with so few words.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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I am glad you liked it.i appreciate your comments.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from words
I like your alliterative write on vampire lust:
Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
A tad confused about the "rave" resurrection, but well done.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
I like your alliterative write on vampire lust:
Lurk lusty leeches
love luminal life-liquor
rave resurrection
A tad confused about the "rave" resurrection, but well done.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Alankrita
its your second haiku that i read, and surprisingly this is even better than the last one! its brilliant, kind of creepy yet alluring. accompanied with that picture, this short little poem is unmatched to many that i have read. wow.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
its your second haiku that i read, and surprisingly this is even better than the last one! its brilliant, kind of creepy yet alluring. accompanied with that picture, this short little poem is unmatched to many that i have read. wow.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Wow!!i am glad you liked it so much.i appreciate your comments and those 6 shining stars.it means a lot.a hearty thanks:-)
Comment from TiffanyLeeBaldwin
Very creative more so after reading your notes. I've read a lot of your poetry and you have always done nothing but excellent and above. Good job on this write and keep the good work up. I enjoyed the format as well.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
Very creative more so after reading your notes. I've read a lot of your poetry and you have always done nothing but excellent and above. Good job on this write and keep the good work up. I enjoyed the format as well.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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I am glad you liked.this is just my second poem.i appreciate your encouraging words.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from garrymc5
No vampires seen here.
This is pure desire, carnal and definitely not supernatural,
Despite 'rave resurrection', it is so much like erection.
I am amused!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
No vampires seen here.
This is pure desire, carnal and definitely not supernatural,
Despite 'rave resurrection', it is so much like erection.
I am amused!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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It was about their 'desire' not 'themselves'.
Thorough reading is required in alliterated works.but....
Comment from Terror2s
I love the picture and the color scheme. It adds to the ambiance created by your words. Excellent use of alliteration and good description. T2
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
I love the picture and the color scheme. It adds to the ambiance created by your words. Excellent use of alliteration and good description. T2
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Adri7enne
You went wild with the "L's" Anupam. I know it looks good at first glance, but I always believe the message supercedes the trick words. "love luminal life-liquor' doesn't say a thing to me.
I like the presentation with the red print on black and your art-work is stunning. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
You went wild with the "L's" Anupam. I know it looks good at first glance, but I always believe the message supercedes the trick words. "love luminal life-liquor' doesn't say a thing to me.
I like the presentation with the red print on black and your art-work is stunning. Keep writing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Hello
i appreciate your comments.
"love luminal life-liquor"
here 'luminal' refers to sedative,a class of drugs,and not 'glow'.i think it might have confused you,so just clarified.
Thanks for reading:-)