All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of questions to involve the reader
great use of consonance and alliteration
I love the concept of one butterfly breath separating life and death
good glory/story rhyme
excellent use of occasional rhyme
and effective use of imagery
Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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excellent use of questions to involve the reader
great use of consonance and alliteration
I love the concept of one butterfly breath separating life and death
good glory/story rhyme
excellent use of occasional rhyme
and effective use of imagery
Brooke
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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bless you, Brooke, as always! :)S
Comment from Righteous Riter
This piece contains a very interesting message. The writer does a good job of making the reader think. This piece has good harmony and so what of a grooving melody to it. I like this.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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This piece contains a very interesting message. The writer does a good job of making the reader think. This piece has good harmony and so what of a grooving melody to it. I like this.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much RR! :)S
Comment from donaldww
This excellent free form verse ponders the age old question of life after death. Does it exists? What is it like? Do we disappear like a fireflies in a rainstorm?
Whose keeping score? Well, isn't that what the Pope and his army of minions are paid to do? (Incidentally, the world's cushiest CEO job for life where customer accountability isn't required.)
In the meantime, the best answers may be found yours and your children's dreams and in making the most of your life.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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This excellent free form verse ponders the age old question of life after death. Does it exists? What is it like? Do we disappear like a fireflies in a rainstorm?
Whose keeping score? Well, isn't that what the Pope and his army of minions are paid to do? (Incidentally, the world's cushiest CEO job for life where customer accountability isn't required.)
In the meantime, the best answers may be found yours and your children's dreams and in making the most of your life.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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you always make me smile DW - thank you dear! :)S
Comment from lorijean
Love the way you try and look ahead with the speed of a rollercoaster to try and find the answers, not matter how we try the answers never truly come....
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Love the way you try and look ahead with the speed of a rollercoaster to try and find the answers, not matter how we try the answers never truly come....
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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you've got it lori - thank you my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend I wish I did to you have expressed your thoughts strongly and beautifully this reads very well I enjoyed regards Jill
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Yes my friend I wish I did to you have expressed your thoughts strongly and beautifully this reads very well I enjoyed regards Jill
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much Jill! :)Sharyn