All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Sugared Stars"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Starlit Ink
I love the romance in this free verse. Summer can be a carefree time of young love, and can also bring back that feeling of nostalgia. There is lovely imagery of the sea that brings the reader to the scene. How sweet that they shared chocolate kisses. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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I love the romance in this free verse. Summer can be a carefree time of young love, and can also bring back that feeling of nostalgia. There is lovely imagery of the sea that brings the reader to the scene. How sweet that they shared chocolate kisses. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much my dear! :) S
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is very well written there is a romantic feeling oozing out of this poem I enjoyed well done regards Jill
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Yes my friend this is very well written there is a romantic feeling oozing out of this poem I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much Jill - how's Eric doing???
Comment from dannyleonn
Perfectly, deliciously penned.
Oh Sharyn, I want to be her and do not even like chocolate ice cream. Summer loving' at its finest hour!
Best of luck.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Perfectly, deliciously penned.
Oh Sharyn, I want to be her and do not even like chocolate ice cream. Summer loving' at its finest hour!
Best of luck.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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hey, I just want the CHOCOLATE ICE-CREAM
Comment from Gungalo
he'll hold out his arm
and she'll offer him
chocolate double-dappled kisses
sweet lips, and
the first sugared stars
showering the dark of
summer's
lambent
loving
Exquisite!! For me to say that it really has to be too. I absolutely love it girl. The language, the air of mystery and the free verse. Wow.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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he'll hold out his arm
and she'll offer him
chocolate double-dappled kisses
sweet lips, and
the first sugared stars
showering the dark of
summer's
lambent
loving
Exquisite!! For me to say that it really has to be too. I absolutely love it girl. The language, the air of mystery and the free verse. Wow.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thx so much Gungalo - if a six comes from YOU, then I trust it! Thank you so much for this! SOOOO many fluffy fives - ikky! :)S
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Sigh it was well worth it girl.
Comment from Cornelius2000
Ah, back into the sexy mode again, I see. I like that mode. And I'm always amazed that there seem to be appropriate photos available for any piece of writing. Very nice poem....turns me on.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Ah, back into the sexy mode again, I see. I like that mode. And I'm always amazed that there seem to be appropriate photos available for any piece of writing. Very nice poem....turns me on.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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well lovely! Thx so much Dave! :)S
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This is a very picturesque poem for sure. The words just spread out a full blown picture of delight in every way. Very nicely done. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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This is a very picturesque poem for sure. The words just spread out a full blown picture of delight in every way. Very nicely done. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thank you Evelyn dear! :)S
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
You have written a lovely poem for the love poem contest. I like your descriptive words that slide the page with ease. You have good alliteration throughout as well as enjambments. Your imagery is so vivid I could almost taste the chocolate. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
You have written a lovely poem for the love poem contest. I like your descriptive words that slide the page with ease. You have good alliteration throughout as well as enjambments. Your imagery is so vivid I could almost taste the chocolate. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much chey! :)Sharyn
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of love poetry. You captured the nuances of the game of seduction which often precedes love relationships. very well done in apt diction. kudos
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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This is a beautiful piece of love poetry. You captured the nuances of the game of seduction which often precedes love relationships. very well done in apt diction. kudos
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much Perp! :)S
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
"summer's lambent loving" Love the word 'lambent. Well said, with the imagery of common events trickling down in an uncommon pain to intimacy on a silvered bench by the sea,. Ice cream becomes the common medium that joins two lovers together, sensuous ice cream. Always did feel like I was 18 all over again when eating the stuff. Well crafted and deserving.
Regards:
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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"summer's lambent loving" Love the word 'lambent. Well said, with the imagery of common events trickling down in an uncommon pain to intimacy on a silvered bench by the sea,. Ice cream becomes the common medium that joins two lovers together, sensuous ice cream. Always did feel like I was 18 all over again when eating the stuff. Well crafted and deserving.
Regards:
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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aaah, thank you Stephen! :)Sharyn
Comment from angelmagnet
S, this is so sweet, as sweet as the chocolate ice cream dripping down the cone. The imagery in your lines takes me where you are and lets me see what you see. Great job, Cindy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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S, this is so sweet, as sweet as the chocolate ice cream dripping down the cone. The imagery in your lines takes me where you are and lets me see what you see. Great job, Cindy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx cindy! :)S