All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Red Pearls"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the aging mind that rages against the confinements of this word, great imagery, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the aging mind that rages against the confinements of this word, great imagery, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thanks so much Sweets - it's a new direction for me, so I appreciate your review very much!
Comment from Gungalo
Wow!! This is really good you. I like how you dedicated it to every mother and her daughter and the disclaimed it with the poetry. It a hard hitting price to pay but someone has to do it ... or do they?
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Wow!! This is really good you. I like how you dedicated it to every mother and her daughter and the disclaimed it with the poetry. It a hard hitting price to pay but someone has to do it ... or do they?
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thank you Gungalo - I haven't written anything like this for a long time ... did you understand the general message of the piece clearly?
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Yes I know I did. LOL.
Comment from Opal H.
This peom certainly gives you chills reading it...but I'm sure it was meant to. The words of this poem bring such strong images. Well, I got the imagery in my head, but it kind of passed over my head who the creature really was, and what was really going on.
I'm sure that's just me, though. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This peom certainly gives you chills reading it...but I'm sure it was meant to. The words of this poem bring such strong images. Well, I got the imagery in my head, but it kind of passed over my head who the creature really was, and what was really going on.
I'm sure that's just me, though. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thx Opal - it's my mother, with dementia ... did not that come across clearly enough? if not, I'll put some more work into it!
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You have written that in the last lines but I wasn't sure if it was to be taken literally or figuratively. The poem is good considering not everything need be explicitly put into words; a little should be left abstract. A one line author's note at the bottom would suffice, I'm sure, just to tell readers the 'back story' or inspiration so to speak.
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yes ... I should do that ... I was a reluctant to say "my mother is nuts", but I think I'll put it more diplomatically than that ... good suggestion!
Comment from micci
I thought that your poem was very creative, your choice of words made a great flow to your poem and made it easy to read, I enjoyed it
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I thought that your poem was very creative, your choice of words made a great flow to your poem and made it easy to read, I enjoyed it
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thx Micci! Best wishes, Sharyn