Peach Of The Beach
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3 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
Rhonnie,
You are excellent at prose. Your story about people caught in extreme heat moves along at a good pace, and the reader wonders when will this trio ever get help out of their dire situation. One note: Should it be: there 'were' only four cans of Pepsi left.
This book is fun and interesting. I love the part of the mother; she seems to be a lot of fun.
Good luck in the contest, Rhonnie.
And much luck with all your writing.
Cindy
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Rhonnie,
You are excellent at prose. Your story about people caught in extreme heat moves along at a good pace, and the reader wonders when will this trio ever get help out of their dire situation. One note: Should it be: there 'were' only four cans of Pepsi left.
This book is fun and interesting. I love the part of the mother; she seems to be a lot of fun.
Good luck in the contest, Rhonnie.
And much luck with all your writing.
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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DEAR CINDY: I thank you for being so kind and so thoughtful towards me. I thank you for your generosity in your gifts to me. As usual You are appreciated. About the pepsi...Yes, it should be as you say which is the correct way. I thank you for your help, my friend. God bless you, Cindy. Cordially: rhonnie69.
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I consider you to be a good friend, too, Rhonnie. . I love your poetry and stories. I like to give a small gift every once in a while to show I appreciate a work(s). Have a nice weekend,
Cindy
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a cute portion of an ongoing tale. This particular part was interesting, but it was a little slow moving. I would cut some and move on to the rest of the action.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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This is a cute portion of an ongoing tale. This particular part was interesting, but it was a little slow moving. I would cut some and move on to the rest of the action.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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HELLO SUSAN: Thank you for your review. You are appreciated. I invite you to read my story, "Peach Of The Beach," from chapter to chapter as I write it. You'll find it in my portfolio. Thank you. :rhonnie69.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent exchange of dialog between you and your mother. There is a sense of peace as you describe yourself, your mother and your dog sitting under the tree. Even though you are lost and broke down, a feeling of love and togetherness comes through. Excellent writing here.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Excellent exchange of dialog between you and your mother. There is a sense of peace as you describe yourself, your mother and your dog sitting under the tree. Even though you are lost and broke down, a feeling of love and togetherness comes through. Excellent writing here.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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HELLO MERMAIDS: I thank you for your review. You are appreciated. I invite you to read my story,"Peach Of The Beach," from chapter to chapter as I write it, You will find it in my portfolio. Thank you. rhonnie69.