Peach Of The Beach
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Peach Of The Beach (one)"Female lifeguard.
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Now I have the context for what I read yesterday! This is a fine piece--the suction spiral is a startling image--earns your stars in itself. Powerful! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Now I have the context for what I read yesterday! This is a fine piece--the suction spiral is a startling image--earns your stars in itself. Powerful! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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HELLO ELIZABETH: Thank you for your review. You are appreciated. I invite you to read my story, "Peach Of The Beach," from chapter to chapter as I write it. You will find it in my portfolio. Thank you. fhonnie69.
Comment from lancellot
I think this mostly monologue serves well as an introduction to Peach of the beach. She tells us why she is a lifeguard, her motivation and lets us know that people think she is beautiful. We are told her primary and only goal is to save swimmers.
We will see what part two brings.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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I think this mostly monologue serves well as an introduction to Peach of the beach. She tells us why she is a lifeguard, her motivation and lets us know that people think she is beautiful. We are told her primary and only goal is to save swimmers.
We will see what part two brings.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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HELLO LANCELLOT: Thank you for your review. You are appreciated. I invite you to read my story, "Peach Of The Beach," from chapter to chapter as I write it. You will find it in my portfolio. Thank you. rhonnie69.