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Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7

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Comment from Joan E.
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Thank you for adding another stanza to Gypsy Blue Rose's Renga book and for adding the perfectly complementary, stairway artwork as well. Enjoy the remains of Sunday- Joan

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Butterflies Dream
by June Sargent

Hello, June,

I love Ulla's haiku. Beautiful imagery and presentation. Thank you very much for contributing to the book. Would you please add this to your author notes?


.........................if you would like to add a chapter, please, copy and paste these notes to your author notes.........................

*If you need help posting a chapter, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose*

Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets wich are linked in succession by multiple poets until we reach 184 verses.

From the renga book chapter your in, click on the ADD CHAPTER icon.

If the last poem is a 5/7/5 haiku, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 haiku. Write about the same theme but don't repeating words.

You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.

*If you need help, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose*

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Renga so far...

Chapter one by Gypsy Blue Rose

pigeon plum flowers
bend but not break in the storm
at Indian Key
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Chapter two by June Sargent

storm clouds flee as new day dawns
berries ripen and birds wait
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Chapter three by Pam (respa)

colorful songbirds
gather for spring's ripe berries
bountiful harvest
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Chapter four by Mrs KT

Winged frenzy ignites orchard;
Garnet gems pecked to their death
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Chapter five by Gloria

funeral procession
seed boats drift to a footbridge--
the orchard withdraws
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Chapter six by June Sargent

willow sways in summer breeze
while secret lovers giggle
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Chapter seven by Bill Schott

as lovers linger
red ocean brings back berries
the wine washes in
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Chapter eight by Lyenochka

sun sweetened grapes become wine
divining truth from love's lips
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Chapter nine by Ulla

love grows and ripens
while nature multiplies its
palette of colours.
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Chapter ten by Ameen

Autumn's tones enveloped me
in a warm rainbow landscape
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Chapter eleven by Margaret Bernar

Tender sacrifice
renders one fragile and strong -
Love's unique nature
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Chapter twelve by Zanya

Twilight tints evening skyline
Cooler breezes ripple shore
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Chapter thirteen by June Sargent

wrapped in silken robes
of gold, autumn bids farewell -
first breath of winter
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Chapter fourteen by Dolly

Earth's freeze grips with snowy ice,
to calm, with peaceful silence.
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Chapter fifteen by Rama Devi

blanketed by snow
leaf-whispers enter deep sleep
hushed serenity
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Chapter sixteen by Gypsy Blue Rose

cold whirlwind whistles over
Mount Fuji's peaks and valleys
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Chapter seventeen by Royowen

Kaleidoscopic
dust gathers the frosted light,
panoramic gems.
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Chapter eighteen by Marjon Van Bruggen

winds from the south bring yellow
Sahara desert sand skies
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Chapter nineteen by June Sargent

prickly pear cactus
caressed by warm summer breeze
crimson heart opens
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Chapter twenty by Gypsy Blue Rose

south wind susurrous whispers
of tumbleweed rustling sounds
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Chapter twenty one by Gypsy Blue Rose

farmer prays for rain
for drought-stricken olive trees
resilient souls
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Chapter twenty two by DeboraDyess

Rainbow's sharp, dazzling colors
sitting atop sun-struck clouds

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Chapter twenty three by June. Sargent

lighthouse shines through fog
guiding boat 'round jagged rocks -
wives cook hot chowder
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Chapter twenty four by Lucy de Welles

Hearty alimentation
Strengthens love for hearth and home
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Chapter twenty five by Ulla

yet, the bumpy roads
stretch away in the distance
love is but a dream
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Chapter twenty six by June Sargent

out of cocoon of darkness
hope sprouts wings to follow dreams
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 Comment Written 26-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    I've added the notes and have totally revised my piece to, hopefully, complement Ulla's haiku a little more. I have certainly enjoyed being a part of this project and will enjoy watching how it evolves in the coming weeks. thank you for introducing us to Renga. It's been a great learning experience.
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 26-Jul-2020
    Thank you very much, June. You are helping me move it along and doing a great job.
Comment from Debbie Pope
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Oh, everything about this post is pretty. The picture is so eye appealing and your words are uplifting. Out of darkness comes hope. We will sprout wings to follow dreams. What a romantic image.
This one just made me feel good. Thank you.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    So glad you enjoyed this - always nice to hear from you!
Comment from Cindy Decker
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June,
Your poem can mean so many things: cocoon of darkness can mean despair, or even a life without God, or without knowledge. Once we have hope, we can follow our dreams, or God to happiness and enlightenment. The photo is beautiful. Excellent work.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    Thank you so much for sharing your insights!
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Janice.
-Good syllable count,
imagery, and personification.
-It is interesting to see this
project develop.
-I like how you go from
"the cocoon of darkness" to
hope and following dreams.
-Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    Thank you so much for following this book of Renga!
reply by Pam (respa) on 26-Jul-2020
    You are welcome, June.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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This was absolutely stunning. A gorgeous artistic presentation, picture and font. You packed volumes in these two lines, and they still stand up in my mind. What amazing visuals:

out of cocoon of darkness
hope sprouts wings to follow dreams


 Comment Written 26-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
    So glad you enjoyed this hopeful message! And thank you for the generous rating.