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Comment from Lulube
I can easily relate to your experiences. My favorite concept is; Lord, has my body been abandoned me? (been, take this out)
It seems as if it no longer belongs to me!
Try this
Lord, my body is abandoning me
It's chosen to no longer belong to me
last line; T'is this now to be, all that is left for me - or; T'is this now to be, all that I've got?
just suggestions
lulube
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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I can easily relate to your experiences. My favorite concept is; Lord, has my body been abandoned me? (been, take this out)
It seems as if it no longer belongs to me!
Try this
Lord, my body is abandoning me
It's chosen to no longer belong to me
last line; T'is this now to be, all that is left for me - or; T'is this now to be, all that I've got?
just suggestions
lulube
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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I like your first suggestion that works well.
thanks for reading this I hope you enjoyed it it was a little rather lengthy waiting them to separate date periods.
Ricky
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WELCOME COPD is not the easiest to deal with. I'm wondering how much time do I have before I am on an oxygen tank and how long on that, before my lungs exhale and can't inflate again. I hope I'm in my sleep and so damn tired I won't give a damn. I'm not used to not being able to jump up and do something or lift or just stand for longer than 10 minutes. but I must appreciate the vibrant years that I have had and visit them more often in my mind.
Take care Ricky and here's to our senior years
lulube
Comment from MilaAco
I really enjoyed this. I always admire the faith that some people have in God and how that faith helps them come to terms with many things. It is a beautiful thing.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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I really enjoyed this. I always admire the faith that some people have in God and how that faith helps them come to terms with many things. It is a beautiful thing.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Yes I can agree with you all night and thanks very much for your time considerations and review.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Mia Twysted
I feel a sense of urgancy in this piece. However, I feel broken as I can't tell if this is one piece or two. There lacks a overall tie in for me. But even after that I feel a struggle maybe, or a searching.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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I feel a sense of urgancy in this piece. However, I feel broken as I can't tell if this is one piece or two. There lacks a overall tie in for me. But even after that I feel a struggle maybe, or a searching.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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it's actually written in the text of me and my son of course I didn't die and my body wasn't rising and going through anything but I still feel it so I can write it from above with my son guiding me is it holding the pen maybe that'll give you a little bit more better sense of what I was trying to do?
Thanks Mia.
Ricky