Will I Rise?
a contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
I am a little late reviewing , been away again with important matters, yet, good to read this short poem..it hit the right spots and the rhetoric is there for the questions this asks. Well done.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I am a little late reviewing , been away again with important matters, yet, good to read this short poem..it hit the right spots and the rhetoric is there for the questions this asks. Well done.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Wow! When the promotions end, usually so do the reviews. So, its extra special to get this from you. Thank you, sir!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Once rock bottom has been reached there is only one way to go, and that is up, so I reckon rising from the ash is definitely a possibility, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Once rock bottom has been reached there is only one way to go, and that is up, so I reckon rising from the ash is definitely a possibility, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
A lot of 5 line or short poems lack making sense but this one is awesome;-) EXCELLENT job!
I appreciate you sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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A lot of 5 line or short poems lack making sense but this one is awesome;-) EXCELLENT job!
I appreciate you sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I agree with your assessment of the short form, and I tend shy away from reading or writing them. Thanks for reading mine :)
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Will I Rise?
by Clockwise
Hello, my friend,
Nice entry for the 5 Line Poem contest. Short poems are harder to write than most people think. YOu did a good job. Phoenix rises from ashes.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Will I Rise?
by Clockwise
Hello, my friend,
Nice entry for the 5 Line Poem contest. Short poems are harder to write than most people think. YOu did a good job. Phoenix rises from ashes.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this vividly descriptive and moving piece. It conveys a powerful message about the mindset of someone at rock bottom, wondering if things will ever be better. (Note: I realize some pronounce "fire" as two syllables, but it's not.)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this vividly descriptive and moving piece. It conveys a powerful message about the mindset of someone at rock bottom, wondering if things will ever be better. (Note: I realize some pronounce "fire" as two syllables, but it's not.)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the way the syllable count rises and that the third and fifth line rhyme. We hope the answer is rise from the ash like the phoenix.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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I like the way the syllable count rises and that the third and fifth line rhyme. We hope the answer is rise from the ash like the phoenix.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Although I am a bit perplexed by your review, I thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
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I can understand that. When I saw my rating I knew I made a mistake.
I went back and changed it to a 5 star rating. Sorry about the mistake.
Your welcome.
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Comment from Bill Schott
This five-line poem, Will I Rise, has the proper formatting and begs the question if whether being defeated is permanent or a part of the cycle.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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This five-line poem, Will I Rise, has the proper formatting and begs the question if whether being defeated is permanent or a part of the cycle.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear clockwork, I scarcely know what to say about this post because the question asked, takes my breath away.
The illustration does too. How you chanced to find an image that so enhanced your poem is a six star question too!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Dear clockwork, I scarcely know what to say about this post because the question asked, takes my breath away.
The illustration does too. How you chanced to find an image that so enhanced your poem is a six star question too!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thanks so much for the six! You are absolutely right about the pic, when I saw it, I was blown away. Lucky me!
Comment from Mary Jane Y
Good question for everyone. Putting God in her life she will rise from the ash and that is when people usually seek Him, when they get to their lowest point and there is no where else to go. Great picture and great question to ponder on.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Good question for everyone. Putting God in her life she will rise from the ash and that is when people usually seek Him, when they get to their lowest point and there is no where else to go. Great picture and great question to ponder on.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
A five-line poem provoking some thoughts. There is a serious question in the poem. The answer seems easy, but I guess it is not so easy for the person who feels this way. Broken, dirty and discarded as trash...is that how you see yourself? Did you know that God is there for you, waiting to come to Him for help? He will show you the way out of this trash-heap, to re-shape your life so you can live carefree and happy and prepare yourself to rise from the ash. You can leave the fear of dying in the fire behind you. Trust Him, He loves you, whatever it was that made your life so dirty. Tell him and listen to Him.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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A five-line poem provoking some thoughts. There is a serious question in the poem. The answer seems easy, but I guess it is not so easy for the person who feels this way. Broken, dirty and discarded as trash...is that how you see yourself? Did you know that God is there for you, waiting to come to Him for help? He will show you the way out of this trash-heap, to re-shape your life so you can live carefree and happy and prepare yourself to rise from the ash. You can leave the fear of dying in the fire behind you. Trust Him, He loves you, whatever it was that made your life so dirty. Tell him and listen to Him.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your time and kind review.
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Welcome!