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Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words that captures the impact of the ocean. As a mermaid, I always enjoy reading poems about the ocean and your words capture the beauty and feel of ocean water.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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You have a vivid use of words that captures the impact of the ocean. As a mermaid, I always enjoy reading poems about the ocean and your words capture the beauty and feel of ocean water.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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thanks mermaids always a pleasure Elaine to see your review and work.
There will be quite a few more of these coming up in the next Summers months.
Ricky
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The never ending waves as a metaphor for life, I liked that.
Because there is no such word as sended Ricky, you may want to make a change here?
"And, sended..."
perhaps use the word, "defended" instead.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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The never ending waves as a metaphor for life, I liked that.
Because there is no such word as sended Ricky, you may want to make a change here?
"And, sended..."
perhaps use the word, "defended" instead.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thanks I reread it and of course I made up that word for the rhyming effects so I did add two words and I took that one away.
Hope you like the changes?
I think the next one is better that I'm presenting now?
Ricky
Comment from Flyaway1
I liked the colors used. Without the picture- I might Still think of a black night with waves rolling.
What is it about the ocean that is so calming?
So many metaphors about oceans and sea are used to describe life events.
I could draw out my own person feeling. But I would rather like to think of settling in for sleep-Lulled by the ever crashing waves flowing and ebbing. A rhythm of rest.
I can also smell, feel and hear the ocean in this piece.
I am near my own time to sleep, knowing the sun will break through in the morning.
And isn't that just like God to make it so?
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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I liked the colors used. Without the picture- I might Still think of a black night with waves rolling.
What is it about the ocean that is so calming?
So many metaphors about oceans and sea are used to describe life events.
I could draw out my own person feeling. But I would rather like to think of settling in for sleep-Lulled by the ever crashing waves flowing and ebbing. A rhythm of rest.
I can also smell, feel and hear the ocean in this piece.
I am near my own time to sleep, knowing the sun will break through in the morning.
And isn't that just like God to make it so?
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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First off Miss fly away.
I to write or journal to relieve pain in grief from the Lost first of a 18 year old son back in March 31st 2003 about 8 months later with my spouse who couldn't take it inside and she didn't want to live.
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companies are very selective in who they want my own for businesses but I'm retired from that I'm also a good writer and also the Latter Day Saint with the Church of Jesus Christ with two priesthood.
I'm not just a poet but I'm also a prophet and a Priest.
A friend request you follow me.
I'll take you within the wings of an Angel with the gift of the Holy Ghost and intensify your writing abilities beyond your own you and comprehension.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1025
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