Comment from Karen Iseminger

Excellent

Very nice imagery (both the image and with your words). I have been complaining lately about how brisk the wind is "and it's May for harsh sakes!!!" so I don't love a May breeze... but that's my issue - your poem is lovely. Good luck!

 Comment Written 08-May-2020

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reply by the author on 10-May-2020

Thanks for reading zanya

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

A beautiful poem and presentation. A fine entry for the Uplifting Poetry! writing prompt contest. I wish you the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-May-2020

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reply by the author on 13-May-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely nature piece. The scenes and elements of nature do have a calming, even healing, effect on people. You used a good example of such a scene.

 Comment Written 07-May-2020

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reply by the author on 10-May-2020

Thanks for reading zanya

Comment from Margaret Bednar

Good

I now this is a 5-7-5 and not a haiku (right?) but I still expect a clever last line and this doesn't have it. you could use "budding" to replace fresh and leave off the word "to" at the end - and that frees up another go at a "turn" for the last line. If this is a haiku one is not supposed to name the month - but use imagery perhaps that would only happen in May... Haikus and 5-7-5 are not easy - you are almost there! Or perhaps I am not understanding 5-7-5.

 Comment Written 07-May-2020

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reply by the author on 10-May-2020

Thanks fo r reading zanya